Oh Life!
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Comment from Bill Schott
This is quite a statement of not making the grade with the people around you. I assume that the use of 'tall' is the same as 'very'... like very broke. Good stuff.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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This is quite a statement of not making the grade with the people around you. I assume that the use of 'tall' is the same as 'very'... like very broke. Good stuff.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for the review
Comment from azulazul
ALCREATOR WRITER,
Short, and powerful, thank you for the author notes it is very considerate of you to
include just in case.
Great Poem
Azulazul
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ALCREATOR WRITER,
Short, and powerful, thank you for the author notes it is very considerate of you to
include just in case.
Great Poem
Azulazul
Comment Written 24-Jul-2006
Comment from jackiesmuse
Be Nada! has musicality, heartache and passion.
The experience is complete? now that the tanka is complete. What would be the symbolic attachment offered?
Be nadir, nada! 5
When tall penniless you are 7
They nab, call "naebody" 6 [nae.bod.y 3]
Nap and name you "na", "naething" 7
"No room", "nae game", "doom you are"! 7
By my count, there are 6 syllables in the third line instead of the customary 5.
I love the musicality of this tanka, as well as its intensity.
Jackie
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Be Nada! has musicality, heartache and passion.
The experience is complete? now that the tanka is complete. What would be the symbolic attachment offered?
Be nadir, nada! 5
When tall penniless you are 7
They nab, call "naebody" 6 [nae.bod.y 3]
Nap and name you "na", "naething" 7
"No room", "nae game", "doom you are"! 7
By my count, there are 6 syllables in the third line instead of the customary 5.
I love the musicality of this tanka, as well as its intensity.
Jackie
Comment Written 21-Jul-2006
Comment from Dklrdmcches
Interesting poem you have here. The strength in your words are apparent and the message is for all to hear and understand. great poem done in such a quick and painless matter. thank you for sharing...dklrd
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Interesting poem you have here. The strength in your words are apparent and the message is for all to hear and understand. great poem done in such a quick and painless matter. thank you for sharing...dklrd
Comment Written 20-Jul-2006
Comment from Sheri58
I liked it. Throwing in the different words added to the message. You can say every country has their stereotypes, but in this I get that penniless is penniless, no matter where you are from, no matter how you state it! You are shunned, and no one "knows" how cunning.
Sheri
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I liked it. Throwing in the different words added to the message. You can say every country has their stereotypes, but in this I get that penniless is penniless, no matter where you are from, no matter how you state it! You are shunned, and no one "knows" how cunning.
Sheri
Comment Written 20-Jul-2006
Comment from rl dubour
Be Nada!-- very powerful with a great message, when I was working I would put an empty box in the back of my vehicle and by the end of the week I would have a full box of empty cans, Every Monday during my travels of the city, I would pull over one of the city's street people pushing their carriage they collected cans in. They would get all nervous as I called them over. I would then go to the back and empty my box into their carriage, just the look on their faces was of great value to me, as they so much appreciated this little gesture. Was something I enjoyed doing, always tried to do at least one thing a day to help out a stranger. Your write reminded me of this, ron
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Be Nada!-- very powerful with a great message, when I was working I would put an empty box in the back of my vehicle and by the end of the week I would have a full box of empty cans, Every Monday during my travels of the city, I would pull over one of the city's street people pushing their carriage they collected cans in. They would get all nervous as I called them over. I would then go to the back and empty my box into their carriage, just the look on their faces was of great value to me, as they so much appreciated this little gesture. Was something I enjoyed doing, always tried to do at least one thing a day to help out a stranger. Your write reminded me of this, ron
Comment Written 20-Jul-2006
Comment from hollydee
How sad. It very simply puts so much negativity in one poem, I couldn't help but feel sorry for the poor individual and their status. The picture helped evoke dismal emotions as well. You did a brilliant job of getting me caught up in the worthless emotions. I couldn't feel like I was the one speaking but I certainly felt like I was the one looked down upon.
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How sad. It very simply puts so much negativity in one poem, I couldn't help but feel sorry for the poor individual and their status. The picture helped evoke dismal emotions as well. You did a brilliant job of getting me caught up in the worthless emotions. I couldn't feel like I was the one speaking but I certainly felt like I was the one looked down upon.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2006
Comment from cutie
Good!
Why good: pennilessness in pocket bad
Why good: pennilessness in following generality very bad
Why good: pennilessness in paying satans' taxes too bad
Being pennilessness has multiple pennies that pays debt of honour only..
and that's why it's name "pennilessness"..
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Good!
Why good: pennilessness in pocket bad
Why good: pennilessness in following generality very bad
Why good: pennilessness in paying satans' taxes too bad
Being pennilessness has multiple pennies that pays debt of honour only..
and that's why it's name "pennilessness"..
Comment Written 20-Jul-2006
Comment from Achitka
Hey this sort of reminds me of your reviews - and like them left me midly confused and befuddled... Is a good sign I know - mebeh I need to sleep more. Anyway was fun to ry to figure it all out.
achitka
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Hey this sort of reminds me of your reviews - and like them left me midly confused and befuddled... Is a good sign I know - mebeh I need to sleep more. Anyway was fun to ry to figure it all out.
achitka
Comment Written 20-Jul-2006
Comment from drivenbackward
Looks as though a lot of work went into this one. If not, even more impressive. I see what your saying, but I don't think the penniless are treated bad so often. Either way, nice piece of work. Short and sweet.
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Looks as though a lot of work went into this one. If not, even more impressive. I see what your saying, but I don't think the penniless are treated bad so often. Either way, nice piece of work. Short and sweet.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2006
