Amazing Mimic
A Minute Poem Entry17 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a fun minute poem about a mocking bird sounding like a car alarm and make lots of other city sounds, they are such funny birds, I enjoyed your wonderful poem, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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This is a fun minute poem about a mocking bird sounding like a car alarm and make lots of other city sounds, they are such funny birds, I enjoyed your wonderful poem, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Thanks! Glad you enjoyed this silly piece.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Amazing mimic by a mockingbird was so shocking but later you shockingly discovered the absurd mimic laughing; very well formatted this minute poetry and simply so nicely crafted the taletelling with a good flow of thoughts; I like.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Amazing mimic by a mockingbird was so shocking but later you shockingly discovered the absurd mimic laughing; very well formatted this minute poetry and simply so nicely crafted the taletelling with a good flow of thoughts; I like.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I have to be honest. Until I read your notes that a mockingbird can mimic an alarm I didn't understand the poem. I thought it was mocking them for losing the car. But it was a fun poem. You tell a story well. Maybe add a little more detail to make that clearer
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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I have to be honest. Until I read your notes that a mockingbird can mimic an alarm I didn't understand the poem. I thought it was mocking them for losing the car. But it was a fun poem. You tell a story well. Maybe add a little more detail to make that clearer
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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The strict format of this style dues not allow room for great detail. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
Comment from Kathleen S.
-Not only did your poem entertain, but you could see the style in which it was written. I felt like you were telling an interesting tale, that had a surprise ending as well. I am impressed by it. :)
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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-Not only did your poem entertain, but you could see the style in which it was written. I felt like you were telling an interesting tale, that had a surprise ending as well. I am impressed by it. :)
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much! I?m glad you enjoyed this piece.
Comment from Puzzle
I hate when people's car alarms go off. Lol. Everyone races to their front doors and tries to see if it's their own car. Then god forbid iif it's yours! Then you have to do the walk of shame outside to turn it off. Hahaha. Great topic choice!
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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I hate when people's car alarms go off. Lol. Everyone races to their front doors and tries to see if it's their own car. Then god forbid iif it's yours! Then you have to do the walk of shame outside to turn it off. Hahaha. Great topic choice!
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good image for your poem.
-I enjoyed this poem very much.
-Good syllable count, imagery, and rhyme.
-You also tell a good story.
-I like all the description
about the car and the alarm.
-The last verse is great with
the mockingbird changing his tune!
-This is a very good entry.
-Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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-A good image for your poem.
-I enjoyed this poem very much.
-Good syllable count, imagery, and rhyme.
-You also tell a good story.
-I like all the description
about the car and the alarm.
-The last verse is great with
the mockingbird changing his tune!
-This is a very good entry.
-Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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I'm glad you caught the errors. I have to admit I submitted the poem at midnight - on my phone while writing in bed. And did not check to see how it all appeared on my laptop til this morning. I have revised it and hopefully it will not be disqualified! Thanks for the headsup!
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A good lesson-don't post at midnight in bed:) You have a brand new review. I loved the poem, and you won't be disqualified!
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, "The blaring car we
had to find
It was not mine
We searched the block
We were in shock
The sound was coming from up high
in midnight sky
A mockingbird
could now be heard
He'd changed his tune
to laughing loon", because that was a very unexpected twist and the end and pretty amazing that it's also a true story!
The Lord led me to this verse after I read this,
Luke 12:24 New International Version (NIV)
24 Consider the ravens: They do not sow or reap, they have no storeroom or barn; yet God feeds them. And how much more valuable you are than birds!
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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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My favorite part was, "The blaring car we
had to find
It was not mine
We searched the block
We were in shock
The sound was coming from up high
in midnight sky
A mockingbird
could now be heard
He'd changed his tune
to laughing loon", because that was a very unexpected twist and the end and pretty amazing that it's also a true story!
The Lord led me to this verse after I read this,
Luke 12:24 New International Version (NIV)
24 Consider the ravens: They do not sow or reap, they have no storeroom or barn; yet God feeds them. And how much more valuable you are than birds!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Thank you!
