A Stone's Throw
Sometimes ya just gotta work it out by yourself...43 total reviews
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a very interesting Did You See That? contest entry. Ending was surprising too. I like the outdoor scenario too. It added interest to the story. Perfect picture.
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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This is a very interesting Did You See That? contest entry. Ending was surprising too. I like the outdoor scenario too. It added interest to the story. Perfect picture.
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your review! :) My apologies for running so late, Rebecca -- this transition to online teaching is like triple the work and I'm just not finding any 'me' time.... but the light is in sight (i.e., they've canceled final exams and I just have to get through the lessons through the end of the month and few days in May - ugh!)... ;) :)
You take care out there!! ;) Yvette
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Keep plugging along, and one day you will be free. The pressure is on right now. That's all.
Comment from estory
Attention to fine detail made this piece come alive, in my opinion. The descriptions of the girl across the water, mirroring your own, brought this self confrontation to life and made it once psychological and mysterious. There's also this great sense of trying to escape from the pressures of life and creation in this remote location. The sounds of the stream, the feel of the grass, the moonlight, all this makes the scene come alive The dialogue was also realistic and we get that concern by the husband for the wife as he mutters about the new book contract and the pressure of it. Nice job with this estory
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Attention to fine detail made this piece come alive, in my opinion. The descriptions of the girl across the water, mirroring your own, brought this self confrontation to life and made it once psychological and mysterious. There's also this great sense of trying to escape from the pressures of life and creation in this remote location. The sounds of the stream, the feel of the grass, the moonlight, all this makes the scene come alive The dialogue was also realistic and we get that concern by the husband for the wife as he mutters about the new book contract and the pressure of it. Nice job with this estory
Comment Written 01-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for this awesome review, E, you really put a smile on this face today (a tough one to be sure!)1 ;)
And I am so sorry I'm so far behind! I apologize for this 'more cut/paste than personal response', but if I don't do something to try to get my 'head above water' I never will!! ;) :) This online education thing is going to make me crazy! :) But I've only got two more weeks worth of prep (I'm operating about 2 weeks ahead in my preps: YouTube, Assignments, Resources, Etc -- yes! I'm on YouTube! lol!) to be done for the school year and then I'll just have to keep up with their weekly submittals/grading/returning.... but UGH!! ;) Thanx for your patience while I 'get there' -- take care of you and COME ON MAY 10th!! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from RShipp
Amazing the things our minds can create when we are exhausted. At least, her other self was a very helpful being... Sometimes, the 'other' can be quite scary.
Enjoyed the read!
Best of luck with the Did You See That? contest.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Amazing the things our minds can create when we are exhausted. At least, her other self was a very helpful being... Sometimes, the 'other' can be quite scary.
Enjoyed the read!
Best of luck with the Did You See That? contest.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much, R -- and I am so sorry I'm so far behind! I apologize for this 'more cut/paste than personal response', but if I don't do something to try to get my 'head above water' I never will!! ;) :) This online education thing is going to make me crazy! :) But I've only got two more weeks worth of prep (I'm operating about 2 weeks ahead in my preps: YouTube, Assignments, Resources, Etc -- yes! I'm on YouTube! lol!) to be done for the school year and then I'll just have to keep up with their weekly submittals/grading/returning.... but UGH!! ;) Thanx for your patience while I 'get there' -- take care of you and COME ON MAY 10th!! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from aryr
You did a great job with this one Yvette, oh by the way, good luck in the contest. This definitely caught one's attention and held it right to the last word. Val really needed some done time and Dustin knew just the way to accomplish that. But more so she needed time to think straight. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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You did a great job with this one Yvette, oh by the way, good luck in the contest. This definitely caught one's attention and held it right to the last word. Val really needed some done time and Dustin knew just the way to accomplish that. But more so she needed time to think straight. Well done.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much, Alie -- and I am so sorry I'm so far behind! I apologize for this 'more cut/paste than personal response', but if I don't do something to try to get my 'head above water' I never will!! ;) :) This online education thing is going to make me crazy! :) But I've only got two more weeks worth of prep (I'm operating about 2 weeks ahead in my preps: YouTube, Assignments, Resources, Etc -- yes! I'm on YouTube! lol!) to be done for the school year and then I'll just have to keep up with their weekly submittals/grading/returning.... but UGH!! ;) Thanx for your patience while I 'get there' -- take care of you and COME ON MAY 10th!! :) ;) Yvette
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Wow, you are super busy. You are so welcome and as with anything, it will get done.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A Stone's Throw
by Y. M. Roger
Hello, Yvette,
How are you doing?
I really like your story. You have an amazing imagination. Do you go through this process when you write a story or a whole book? LoL well done my friend.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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A Stone's Throw
by Y. M. Roger
Hello, Yvette,
How are you doing?
I really like your story. You have an amazing imagination. Do you go through this process when you write a story or a whole book? LoL well done my friend.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Yes!! I cannot write fast enough to keep up with all of it -- no kidding!! ;) Right now I just need the time to TRY!! :) LOL! Thanx, Gypsy! ;) Yvette ;)
Comment from Debbie Pope
Finally you are revealing the secrets of your muse. You go outside to sleep, and she meets you there. The two of you converse and there is your story. Maybe just thinking about such a scenario would free up my mind.
I love the story, but I do have a couple of constructive criticisms. I would take out the line "God, I loved this man!" Although now that I look at it, it is perfectly clear that those words were thought by the narrator. When reading it though, I thought that they were the thoughts of Dustin.
Also, the use of Stephen's name at the end was confusing. Was Val seeing Dustin as Stephen?
