haiku-tattered windblown clouds
haiku contest17 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Val,
Ooooohhh... I like this image you're presenting. I scrolled down and then scrolled back up so that only the haiku was visible (did that make sense?) hahaha The picture was cut off from my view - is what I'm saying.
When I read the poem again the haiku was just as vivid and strong, if not more so. I could see the rays of light streaming through those 'tattered' and 'windblown clouds'. BTW, I LOVE the 'tattered' part.
Somehow, right now, in the midst of this C-19 thing, 'tattered' just seems like a really appropriate word. Am I crazy?
I enjoyed the whole presentation and thought your satori was just right. hahaha It was 'illuminating'. hehe
This is a lovely entry for the contest. Good luck to you!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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Val,
Ooooohhh... I like this image you're presenting. I scrolled down and then scrolled back up so that only the haiku was visible (did that make sense?) hahaha The picture was cut off from my view - is what I'm saying.
When I read the poem again the haiku was just as vivid and strong, if not more so. I could see the rays of light streaming through those 'tattered' and 'windblown clouds'. BTW, I LOVE the 'tattered' part.
Somehow, right now, in the midst of this C-19 thing, 'tattered' just seems like a really appropriate word. Am I crazy?
I enjoyed the whole presentation and thought your satori was just right. hahaha It was 'illuminating'. hehe
This is a lovely entry for the contest. Good luck to you!
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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Thank you, a fabulous review as ALWAYS. Yes, we are all a little "tattered" right now. Hope you are well and staying put. Val
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Thanks! I'm good!
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Val, this is a lovely haiku, my friend. I hate it when the FS editor refuses to let you do things correctly, but you have addressed it well in your notes.Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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Val, this is a lovely haiku, my friend. I hate it when the FS editor refuses to let you do things correctly, but you have addressed it well in your notes.Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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Thank you for this lovely review Val
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
First two lines expressed Nature so wonderful but human expression in the third line I get no 'aha' effect for we read the craft of expression in third line; it appears to me so casually worded; I rate five for the endeavour.
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First two lines expressed Nature so wonderful but human expression in the third line I get no 'aha' effect for we read the craft of expression in third line; it appears to me so casually worded; I rate five for the endeavour.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and very well written haiku you have penned with very good descriptive words and very beautiful imagery from the art work you chose. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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This is a very beautiful and very well written haiku you have penned with very good descriptive words and very beautiful imagery from the art work you chose. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from Frank Jauregui
I think this haiku will do well in this contest. The negative connotations of tattered windblown clouds are contrasted by the illumination that was hidden behind them. The image you chose compliments your piece as well. Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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I think this haiku will do well in this contest. The negative connotations of tattered windblown clouds are contrasted by the illumination that was hidden behind them. The image you chose compliments your piece as well. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thank you for this lovely review
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, this completes so well the picture or the picture reflects so well the words :"
tattered windblown clouds
let golden light filter through
illumination" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Wow, this completes so well the picture or the picture reflects so well the words :"
tattered windblown clouds
let golden light filter through
illumination" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the lovely review
Comment from LisaMay
I like your presentation very much here. The word tattered makes us think of damaged, worn out items, while the golden light filtering through is an image of richness. The combination provides the moment of illumination when we can see the value in both.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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I like your presentation very much here. The word tattered makes us think of damaged, worn out items, while the golden light filtering through is an image of richness. The combination provides the moment of illumination when we can see the value in both.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the beautiful review.
Comment from June Sargent
I really like the word tattered to describe the clouds. Often they are described as wispy or cottony. Tattered reminds me of curtains that let the light shine through. Illumination is the perfect a ha moment. Great job.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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I really like the word tattered to describe the clouds. Often they are described as wispy or cottony. Tattered reminds me of curtains that let the light shine through. Illumination is the perfect a ha moment. Great job.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much, as you have encouraged me to promote this again.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku about the windblown clouds that filter through a golden light behind the dark clouds and gives a glimpse of illumination from the sun.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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A very well-written haiku about the windblown clouds that filter through a golden light behind the dark clouds and gives a glimpse of illumination from the sun.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from RShipp
The picture you selected was perfect for your poem
What a beautiful descriptive way to describe clouds. I could clearly see them in my mind.
Best of luck in the Haiku contest.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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The picture you selected was perfect for your poem
What a beautiful descriptive way to describe clouds. I could clearly see them in my mind.
Best of luck in the Haiku contest.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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Thank you
