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Comment from TheRunner
Even if you are a creative genious no reader wants to struggle with the pains of interprseting and going down for notes then back to the writting for more interpreting, in the effort the flow, if it had one is lost now, you should some how incorporate a more easy plan without causing so much frustration, other reviewers are not commenting at all on what the meaning of the poem means, or even how they see it or understand it, they simply say good and are rating it with a good review all for the dollars you have on it and not for the content of the poem at all, if that weren't true i would love for any of them to explain their professional reviews for this seeing that none of them ever say anything about the idea of the writing
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Even if you are a creative genious no reader wants to struggle with the pains of interprseting and going down for notes then back to the writting for more interpreting, in the effort the flow, if it had one is lost now, you should some how incorporate a more easy plan without causing so much frustration, other reviewers are not commenting at all on what the meaning of the poem means, or even how they see it or understand it, they simply say good and are rating it with a good review all for the dollars you have on it and not for the content of the poem at all, if that weren't true i would love for any of them to explain their professional reviews for this seeing that none of them ever say anything about the idea of the writing
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006
Comment from rhymer1
How wonderful to play with the word's connotations and fill the Tanka with such same-sounding words. I find it one of the most hidden-thought-explicitly-stated combinations ever to be posted on fs. Probable the hidden-thought comment comes from the fact that I fetched up from my memory banks all the definitions you put in your final note before I read it. That was a task, and I missed a few. A solid five bordering on a six for packing so much into a Tanka. Cheers, rhymer1
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How wonderful to play with the word's connotations and fill the Tanka with such same-sounding words. I find it one of the most hidden-thought-explicitly-stated combinations ever to be posted on fs. Probable the hidden-thought comment comes from the fact that I fetched up from my memory banks all the definitions you put in your final note before I read it. That was a task, and I missed a few. A solid five bordering on a six for packing so much into a Tanka. Cheers, rhymer1
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006
Comment from mayflowerbg
Hi, ACWriter!
Your tanka made me remember something very important: not all penniless are poor. Though I don't have a single penny in the bank and took a loan to buy a computer, I don't think I'm poor, I'm spiritually a very wealthy person. And do you know, I'm a wealthy person because I've got great friends, including this site, too.
They nab, call "naebody"
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See what you can do with the above line, maybe: They call "naebody".
M.
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Hi, ACWriter!
Your tanka made me remember something very important: not all penniless are poor. Though I don't have a single penny in the bank and took a loan to buy a computer, I don't think I'm poor, I'm spiritually a very wealthy person. And do you know, I'm a wealthy person because I've got great friends, including this site, too.
They nab, call "naebody"
--1-----2-------3-----4---5--6
See what you can do with the above line, maybe: They call "naebody".
M.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006
Comment from stpthepresses
Short and sweet with a very clear and real message, which at the same time has a sense of fun. The only qualm I have about it is that an average reader without your word key would be lost in the storm of meaning.
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Short and sweet with a very clear and real message, which at the same time has a sense of fun. The only qualm I have about it is that an average reader without your word key would be lost in the storm of meaning.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006
Comment from Anderson Cunningham
I can definitely feel the words used. This is very beautiful, very catchy--like a song. I may be singing it all day long.
The reason I give you four is because it's short. It needs more words. The reader, who is me at this point, wants to read more about this. Wants to know more about it.
As is, it's like a chorus without any other lyrics.
It simply needs more words.
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I can definitely feel the words used. This is very beautiful, very catchy--like a song. I may be singing it all day long.
The reason I give you four is because it's short. It needs more words. The reader, who is me at this point, wants to read more about this. Wants to know more about it.
As is, it's like a chorus without any other lyrics.
It simply needs more words.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006
Comment from empress2k
I give it five stars for inventiveness and, after translating it, its concept. However, I still think writing in another language can be highly problematic. I had to write down the translation before I understood the meaning. What if I start mixing with Russian? I don't think it would be highly welcomed by my readers if they would have to translate 2/3 of the poem, even if it were beautifully rhymed short piece.
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I give it five stars for inventiveness and, after translating it, its concept. However, I still think writing in another language can be highly problematic. I had to write down the translation before I understood the meaning. What if I start mixing with Russian? I don't think it would be highly welcomed by my readers if they would have to translate 2/3 of the poem, even if it were beautifully rhymed short piece.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006
Comment from joyshri
The words are interesting. Your notes were required to understand this piece. Maybe I am wrong but I miss your usual depth though there is plenty of alliteration.. I miss the great philosophical poet you are today. But that is a very personal opinion. You can disagree entirely with me..Joyshri.
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The words are interesting. Your notes were required to understand this piece. Maybe I am wrong but I miss your usual depth though there is plenty of alliteration.. I miss the great philosophical poet you are today. But that is a very personal opinion. You can disagree entirely with me..Joyshri.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Okay, I don't know how you pulled this off but after reading the author notes and reading again, I'm amazed! You did a wonderful job with this. Very nice work!
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Okay, I don't know how you pulled this off but after reading the author notes and reading again, I'm amazed! You did a wonderful job with this. Very nice work!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006
Comment from Kyrielle
Hi, Alcreator. Very creative tanka. And so, we are nada, nothing, when we are penniless. So goes the world!
Well, most of us will fit into the nadir, nada slot, especially if we are writers, lol.
So we go along our way, happy though doomed.
Laughing here. Enjoyed this very much. Kay :)
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Hi, Alcreator. Very creative tanka. And so, we are nada, nothing, when we are penniless. So goes the world!
Well, most of us will fit into the nadir, nada slot, especially if we are writers, lol.
So we go along our way, happy though doomed.
Laughing here. Enjoyed this very much. Kay :)
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006
Comment from goldferris
This is a great unconventional poem. I like the repetitive it was. The repeating theme, words, and the letter 'n' made the poem fun to read. Good job, Mr. Poet.
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This is a great unconventional poem. I like the repetitive it was. The repeating theme, words, and the letter 'n' made the poem fun to read. Good job, Mr. Poet.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006
