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Comment from G.B. Smith
There is so much wisdom in this poem
You point out so well that the government is a risk
Other nations will take us down if we do not uphold the morality of our founding fathers
Bear
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There is so much wisdom in this poem
You point out so well that the government is a risk
Other nations will take us down if we do not uphold the morality of our founding fathers
Bear
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
When I lose something,
You teach me ethics, morals,
What about leaders?
Lose our nation, race, country,
Yield to foreign terrorists!
this is quite a deep, thought-provoking piece, Alcreator.
Margaret
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When I lose something,
You teach me ethics, morals,
What about leaders?
Lose our nation, race, country,
Yield to foreign terrorists!
this is quite a deep, thought-provoking piece, Alcreator.
Margaret
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from mizzkris20
Part of this piece was lost on me, but I think I could sense the general message of the poem... Overall it made a nice read. Thank you for sharing with us
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Part of this piece was lost on me, but I think I could sense the general message of the poem... Overall it made a nice read. Thank you for sharing with us
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from lappmellott
I enjoyed reading your poem. I think it's well written and it holds a lot of truth. As a child, I too, was taught good ethics and morals. I passed them onto my daughters and so on and so on. But, some people don't, for that, it's too bad.
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I enjoyed reading your poem. I think it's well written and it holds a lot of truth. As a child, I too, was taught good ethics and morals. I passed them onto my daughters and so on and so on. But, some people don't, for that, it's too bad.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from Crystal Carey
It is good, however I think you could enhance the work by adding more to it. But as I read it I knew what you were saying, and the fact that it is art and art is not always understood leads me to believe this is a good piece of work.
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It is good, however I think you could enhance the work by adding more to it. But as I read it I knew what you were saying, and the fact that it is art and art is not always understood leads me to believe this is a good piece of work.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from twinklepoems
I think most morals have to be ingrained well before you are old enough to be a leader. You have stuck to you metric scheme and there is no rhyme scheme.
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I think most morals have to be ingrained well before you are old enough to be a leader. You have stuck to you metric scheme and there is no rhyme scheme.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from Nebukadneser
Well written and brought over. You are most definitely the other side of brilliant, my friend. This is another very wise statement comparing how friends really care about us while leaders don't give a damn about their own subjects.
Well done
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
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Well written and brought over. You are most definitely the other side of brilliant, my friend. This is another very wise statement comparing how friends really care about us while leaders don't give a damn about their own subjects.
Well done
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from Tina McKala
Good philosophical poem, with a clear message. I appreciate the use of the question and exclamation - it added on the dynamics of the poem.
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Good philosophical poem, with a clear message. I appreciate the use of the question and exclamation - it added on the dynamics of the poem.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from words
I am sorry, I do not understand what you are trying to accomplish here with these short, choppy, sentences.
This seems both unfocused and unfinished:When I lose something,
You teach me ethics, morals,
What about leaders?
Lose our nation, race, country,
Yield to foreign terrorists!
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I am sorry, I do not understand what you are trying to accomplish here with these short, choppy, sentences.
This seems both unfocused and unfinished:When I lose something,
You teach me ethics, morals,
What about leaders?
Lose our nation, race, country,
Yield to foreign terrorists!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from Mike Momba
The concept of remaining moral and steadfast in the face of threats is here brought to light. The purpose is clear but a bit of rhyming and word choice would have been especially appealing to me. However, I salute the structured effort. Its usually takes a good deal of time and thought.
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The concept of remaining moral and steadfast in the face of threats is here brought to light. The purpose is clear but a bit of rhyming and word choice would have been especially appealing to me. However, I salute the structured effort. Its usually takes a good deal of time and thought.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
