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Comment from AmoksSoulmate
Great little poem. you captured the essence of greed and gluttomy in so few words, yet sp powerfully. This poem put greedy people in there place, comapring them with tha devil and advising their wanton greed is neither natural nor rational. Great read. Thanks for sharing
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Great little poem. you captured the essence of greed and gluttomy in so few words, yet sp powerfully. This poem put greedy people in there place, comapring them with tha devil and advising their wanton greed is neither natural nor rational. Great read. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 02-Apr-2006
Comment from luna
That was a powerful write in just a few lines -- you're getting really good. I enjoyed the dark poem you produced. My pleasure to read and review. Thanks for sharing it with us!
Jenny
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That was a powerful write in just a few lines -- you're getting really good. I enjoyed the dark poem you produced. My pleasure to read and review. Thanks for sharing it with us!
Jenny
Comment Written 02-Apr-2006
Comment from Adora Bayles
Dear Alcreator: I know the type. They'll do anything to get their way. Devils are passed masters at arguing a pointless point. Their idea of winning is to side-step your logic and keep on blathering trivia. They often win. But woe to their little bitty ego if you learn to drop the ball. Disable your buttons! They can't take it. They wave their arms, bug their eyes, have the kind of temper tantrums that sent you into before you learned their little game...Then they're all sweety pie. The devils!
Adora
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Dear Alcreator: I know the type. They'll do anything to get their way. Devils are passed masters at arguing a pointless point. Their idea of winning is to side-step your logic and keep on blathering trivia. They often win. But woe to their little bitty ego if you learn to drop the ball. Disable your buttons! They can't take it. They wave their arms, bug their eyes, have the kind of temper tantrums that sent you into before you learned their little game...Then they're all sweety pie. The devils!
Adora
Comment Written 02-Apr-2006
Comment from gmarrs
A thought provoking poem. I loved that it was short, succinct, and said volumes about the evils that pile up in our lives because of wanting what'er we see. It does not surprise me that immaturity will not understand this poem. Immaturity is still struggling to obtain every symbol of expression and worth, short of the knowledge it will take to know truth when it is presented. Well done. This is what poetry is about....saying more in fewer words than can be said in volume. I enjoyed it.
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A thought provoking poem. I loved that it was short, succinct, and said volumes about the evils that pile up in our lives because of wanting what'er we see. It does not surprise me that immaturity will not understand this poem. Immaturity is still struggling to obtain every symbol of expression and worth, short of the knowledge it will take to know truth when it is presented. Well done. This is what poetry is about....saying more in fewer words than can be said in volume. I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2006
Comment from LittleDoc
The poem "Devils" is good in content and I especially liked the last line..Devils wish whate'er they see. The poem flows well in thought and sounds. However, line 3 has 6 syllables (3 ra-tion-al) (3 nat-u-al). The red color is perfect for a devil poem.
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The poem "Devils" is good in content and I especially liked the last line..Devils wish whate'er they see. The poem flows well in thought and sounds. However, line 3 has 6 syllables (3 ra-tion-al) (3 nat-u-al). The red color is perfect for a devil poem.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2006
Comment from EmileJP
Your grasp of feelings holds you fast as you reveal light outlined in dark. Your use of simple words and ideas are easy to digest and strike a common cord of familiarity. Your word choices are descriptive and imaginative.
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Your grasp of feelings holds you fast as you reveal light outlined in dark. Your use of simple words and ideas are easy to digest and strike a common cord of familiarity. Your word choices are descriptive and imaginative.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2006
Comment from shelley kaye
uhhh
how exactly do you pronounce "whatever" as TWO syllables??
cause when i prononce it like you have it written
(without the "v")
it's "whater" :-P
sorry :-(
other than that, this was cool
thanx for sharing :-)
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uhhh
how exactly do you pronounce "whatever" as TWO syllables??
cause when i prononce it like you have it written
(without the "v")
it's "whater" :-P
sorry :-(
other than that, this was cool
thanx for sharing :-)
Comment Written 02-Apr-2006
