A Stone's Throw
Sometimes ya just gotta work it out by yourself...43 total reviews
Comment from Stephen Force
Wow! This is really really nice. I'm a slow reader but this moved along really smooth and quick. the dialogue was realistic, the imagery of the scene beside the river was vivid and well done. I must admit I saw the ending before reading it, but it took nothing away from the story. Personally I would've gone with Matt as the dad but that's just me:) Great sumission
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Wow! This is really really nice. I'm a slow reader but this moved along really smooth and quick. the dialogue was realistic, the imagery of the scene beside the river was vivid and well done. I must admit I saw the ending before reading it, but it took nothing away from the story. Personally I would've gone with Matt as the dad but that's just me:) Great sumission
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thanx again, Stephen -- you are awesome with your detailed review here... I wonder sometimes what works with others and it's good to hear those things!! THANK YOU! Be safe and things will smooth out soon.... I just know it! ;) Yvette
Comment from poetwatch
Well I guess your muse is up and writing, Yvette. I love your imagination. :) when you write it flows like honey down my mind and into my heart. I have lost most of my feelings as my muse has fallen asleep. My smile is not with me so I read. Thank you for sharing. You're ahead of the running. Take care and keep writing.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Well I guess your muse is up and writing, Yvette. I love your imagination. :) when you write it flows like honey down my mind and into my heart. I have lost most of my feelings as my muse has fallen asleep. My smile is not with me so I read. Thank you for sharing. You're ahead of the running. Take care and keep writing.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thanx so much for your review, Jose - I'm trying to just tread water. I know I'm waaaaay behind, but the end is in sight now!! ;) I lectured ALL day to a camera so I'll be editing and whatever tomorrow (and I'm still grading...ugh!).... but, hey! I've got one week's worth of lectures left so only ONE more day of the camera... it's gonna wait til next week!! LOL!! ;) Take care! ;)
Comment from LisaMay
This is wonderful storytelling! I enjoyed the camping situation, the caring Dustin, the mind on overdrive, the alter ego... it kept my attention all through in a very satisfying manner. The sound of a creek can be very soothing to a scrambled brain.
(If Nick's gonna make a great dad, he'd better shut that biting dog behind a fence.)
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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This is wonderful storytelling! I enjoyed the camping situation, the caring Dustin, the mind on overdrive, the alter ego... it kept my attention all through in a very satisfying manner. The sound of a creek can be very soothing to a scrambled brain.
(If Nick's gonna make a great dad, he'd better shut that biting dog behind a fence.)
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thanx so much for your review, LisaMay. I know I'm waaaaay behind, but the end is in sight now!! ;) I lectured ALL day to a camera so I'll be editing and whatever tomorrow (and I'm still grading...ugh!).... but, hey! I've got one week's worth of lectures left so only ONE more day of the camera... it's gonna wait til next week!! LOL!! ;) Take care! ;)
Comment from Scarbrems
Winner, winner, chicken dinner. This was awesome. I loved the idea of the reflection that wasn't a reflection, but was. I love that your character talked through the writing process, resonating with all your readership. Very clever, and if you don't at least place, I'll eat the sofa.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Winner, winner, chicken dinner. This was awesome. I loved the idea of the reflection that wasn't a reflection, but was. I love that your character talked through the writing process, resonating with all your readership. Very clever, and if you don't at least place, I'll eat the sofa.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thanx so much for your review, Emma. I know I'm waaaaay behind, but the end is in sight now!! ;) I lectured ALL day to a camera so I'll be editing and whatever tomorrow (and I'm still grading...ugh!).... but, hey! I've got one week's worth of lectures left so only ONE more day of the camera... it's gonna wait til next week!! LOL!! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from tspencer
I liked this story. I would have given it five stars except for the ending. I know the character's journey in the story is resolved, but as a reader, I am left with many questions. The biggest one being, what the heck was she talking too? Was it a figment of her imagination, or some extraterrestrial being, a ghost. I think the protagonist is to accepting by shrugging it off as a dream, that doesn't ring true for me. Although, as I said, I liked the story and wish you luck with the contest.
-Tspencer
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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I liked this story. I would have given it five stars except for the ending. I know the character's journey in the story is resolved, but as a reader, I am left with many questions. The biggest one being, what the heck was she talking too? Was it a figment of her imagination, or some extraterrestrial being, a ghost. I think the protagonist is to accepting by shrugging it off as a dream, that doesn't ring true for me. Although, as I said, I liked the story and wish you luck with the contest.
-Tspencer
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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thank you
Comment from Benshu-bookgai
I like how this framed the protagonist's cognitive process in terms of a hallucinatory, almost dream-like state. The reference to the strange lights and sounds in the beginning initially seemed like visions of an alien encounter, but by the end I got the realization that the mirror-like state could have started as early as when they had arrived and set up camp.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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I like how this framed the protagonist's cognitive process in terms of a hallucinatory, almost dream-like state. The reference to the strange lights and sounds in the beginning initially seemed like visions of an alien encounter, but by the end I got the realization that the mirror-like state could have started as early as when they had arrived and set up camp.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your review! :) My apologies for running so late, Benshu -- this transition to online teaching is like triple the work and I'm just not finding any me time.... but the light is in sight (i.e., they've canceled final exams and I just have to get through the lessons through the end of the month and few days in May - ugh!)... ;) :)
You take care out there!! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Did You See That contest.
This short story has mystery and is very nicely told.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the Did You See That contest.
This short story has mystery and is very nicely told.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 02-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your review, Sharon -- always appreciate hearing from you!! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your contest entry, YM. You did a great job with the prompt. You set a great scene to build your story. The events you included tell it well. I, too, believe that sometimes one must figure it out for themselves which is what Val did. Kudos to her for not giving up. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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I enjoyed your contest entry, YM. You did a great job with the prompt. You set a great scene to build your story. The events you included tell it well. I, too, believe that sometimes one must figure it out for themselves which is what Val did. Kudos to her for not giving up. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 02-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your review! :) My apologies for running so late, Jan -- the light is in sight (i.e., they've canceled final exams and I just have to get through the lessons through the end of the month and few days in May - ugh!)... ;) :)
You take care out there!! ;) Yvette
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, A Stone's Throw, is a really brilliant approach to breaking a writer's block in this case of sequel stall. Nicely worded to bring the two Vals to life as they worked out Janie and Nick's future.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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This story, A Stone's Throw, is a really brilliant approach to breaking a writer's block in this case of sequel stall. Nicely worded to bring the two Vals to life as they worked out Janie and Nick's future.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Yep, still behind (imagine that!)... but I do so appreciate you (you know that, right?!)!! ;) Thanx for the review, Bill, and enjoy the weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is very strange. It's as if her muse is right there with her but separate from her listening to her and giving her writing advice. I guess that this is what a muse is suppose to do. Perhaps she was looking at herself in a parallel dimension. Whatever this is, I like it! Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2020
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This is very strange. It's as if her muse is right there with her but separate from her listening to her and giving her writing advice. I guess that this is what a muse is suppose to do. Perhaps she was looking at herself in a parallel dimension. Whatever this is, I like it! Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2020
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Thanx so much, Jeffrey - so glad you enjoyed, sir! ;) Yvette
