Oh Life!
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Comment from Irina
Very creative tanka!
I like all tankas no matter what is the subject of it. But your work made me a student again. Thank you for the lesson!
Irina
Very creative tanka!
I like all tankas no matter what is the subject of it. But your work made me a student again. Thank you for the lesson!
Irina
Comment Written 19-Jul-2006
Comment from lovebear641
Al i just couldnt follow this one . maybe to many words starting with an -N- i got totally lost here . your such a great writer i'm gonna give you a 5 and the picture you used here really told more about the poem than the words .
Al i just couldnt follow this one . maybe to many words starting with an -N- i got totally lost here . your such a great writer i'm gonna give you a 5 and the picture you used here really told more about the poem than the words .
Comment Written 19-Jul-2006
Comment from Mrs Jones
A bit of a struggle to decipher. The structure is correct.
""No room", "nae game", "doom you are"! " The last line is cool.
Cheers
Rose
A bit of a struggle to decipher. The structure is correct.
""No room", "nae game", "doom you are"! " The last line is cool.
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 19-Jul-2006
Comment from Shari_K
I've been away from this site for quite a while and I must say I see many different writers as well as beautiful poems. You managed to say a lot in few words, I am familiar with the Tanka style and I think this was very well done and very creative with the different language as well!
I've been away from this site for quite a while and I must say I see many different writers as well as beautiful poems. You managed to say a lot in few words, I am familiar with the Tanka style and I think this was very well done and very creative with the different language as well!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006
Comment from YTRich
I'm new to poetry and I have to admit sometimes I don't get it. I felt a little nervous, on edge when I read it. the art work certainly drives it home.
Thank you. Filled with emotion. Thank you
I'm new to poetry and I have to admit sometimes I don't get it. I felt a little nervous, on edge when I read it. the art work certainly drives it home.
Thank you. Filled with emotion. Thank you
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006
Comment from Quetta036
Very well written. A really nicely presented piece of poetry. Great job on the vivid imagery throughout and a good flow as well. Very nice work!
Very well written. A really nicely presented piece of poetry. Great job on the vivid imagery throughout and a good flow as well. Very nice work!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006
Comment from Ballarina
I'm giving you five stars even though I am not sure I understand this exactly. I see it's play on words and I think it is probably more clever than I can realize without
knowing all the hidden meaning
ballarina
I'm giving you five stars even though I am not sure I understand this exactly. I see it's play on words and I think it is probably more clever than I can realize without
knowing all the hidden meaning
ballarina
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006
Comment from tuskantail
I'm sorry, but you well and truly lost me with this one. By the time I looked up the interpretation and tried to fit it in to the rest, I had forgotten what it was that I was looking up. I usually like your writing very much, but this one I struggled.
I'm sorry, but you well and truly lost me with this one. By the time I looked up the interpretation and tried to fit it in to the rest, I had forgotten what it was that I was looking up. I usually like your writing very much, but this one I struggled.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006
Comment from Sheila Bruce
While I understand the message you are trying to convey, I found this piece to be alot of work to decipher, which dramatically reduced my enjoyment of it. This seems unnecessarily cryptic -- or maybe it's just me.
While I understand the message you are trying to convey, I found this piece to be alot of work to decipher, which dramatically reduced my enjoyment of it. This seems unnecessarily cryptic -- or maybe it's just me.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006
Comment from Donaya Haymond
That short little piece, with just a few lines, conveys the heartache and pain of millions, who have been brushed aside despite their great worth. Fantastic job, and I enjoyed reading it.
That short little piece, with just a few lines, conveys the heartache and pain of millions, who have been brushed aside despite their great worth. Fantastic job, and I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2006