Oh Life!
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Comment from cvcopac
While I admire your will, determination, and vision I do see that you could do a lot to improve your writing skills. I see the inspiration only because you noted it. You have to communicate. I know you have a lot to say. Comunicate, Al. Communicate. Kenny
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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While I admire your will, determination, and vision I do see that you could do a lot to improve your writing skills. I see the inspiration only because you noted it. You have to communicate. I know you have a lot to say. Comunicate, Al. Communicate. Kenny
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
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Comment from prayingpoet
I guess it's good you have plenty of notes cause I would not have the foggiest idea what you were trying to convey without them and even with them I am not sure.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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I guess it's good you have plenty of notes cause I would not have the foggiest idea what you were trying to convey without them and even with them I am not sure.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
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Comment from adewpearl
who is going to read nap and think it means steal without reading your glossary?
This is another example of your not writing with the goal of communicating. A poem should stand on its own without lengthy glossaries and explanations of which lines are ironic
naebody - sounds like you're attempting Scottish dialect, but why?
the poem is choppy and confusing, Al.
Again, I sense you have something significant you have to say, but if hardly anyone can understand it, what purpose have you served?
Brooke
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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who is going to read nap and think it means steal without reading your glossary?
This is another example of your not writing with the goal of communicating. A poem should stand on its own without lengthy glossaries and explanations of which lines are ironic
naebody - sounds like you're attempting Scottish dialect, but why?
the poem is choppy and confusing, Al.
Again, I sense you have something significant you have to say, but if hardly anyone can understand it, what purpose have you served?
Brooke
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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THANKS
Comment from c_lucas
The lower you are on the social scale, the higher your chance of being persecuted. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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The lower you are on the social scale, the higher your chance of being persecuted. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
Comment from 9999pool
Be nothing. We do not need prove of our capabilities and well being. We can be nothing in terms of fame and power. But under various circumstances we can have a definite say on family matter. If we think we are nobody or nothing, then we are doomed.
Good write and thanks for the author's notes to make this story reads easier.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
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Be nothing. We do not need prove of our capabilities and well being. We can be nothing in terms of fame and power. But under various circumstances we can have a definite say on family matter. If we think we are nobody or nothing, then we are doomed.
Good write and thanks for the author's notes to make this story reads easier.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
Comment from Black_Oxygen
With very few words, this poetry speaks, in numerous
ways, of emptiness or a void. The language-play is
challenging. Thank You for your creation.
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With very few words, this poetry speaks, in numerous
ways, of emptiness or a void. The language-play is
challenging. Thank You for your creation.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
Comment from beccabootie123
this is awesome as usual, nil naught. how do you come up with this stuff and why aren't I seeing you on all the shelves of every bookstore in the world my man. completely enjoyed this and all your work it seems.
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this is awesome as usual, nil naught. how do you come up with this stuff and why aren't I seeing you on all the shelves of every bookstore in the world my man. completely enjoyed this and all your work it seems.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
Comment from Righteous Riter
I had to read this twice to get the full impact of the message. The second time I read it, I incorporated the authors notes and this piece became a lot clearer. Good job.
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I had to read this twice to get the full impact of the message. The second time I read it, I incorporated the authors notes and this piece became a lot clearer. Good job.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
Comment from sweetwoodjax
i am glad for the author notes because this would be hard to decipher otherwise. i think it's terrible how the homeless are treated, i myself have been guilty of turning my face at times.
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i am glad for the author notes because this would be hard to decipher otherwise. i think it's terrible how the homeless are treated, i myself have been guilty of turning my face at times.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Interesting message here and indeed, I get you on this one. Your writing reminds me of a social experiment about the guy who can walk into any five star hotel in a suit and not be questioned where as the same guy walks in with jeans and a t-shirt and gets eye-balled and questioned. Your poem has a lot of catchy "n's..he heh but ring so true. Cheers.
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Interesting message here and indeed, I get you on this one. Your writing reminds me of a social experiment about the guy who can walk into any five star hotel in a suit and not be questioned where as the same guy walks in with jeans and a t-shirt and gets eye-balled and questioned. Your poem has a lot of catchy "n's..he heh but ring so true. Cheers.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
