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Comment from XNTrick
Interesting use of regional brogue to evoke whatever it is you're evoking. Beyond the clever alliteration, though, I didn't really get much from this; seems to be saying it's ok to be penniless. Fair enough, but kind of an abstruse way to say it.
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Interesting use of regional brogue to evoke whatever it is you're evoking. Beyond the clever alliteration, though, I didn't really get much from this; seems to be saying it's ok to be penniless. Fair enough, but kind of an abstruse way to say it.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2006
Comment from mariejames
What an interesting piece of poetry. It definitely has a style and mood all its' own. It's a real departure; creative. Thanks for sharing.
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What an interesting piece of poetry. It definitely has a style and mood all its' own. It's a real departure; creative. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2006
Comment from Renee' J Thomas
I know it is a tanka poem and I am not particularly fond of them to begin with, but this one I read several times and still don't care for it. For your message to be portrayed you did use many appropriate words to describe what one would say to a penniless person, but perhaps it is the order they are written in, I just don't care for it. I don't think the average reader will understand it.
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I know it is a tanka poem and I am not particularly fond of them to begin with, but this one I read several times and still don't care for it. For your message to be portrayed you did use many appropriate words to describe what one would say to a penniless person, but perhaps it is the order they are written in, I just don't care for it. I don't think the average reader will understand it.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2006
Comment from jen121676
Awesome! I had to read it a couple of times, to get the full meaning, but I was very impressed...your meaning is strong , and your words are great. Great job.
~Jenny~
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Awesome! I had to read it a couple of times, to get the full meaning, but I was very impressed...your meaning is strong , and your words are great. Great job.
~Jenny~
Comment Written 19-Jul-2006
Comment from Dand44
Sorry I didn't understand the writing. I had to read it over and over again but still came up with nothing. I'm sure it must have meant something to you, however I could not get what you were trying to portray.
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Sorry I didn't understand the writing. I had to read it over and over again but still came up with nothing. I'm sure it must have meant something to you, however I could not get what you were trying to portray.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2006
Comment from mslink1
I love the imagery you planted in my mind. Thank God "He has no respect of person," for mankind sure does. There are many ways to be rich, money is only one of those ways. The picture is well suited for this piece. Thanks for the notes. Mary
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I love the imagery you planted in my mind. Thank God "He has no respect of person," for mankind sure does. There are many ways to be rich, money is only one of those ways. The picture is well suited for this piece. Thanks for the notes. Mary
Comment Written 19-Jul-2006
Comment from Adrianne17
I know you are an excellent writer, but I must admit that this poem I just couldn't enjoy. It was probably the use of all the Scottish terms. I had to keep going back to find the definitions. It was clever once I read it through a few times.
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I know you are an excellent writer, but I must admit that this poem I just couldn't enjoy. It was probably the use of all the Scottish terms. I had to keep going back to find the definitions. It was clever once I read it through a few times.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2006
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi ALCREATOR, I liked the differnt type of wording (great), thanks for the notes they helped so much to better understand your Tanka poem even if you did use Poetic License . I liked it.
Gert
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Hi ALCREATOR, I liked the differnt type of wording (great), thanks for the notes they helped so much to better understand your Tanka poem even if you did use Poetic License . I liked it.
Gert
Comment Written 19-Jul-2006
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
Hmm.
It seems to me that if you need to include translatory notes for a five line poem, you may want to reconsider the nature of the poem. Does the premise fit within a Tanka format? Would a less restrictive format lend itself to translation of the poem by the reader better?
Food for thought, Al.
:0)
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Hmm.
It seems to me that if you need to include translatory notes for a five line poem, you may want to reconsider the nature of the poem. Does the premise fit within a Tanka format? Would a less restrictive format lend itself to translation of the poem by the reader better?
Food for thought, Al.
:0)
Comment Written 19-Jul-2006
Comment from starkat
HI, Porque usted le gusta hacer nada? Because if you can be nothing, then you can be everything. Richness in spirit cannot find a place to settle in if the ego is already tall or full of a lot of somethings. If you can be nothing, then a resulting desirelessness creates freedom and can eliminate egocentric suffering. You are 'doom' and doomed to a shallow, ego blind existence, if you can't truly understand the importance of what it is to " Be nadir, nada!" Those who learn this aspect of being are perhaps more enlightened, freer, and have more pennys...but, the ego trap is still there and nature abhors a vaccuum. So.. doom we are! Enjoyed your Tanka treat. Muchas gracias. :-)
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HI, Porque usted le gusta hacer nada? Because if you can be nothing, then you can be everything. Richness in spirit cannot find a place to settle in if the ego is already tall or full of a lot of somethings. If you can be nothing, then a resulting desirelessness creates freedom and can eliminate egocentric suffering. You are 'doom' and doomed to a shallow, ego blind existence, if you can't truly understand the importance of what it is to " Be nadir, nada!" Those who learn this aspect of being are perhaps more enlightened, freer, and have more pennys...but, the ego trap is still there and nature abhors a vaccuum. So.. doom we are! Enjoyed your Tanka treat. Muchas gracias. :-)
Comment Written 19-Jul-2006
