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Comment from Dear Essay Reviewer
This is a traditional Tanka poem with its perfect syllable counts.
The poet makes a point of the devils that can do anything, anywhere, anytime.
Those devils do not bother rationality, morality, ethics and they only know desire fulfilment at any cost.
This is a clear poem with the message clearly conveyed.
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This is a traditional Tanka poem with its perfect syllable counts.
The poet makes a point of the devils that can do anything, anywhere, anytime.
Those devils do not bother rationality, morality, ethics and they only know desire fulfilment at any cost.
This is a clear poem with the message clearly conveyed.
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from WorstPoetic Reviewer
Yes, this Tanka conveys the nature of devils as they can do, wish whatever they like, so true is the word expressed here so softly, colourfully and in a true poetic order of this genre and it is much liked for its simple attitude.
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Yes, this Tanka conveys the nature of devils as they can do, wish whatever they like, so true is the word expressed here so softly, colourfully and in a true poetic order of this genre and it is much liked for its simple attitude.
Comment Written 13-May-2006
Comment from fastdigits
I hope I'm grasping what you are trying to portray, and that is desire leads to greed, and that can never be satisfied no matter how much
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I hope I'm grasping what you are trying to portray, and that is desire leads to greed, and that can never be satisfied no matter how much
Comment Written 12-May-2006
Comment from One Tooth Smile
This was one of my favorites of your tankas so far, but unfortunately the third stanza has six syllables. It's unfortunate too because that's my favorite line in the poem. Sometimes, I hate forms, but if you're going to use it, I guess you have to stick to it. This poem seemed alive though. Thanks for sharing. One Tooth :)"
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This was one of my favorites of your tankas so far, but unfortunately the third stanza has six syllables. It's unfortunate too because that's my favorite line in the poem. Sometimes, I hate forms, but if you're going to use it, I guess you have to stick to it. This poem seemed alive though. Thanks for sharing. One Tooth :)"
Comment Written 12-May-2006
Comment from minopavlic
Well crafted and impactful message.So few words,simple and free,yet the strength of your poem comes from your own creativety.A thundering monument to the corruptions of greed,deceptions and manipulations.
no_obstacle
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Well crafted and impactful message.So few words,simple and free,yet the strength of your poem comes from your own creativety.A thundering monument to the corruptions of greed,deceptions and manipulations.
no_obstacle
Comment Written 11-May-2006
Comment from Frank Furter
i read that poem and found nothing i then shouted that poem and had some feeling thank you for sharing your work i will look forward into reviewing more of your work
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i read that poem and found nothing i then shouted that poem and had some feeling thank you for sharing your work i will look forward into reviewing more of your work
Comment Written 11-May-2006
Comment from National Scholar
This is another nice Tanka, truly devils do not bother morals and they keep on doing whatever they wish anytime, anywhere, anyhow. Kudos to the gifted poet.
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This is another nice Tanka, truly devils do not bother morals and they keep on doing whatever they wish anytime, anywhere, anyhow. Kudos to the gifted poet.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2006
Comment from lionladroar
Hi Alcreator writer!
So true your short verse, packed full of truth and wisdom. Which exploded for this readers mind once read, full of honest colours. Hoe easy it is to full into the trap of wanting, never being satisfied, restless, findind no content. Well wrote. Mick
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Hi Alcreator writer!
So true your short verse, packed full of truth and wisdom. Which exploded for this readers mind once read, full of honest colours. Hoe easy it is to full into the trap of wanting, never being satisfied, restless, findind no content. Well wrote. Mick
Comment Written 04-Apr-2006
Comment from ishta
This makes more sense to me. We all want more of the good things, and more keeps us going. It's not unnatural, but what is too much. And when do you stop giving? Good questions. Interesting thoughts. Thanks for sharing.
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This makes more sense to me. We all want more of the good things, and more keeps us going. It's not unnatural, but what is too much. And when do you stop giving? Good questions. Interesting thoughts. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2006
Comment from judybonin
i really liked the last line in this poem. an idea... devils covet all they see. The colors chosen added nicely to the mood. i think this is very well done. Judy
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i really liked the last line in this poem. an idea... devils covet all they see. The colors chosen added nicely to the mood. i think this is very well done. Judy
Comment Written 03-Apr-2006
