House Rules
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
House Rules
Hello, my friend,
This is my favorite entry for the 75 word flash. It's funny and clever. Nice presentation too. Good word count. This one is the best one for the contest, so far.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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House Rules
Hello, my friend,
This is my favorite entry for the 75 word flash. It's funny and clever. Nice presentation too. Good word count. This one is the best one for the contest, so far.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Oh my goodness, Gypsy, I am smiling to beat the band over here! You know, I totally made this up in the hopes of 'lightening' everyone's mood a bit! I am so glad you found a 'star-worthy' smile here as the smile was certainly the entire intention!! Thank you so much and have a wonderful evening!
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I voted for you
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
That's absolutely priceless. I guess that this means that everyone has to abide by the rules, no exceptions. I really enjoyed reading this humorous and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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That's absolutely priceless. I guess that this means that everyone has to abide by the rules, no exceptions. I really enjoyed reading this humorous and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Glad you got a smile here, Jeffrey. For the record, it's 100% fiction - not even sure where my brain came up with it! Thanks for the review!
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
That would have been perfect timing, or not perfect timing lol, but it was it'd a good time to catch them on what they always got on you about. lol. It's funny when you can use their sayings against them.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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That would have been perfect timing, or not perfect timing lol, but it was it'd a good time to catch them on what they always got on you about. lol. It's funny when you can use their sayings against them.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much for your review!
Comment from TheManojArora
The setting of the story is perfect. You have used your few available words very wisely. Kudos for that!
I just have two suggestions:
As a Sophomore, my siblings' ages ranged down to one. - Rephrase this. I had to read it thrice to get it.
Privacy in our house was practically nonexistent. - delete this. I don't think it adds any information to the story. Use the words you save to add some action somewhere else.
All the best!
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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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The setting of the story is perfect. You have used your few available words very wisely. Kudos for that!
I just have two suggestions:
As a Sophomore, my siblings' ages ranged down to one. - Rephrase this. I had to read it thrice to get it.
Privacy in our house was practically nonexistent. - delete this. I don't think it adds any information to the story. Use the words you save to add some action somewhere else.
All the best!
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Wils
Lol, that was my first response after reading this. I can imagine their mumbling for excuses. You did very well telling the story within the word restrictions. Good luck with it in the contest.
Geoff
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Lol, that was my first response after reading this. I can imagine their mumbling for excuses. You did very well telling the story within the word restrictions. Good luck with it in the contest.
Geoff
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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So glad I could bring up a bubble of laughter, Geoff - my goal (when I have time these day amidst this craziness) is spread as much sunshine and levity as I can.... so, mission accomplished here! Thank you for your review!
Comment from JudyE
Oh, dear! I had to laugh. Parents find it hard sometimes to get any time to themselves. You're told an amusing story with your 75 words. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Oh, dear! I had to laugh. Parents find it hard sometimes to get any time to themselves. You're told an amusing story with your 75 words. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thanks! I appreciate your review.
Comment from Ogden
Unlike most funny stories, yours appears to be true. If it is, that was a quick and clever reaction to a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity.
If you made it up, it's just another funny story.
:)
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Unlike most funny stories, yours appears to be true. If it is, that was a quick and clever reaction to a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity.
If you made it up, it's just another funny story.
:)
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Sorry. It's totally made up, Don. ;-) But thank you for your review!
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You're welcome. The piece was very convincing, so I was joking when I added that proviso.
Don
Comment from humpwhistle
Obviously, your father thought the back porch should be reserved for foreplay, rather than horseplay. Although, back porches aren't known to be places of privacy.
You've created a nifty little story out of your allotted 75 words.
Best of luck in the contest.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Obviously, your father thought the back porch should be reserved for foreplay, rather than horseplay. Although, back porches aren't known to be places of privacy.
You've created a nifty little story out of your allotted 75 words.
Best of luck in the contest.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank you, Lee. This was totally, off-the-cuff, 100% made up!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
This is so funny, the revenge if kitty Galore - Not on the back porch. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and your writings. Stay safe, my friend.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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This is so funny, the revenge if kitty Galore - Not on the back porch. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and your writings. Stay safe, my friend.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank you!!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Perfect opener; wonderful punch at the end; delightful overall. And I'm getting paid to boot! Cheers. LIZ (As a sophomore... s/b When I was a sophomore)
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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Perfect opener; wonderful punch at the end; delightful overall. And I'm getting paid to boot! Cheers. LIZ (As a sophomore... s/b When I was a sophomore)
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Too many words with the substitution... which is why it was changed. Thank you for your review.
