Comment from Irina

Excellent

Very creative tanka!
I like all tankas no matter what is the subject of it. But your work made me a student again. Thank you for the lesson!

Irina

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2006

Comment from lovebear641

Excellent

Al i just couldnt follow this one . maybe to many words starting with an -N- i got totally lost here . your such a great writer i'm gonna give you a 5 and the picture you used here really told more about the poem than the words .

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2006

Comment from Mrs Jones

Good

A bit of a struggle to decipher. The structure is correct.
""No room", "nae game", "doom you are"! " The last line is cool.

Cheers
Rose

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2006

Comment from Shari_K

Excellent

I've been away from this site for quite a while and I must say I see many different writers as well as beautiful poems. You managed to say a lot in few words, I am familiar with the Tanka style and I think this was very well done and very creative with the different language as well!

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2006

Comment from YTRich

Good

I'm new to poetry and I have to admit sometimes I don't get it. I felt a little nervous, on edge when I read it. the art work certainly drives it home.
Thank you. Filled with emotion. Thank you

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2006

Comment from Quetta036

Excellent

Very well written. A really nicely presented piece of poetry. Great job on the vivid imagery throughout and a good flow as well. Very nice work!

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2006

Comment from Ballarina

Excellent

I'm giving you five stars even though I am not sure I understand this exactly. I see it's play on words and I think it is probably more clever than I can realize without
knowing all the hidden meaning
ballarina

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2006

Comment from tuskantail

Good

I'm sorry, but you well and truly lost me with this one. By the time I looked up the interpretation and tried to fit it in to the rest, I had forgotten what it was that I was looking up. I usually like your writing very much, but this one I struggled.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2006

Comment from Sheila Bruce

Good

While I understand the message you are trying to convey, I found this piece to be alot of work to decipher, which dramatically reduced my enjoyment of it. This seems unnecessarily cryptic -- or maybe it's just me.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2006

Comment from Donaya Haymond

Excellent

That short little piece, with just a few lines, conveys the heartache and pain of millions, who have been brushed aside despite their great worth. Fantastic job, and I enjoyed reading it.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2006