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Comment from HappyB8888
An interesting piece for surely sure, Al. After reading it I wanted more! *wink* You make your point in few words. The mark of a master. Enjoyed!!
That Happy Chica,
Marcia Ellen
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An interesting piece for surely sure, Al. After reading it I wanted more! *wink* You make your point in few words. The mark of a master. Enjoyed!!
That Happy Chica,
Marcia Ellen
Comment Written 27-Jul-2006
Comment from nora arjuna
A few of your tanka that I can understand. I keep on wondering how you managed to deliver few short lines - for the biggest message. Devils are everywhere, beware...
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A few of your tanka that I can understand. I keep on wondering how you managed to deliver few short lines - for the biggest message. Devils are everywhere, beware...
Comment Written 27-Jul-2006
Comment from chaosrider89
Short and to the point. Flawless poem using a difficult style. It is hard (at least for me) to get the point across in so few lines.
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Short and to the point. Flawless poem using a difficult style. It is hard (at least for me) to get the point across in so few lines.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2006
Comment from EdwardVal
I love the photo, it was absolutely perfect. I think it helped give a visual. I am not familiar with the form used, but you got it. Well expressed.
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I love the photo, it was absolutely perfect. I think it helped give a visual. I am not familiar with the form used, but you got it. Well expressed.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2006
Comment from 1archangel
Excellent point made with a punch
This is the way sermons should be - short and TO THE POINT (You should write for the pastor of my church!)
The reading is powerful, interesting, and certainly makes a statement.
Glad I got to share.
Take care
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Excellent point made with a punch
This is the way sermons should be - short and TO THE POINT (You should write for the pastor of my church!)
The reading is powerful, interesting, and certainly makes a statement.
Glad I got to share.
Take care
Comment Written 26-Jul-2006
Comment from Sue-z-Q
Review of Devils!
Dear ALCREATER:
Interesting words expressing your ideas here to accompany the unusual picture. The meter looks perfect to me. No spag errors jumped up and bit me, so nothing to criticize. Must find tome to check out more of you work. I'm sure in time I'll better understand poetry and be able to give more constructive reviews. Take care and have a good day. Sue-z-Q
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Review of Devils!
Dear ALCREATER:
Interesting words expressing your ideas here to accompany the unusual picture. The meter looks perfect to me. No spag errors jumped up and bit me, so nothing to criticize. Must find tome to check out more of you work. I'm sure in time I'll better understand poetry and be able to give more constructive reviews. Take care and have a good day. Sue-z-Q
Comment Written 26-Jul-2006
Comment from DictionaryGirl
Good job I think, it was short and sweet to the point.
Good structure, I feel the flow could use a little work, other than that I really liked it!
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Good job I think, it was short and sweet to the point.
Good structure, I feel the flow could use a little work, other than that I really liked it!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2006
Comment from CarolinasAngel
We all have a vision of evil and the devil... i think this is a great take on the underside of illusions. I didn't see anything wrong with the tanka. Good poem.
Candy
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We all have a vision of evil and the devil... i think this is a great take on the underside of illusions. I didn't see anything wrong with the tanka. Good poem.
Candy
Comment Written 26-Jul-2006
Comment from JennaJo
I'm becoming a Tanka fan because of you. I loved the artwork that you selected to go with the piece. The poem, concise and thought provoking, is wonderful. Great use of the word "whither". I enjoyed it.
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I'm becoming a Tanka fan because of you. I loved the artwork that you selected to go with the piece. The poem, concise and thought provoking, is wonderful. Great use of the word "whither". I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2006
Comment from mariejames
Nice Tanka. It's technically perfect, with no errors whatsoever. You've done a wonderful job with this poem. It contains an intelligent metaphorical style, that makes the reader want to linger. Great job.
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Nice Tanka. It's technically perfect, with no errors whatsoever. You've done a wonderful job with this poem. It contains an intelligent metaphorical style, that makes the reader want to linger. Great job.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2006
