Oh Life!
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Comment from cvcopac
Across the street, and maybe two blocks obliquely north by west, a ferris wheel spins lazily above the roof and tree tops, like an apparition this sombre rainy morning. Mechanical politics rotating parallel to the heavens and all is quiet.
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Across the street, and maybe two blocks obliquely north by west, a ferris wheel spins lazily above the roof and tree tops, like an apparition this sombre rainy morning. Mechanical politics rotating parallel to the heavens and all is quiet.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
Ah ha! Here, you seem to be now questioning God's wisdom. The age old question "Why do you allow this, God?"- Sadly, the terrorists and foreign leaders DO act on their 'moral' beliefs, as we do, when we march into foreign lands killing millions. Where are you, God?
Enjoyable read, Alcreator! Betty
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Ah ha! Here, you seem to be now questioning God's wisdom. The age old question "Why do you allow this, God?"- Sadly, the terrorists and foreign leaders DO act on their 'moral' beliefs, as we do, when we march into foreign lands killing millions. Where are you, God?
Enjoyable read, Alcreator! Betty
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from mauial
God doesn't want divisions as in race and countries. We are one big muli-colored family. The world has been lost to only one terroist, Satan.
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God doesn't want divisions as in race and countries. We are one big muli-colored family. The world has been lost to only one terroist, Satan.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from prayingpoet
Now, we are getting somewhere. This actually made sense, had good rhythm and flow, even had good content. I feel this one deserves a good review.
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Now, we are getting somewhere. This actually made sense, had good rhythm and flow, even had good content. I feel this one deserves a good review.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from donaldww
I can't imagine you actually mean what you've written, but the last line of this kyoka like poem is calling people/nations, etc. to yield to foriegn terrorists. You have some good ideas buried in here, but your writing technique is hampering those ideas from coming across.
Thanks for the contribution.
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I can't imagine you actually mean what you've written, but the last line of this kyoka like poem is calling people/nations, etc. to yield to foriegn terrorists. You have some good ideas buried in here, but your writing technique is hampering those ideas from coming across.
Thanks for the contribution.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from Caressa_08
This poem is to the point, that we have to be strong , though making mistakes is a common problem, unless you are running a nation & all sorts of terrible things can occur...
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This poem is to the point, that we have to be strong , though making mistakes is a common problem, unless you are running a nation & all sorts of terrible things can occur...
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from Sanku
yes.there is double standards every where .if you steal 10 rupees then you are a thief but if yoy steal i crore or more if you can that will never be seen as a crime.
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yes.there is double standards every where .if you steal 10 rupees then you are a thief but if yoy steal i crore or more if you can that will never be seen as a crime.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from Indie Skreet
well this is the first one of yours I actually get and in this one for once, nothing cryptic. I hate your religious use of the exclamation mark ......... it adds nothing, but irritation. Indie
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well this is the first one of yours I actually get and in this one for once, nothing cryptic. I hate your religious use of the exclamation mark ......... it adds nothing, but irritation. Indie
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from CR Delport
A lovely poem that's well written and well delivered. It flows nicely and reads easy. Unfortunately our leaders dont teach is morals. More like corruption and backstabbing.
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A lovely poem that's well written and well delivered. It flows nicely and reads easy. Unfortunately our leaders dont teach is morals. More like corruption and backstabbing.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from linsbm
This poem reflects your concern about life of people in general and the government in particular. Your message is powerful and it opens the minds of readers to ponder. Your format of 5-7-5-7-7 poetry is applied excellently. Thanks for sharing.
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This poem reflects your concern about life of people in general and the government in particular. Your message is powerful and it opens the minds of readers to ponder. Your format of 5-7-5-7-7 poetry is applied excellently. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