I love the story though. I hope you are doing well.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Finally you are revealing the secrets of your muse. You go outside to sleep, and she meets you there. The two of you converse and there is your story. Maybe just thinking about such a scenario would free up my mind.
I love the story, but I do have a couple of constructive criticisms. I would take out the line "God, I loved this man!" Although now that I look at it, it is perfectly clear that those words were thought by the narrator. When reading it though, I thought that they were the thoughts of Dustin.
Also, the use of Stephen's name at the end was confusing. Was Val seeing Dustin as Stephen?
I love the story though. I hope you are doing well.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Oh, my goodness, MQ!! THANK YOU for that 'stupid blonde mistake' catch!! You can tell I wrote this in a few hours yesterday afternoon -- I had forgotten I even entered the freaking contest until I checked yesterday morning... of course, that 'check' was on a 'whim' because my morning was full with telecons and tutoring up through like 1230 and then I had to handle something around here (not to exclude a bit of a break for sanity - lol!).... Aaaaanyway, I didn't even start until after 3! I'm SOOOO glad you caught that name.... see? that's a 'author too distracted' error!! Thank you, thank you!!
Hope all's well down there -- I've only got TWO weeks left of digital prep and YouTube lectures to do after this week: I'm working like two weeks ahead just in case something were to come up on my end (that's the OCD me - lol!). They've canceled final exams so, that eliminated 'the end year' stuff - hooray!! ;) Just gonna go with the grades they get through the end of 'lessons/tests' for the year. So, if nothing else, I can clearly see the light at the end of the tunnel next - oh, wait, THIS - month!!
Thank you again for looking out for the nutty blonde up here -- you have no idea how many other reviews are in here and no one else even mentioned it!! Makes you wonder if folks really READ things, ya know? :) Take care, Beautiful Friend, and enjoy the sunshine today/tomorrow!! ;) Yvette
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My niece is graduating from Hartselle High School. She has no more work to do. Good for you and your school for continuing to educate.
Comment from JudyE
This is a very intriguing read and a great entry for the Did You See That competition. Talking to the 'other woman' obviously sorted out the story-line for the sequel that needs to be written.
Good luck
Judy
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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This is a very intriguing read and a great entry for the Did You See That competition. Talking to the 'other woman' obviously sorted out the story-line for the sequel that needs to be written.
Good luck
Judy
Comment Written 01-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much, Judy -- and I am so sorry I'm so far behind! I apologize for this 'more cut/paste than personal response', but if I don't do something to try to get my 'head above water' I never will!! ;) :) This online education thing is going to make me crazy! :) But I've only got two more weeks worth of prep (I'm operating about 2 weeks ahead in my preps: YouTube, Assignments, Resources, Etc -- yes! I'm on YouTube! lol!) to be done for the school year and then I'll just have to keep up with their weekly submittals/grading/returning.... but UGH!! ;) Thanx for your patience while I 'get there' -- take care of you and COME ON MAY 10th!! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from Shirley McLain
I liked your story and it showed your imagination with the mirrored image of your protagonist. I didn't find any errors. Good luck with the contest. Shirley
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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I liked your story and it showed your imagination with the mirrored image of your protagonist. I didn't find any errors. Good luck with the contest. Shirley
Comment Written 01-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your review! :) My apologies for running so late, Shirley -- this transition to online teaching is like triple the work and I'm just not finding any me time.... but the light is in sight (i.e., they've canceled final exams and I just have to get through the lessons through the end of the month and few days in May - ugh!)... ;) :)
You take care out there!! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was really spooky, Yvette, I wish my sensible opposite number would come and sort me out sometimes. She sorted out a lot talking to 'herself' and got an answer too. Now to make mad passionate love with her husband and fall pregnant. LOL, lovely ending to a really unique story. Well done, and good luck in the contest!! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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That was really spooky, Yvette, I wish my sensible opposite number would come and sort me out sometimes. She sorted out a lot talking to 'herself' and got an answer too. Now to make mad passionate love with her husband and fall pregnant. LOL, lovely ending to a really unique story. Well done, and good luck in the contest!! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 01-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much, my beautiful friend -- and I am so sorry I'm so far behind! I apologize for this 'more cut/paste than personal response', but if I don't do something to try to get my 'head above water' I never will!! ;) :) This online education thing is going to make me crazy! :) But I've only got two more weeks worth of prep (I'm operating about 2 weeks ahead in my preps: YouTube, Assignments, Resources, Etc -- yes! I'm on YouTube! lol!) to be done for the school year and then I'll just have to keep up with their weekly submittals/grading/returning.... but UGH!! ;) Thanx for your patience while I 'get there', Sandra -- take care of you over there and COME ON MAY 10th!! :) ;) Yvette
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You got my vote, and it looks like you are definitely the winner. I'll have to go and look you up on Utube! lol. I know a famous lady!!! xxx
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Math with Mrs. K is the channel -- try not to laugh!! I am NOT an actress - lol!! ;) :)
Comment from royowen
I loved this story Yvette, your stories are fascinatingly different, the characters are really quirky, and one always think there's something bubbling under the surface. The reflection of our heroine has an inbuilt difference, which seem to have a separation, to its host. A fascinating episode Yvette, well done, blessing Roy
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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I loved this story Yvette, your stories are fascinatingly different, the characters are really quirky, and one always think there's something bubbling under the surface. The reflection of our heroine has an inbuilt difference, which seem to have a separation, to its host. A fascinating episode Yvette, well done, blessing Roy
Comment Written 01-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Still behind (imagine that!)... but I do so appreciate you (you know that, right?!)!! ;) Thanx for the review, Roy, and enjoy the weekend! ;) Yvette
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Good job,
