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Comment from WorstPoetic Reviewer
This Tanka poem has perfect syllable counting; it clearly speaks of morals with allegorical order losing pen and losing country glory that the leaders do not think of nation and who else to teach them; so nice poem of today at the instance of erosion of morality, moral values round the globe; so much enjoyed.
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This Tanka poem has perfect syllable counting; it clearly speaks of morals with allegorical order losing pen and losing country glory that the leaders do not think of nation and who else to teach them; so nice poem of today at the instance of erosion of morality, moral values round the globe; so much enjoyed.
Comment Written 15-May-2006
Comment from DJ MacDonald
A very finely crafted and words chosen for this one, a credible tanka by every means, I really like the first two lines they seem to speak volumes.
Kind regards
Dion
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A very finely crafted and words chosen for this one, a credible tanka by every means, I really like the first two lines they seem to speak volumes.
Kind regards
Dion
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from ecp12317
i didnt really get the point of this poem..i just dont think i would recomened it but its off to a food start!
keep trying!
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i didnt really get the point of this poem..i just dont think i would recomened it but its off to a food start!
keep trying!
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from Adora Bayles
This is a deep message, difficult to explain or paraphrase. But I look at our present leaders, and without words, I understand. Passionate rhyme, great message, briefly written.
Adora
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This is a deep message, difficult to explain or paraphrase. But I look at our present leaders, and without words, I understand. Passionate rhyme, great message, briefly written.
Adora
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from Dear Essay Reviewer
This Tanka poem has perfect syllable counting.
This clearly passes on the message on morality, moral approach and moral sentiment.
The contrast for making the point clear is unique.
The reference of pen is only an illusion or allegory.
There are public administrators who do not bother to sacrifice even country glory and some leaders are ready to forgo interests of the nation before the terrorists or enemies.
That we can teach morals to boys and girls but can we really teach morality to the leaders?
This is going to make a history in this site.
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This Tanka poem has perfect syllable counting.
This clearly passes on the message on morality, moral approach and moral sentiment.
The contrast for making the point clear is unique.
The reference of pen is only an illusion or allegory.
There are public administrators who do not bother to sacrifice even country glory and some leaders are ready to forgo interests of the nation before the terrorists or enemies.
That we can teach morals to boys and girls but can we really teach morality to the leaders?
This is going to make a history in this site.
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from Senyai
Hi AllcreatorWriter, I have to confess that I had trouble with understanding this tanka. I think that you were referring to two sins, one small in comparison to a larger one. Sin number one, you lose your ability to speak out, and the government loses it's honor, sin number two. You are asking which is the bigger sin? and answer it in the overall tone of the poem. Am I close?
all the best,
Foxey
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Hi AllcreatorWriter, I have to confess that I had trouble with understanding this tanka. I think that you were referring to two sins, one small in comparison to a larger one. Sin number one, you lose your ability to speak out, and the government loses it's honor, sin number two. You are asking which is the bigger sin? and answer it in the overall tone of the poem. Am I close?
all the best,
Foxey
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from DesertLizzie
Wow - this one is deep. I loved it. In the end - after reading several times just 'cause it felt good to do so, I realized that what, at first, seemed complicated, was actually brilliantly simple. Way to go! I love the Tanka and this is such a great representation of it.
Lizzie
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Wow - this one is deep. I loved it. In the end - after reading several times just 'cause it felt good to do so, I realized that what, at first, seemed complicated, was actually brilliantly simple. Way to go! I love the Tanka and this is such a great representation of it.
Lizzie
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from jade.nightingale
I'm a bit generous with my rating. I didn't get it. So if you lost five pens I'd lose five countries? But why? Didn't like this poem. If it was a poem. I don't know what it was. Major confused. Grammar and flow is in need of fixing up. I should give you only one star. However, considering the 10 cent thing, I wanted to be a bit more generous to you. Anyway, you may need to lengthen it, not interesting and logical at all. Please fix up and I'll read again. Promise. Good try!
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I'm a bit generous with my rating. I didn't get it. So if you lost five pens I'd lose five countries? But why? Didn't like this poem. If it was a poem. I don't know what it was. Major confused. Grammar and flow is in need of fixing up. I should give you only one star. However, considering the 10 cent thing, I wanted to be a bit more generous to you. Anyway, you may need to lengthen it, not interesting and logical at all. Please fix up and I'll read again. Promise. Good try!
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from damevictoria
I had to look up Tanka as I wasn't familar with it...You did a good job with it. A political poem to me is very hard and I usually shy away from them.
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I had to look up Tanka as I wasn't familar with it...You did a good job with it. A political poem to me is very hard and I usually shy away from them.
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from nora arjuna
It's always hard to review a short poem. I have no idea what tanka is either. But I got yr message here. Why jump over a small moral issue of a mere citizen, when you commit a bigger one across the world?
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It's always hard to review a short poem. I have no idea what tanka is either. But I got yr message here. Why jump over a small moral issue of a mere citizen, when you commit a bigger one across the world?
Comment Written 13-May-2006
