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Comment from Beatlegirl61
I am just mesmerized by your technique and the impressive way you get your thoughts and ideas across with such a short amount of wordage...really brilliant and you have actually inspired me to have another try at tanka, seynru and haiku!!
Thanks so much for the good reading and inspiration!!
Take care, be well and all the best...Carol :))
'beatle' quote today: "You don't know what it's like to listen to your fears..."
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I am just mesmerized by your technique and the impressive way you get your thoughts and ideas across with such a short amount of wordage...really brilliant and you have actually inspired me to have another try at tanka, seynru and haiku!!
Thanks so much for the good reading and inspiration!!
Take care, be well and all the best...Carol :))
'beatle' quote today: "You don't know what it's like to listen to your fears..."
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from Airmid
An interetsing tanka, Alcreator. I liked how this piece could be interrepted in many different ways by the reader. Nicely done, stuck to the structure and did it well.
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An interetsing tanka, Alcreator. I liked how this piece could be interrepted in many different ways by the reader. Nicely done, stuck to the structure and did it well.
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from Greywaren
I like it -- do I have to have a reason why?
Very punchy, very to the point, very good.
Somehow in five lines you've accomplished what it takes other poets five stanzas to do -- they could learn a lesson from your succinct writing.
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I like it -- do I have to have a reason why?
Very punchy, very to the point, very good.
Somehow in five lines you've accomplished what it takes other poets five stanzas to do -- they could learn a lesson from your succinct writing.
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from sengwriter
Devil's desire would put us nowhere,
Yet we just run for fun, fun of getting everything.
Nicely composed and very short and precise piece ( A Tanka )
but something expressed is pretty valuable philosophy for mankind
and I appreciated your tackling this weakness of our outlook.
Thank you for such a nice contribution to be shared with us.
Gautam
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Devil's desire would put us nowhere,
Yet we just run for fun, fun of getting everything.
Nicely composed and very short and precise piece ( A Tanka )
but something expressed is pretty valuable philosophy for mankind
and I appreciated your tackling this weakness of our outlook.
Thank you for such a nice contribution to be shared with us.
Gautam
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from Georgina Lenty
This, to me, is a great and simple way of describing greed - very to the point, without over-doing it. Nice wording, easy reading and understanding. Well-written!
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This, to me, is a great and simple way of describing greed - very to the point, without over-doing it. Nice wording, easy reading and understanding. Well-written!
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from Sam Manilla
It's is sad how we all want more than we need. There is always that the desire and hunger for "more, more and more" May we always be able to squelch those desires of the Devils and be able to be content with what we have!
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It's is sad how we all want more than we need. There is always that the desire and hunger for "more, more and more" May we always be able to squelch those desires of the Devils and be able to be content with what we have!
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from Zenbud
Greed is a devil, your brief works are a pleasure to read. I see these people who want and want, yet are never satisfied . . . it comes from within, not without. Good point. Zenbud
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Greed is a devil, your brief works are a pleasure to read. I see these people who want and want, yet are never satisfied . . . it comes from within, not without. Good point. Zenbud
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from Ponder
Hi Alcreator Writer,
I found your Tanka beautufully formed with imaginative language chioces and interesting phrases.
It is also thought proving and interesting to ponder upon.
Ponder
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Hi Alcreator Writer,
I found your Tanka beautufully formed with imaginative language chioces and interesting phrases.
It is also thought proving and interesting to ponder upon.
Ponder
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from MikeSamford
Very nice Writer a fine poem and to each that read it. It may have a deferent meaning, my interruption is evil is here all around me and my only protection id God's love.
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Very nice Writer a fine poem and to each that read it. It may have a deferent meaning, my interruption is evil is here all around me and my only protection id God's love.
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from AlvinTEthington
altought this is what I call more a "postmodern" tanka--the first three lines are not about nature, but the poem still forms an integrated whole, and there once again is the change you are so good at--from exterior in the third line to interior in the fourth.
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altought this is what I call more a "postmodern" tanka--the first three lines are not about nature, but the poem still forms an integrated whole, and there once again is the change you are so good at--from exterior in the third line to interior in the fourth.
Comment Written 29-May-2006
