Jealousy (an Acrostic)
Jealousy and Envy are Friends48 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello pharp Congratulations being the winner for the word Jealousy very clever, I say with you entry done in Acrostic format deserved to in first place.
Gert
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2020
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Hello pharp Congratulations being the winner for the word Jealousy very clever, I say with you entry done in Acrostic format deserved to in first place.
Gert
Comment Written 02-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2020
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Gert,
Thanks so much for the congrats and your review. Thanks so much for your kindness, sending love your way.
Blessings...Portia
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You are welcome pharp
God Bless
Gert
Comment from TheManojArora
You know the speeches that start with "The Oxford dictionary defines 'XYZ' as ..." It's the same with poems of this structure. It's unoriginal.
There are a few grammar mistakes you can work upon.
If you're going to use 'much' (first line), then the second line becomes redundant as you say 'in so many ways'
Line 3 - always insulting never PRAISING
Line 7 - Spying and OBSESSION
Keep writing. All the best. Kindly note that all views presented in this comment are my opinion and you are free to disregard my opinion entirely.
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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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You know the speeches that start with "The Oxford dictionary defines 'XYZ' as ..." It's the same with poems of this structure. It's unoriginal.
There are a few grammar mistakes you can work upon.
If you're going to use 'much' (first line), then the second line becomes redundant as you say 'in so many ways'
Line 3 - always insulting never PRAISING
Line 7 - Spying and OBSESSION
Keep writing. All the best. Kindly note that all views presented in this comment are my opinion and you are free to disregard my opinion entirely.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Thank you kindly...
Comment from Brenda Henderson
Wow. That was intense; much like the feelings described. Good luck in the contest! I like the artwork chosen. It makes me think almost of a blackboard jungle and denotes the raw intensity of the emotions. Well done!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Wow. That was intense; much like the feelings described. Good luck in the contest! I like the artwork chosen. It makes me think almost of a blackboard jungle and denotes the raw intensity of the emotions. Well done!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Brenda,
Thank you kindly for your review, your very kind comments are greatly appreciated.
Blessings...
Comment from Louise Michelle
Jealousy and envy can really destroy people if taken to the extreme. I think we can be a little envious of others, but if it turns to bitterness we're in trouble. You did a good job with this acrostic. You selected your words carefully and it shows. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Jealousy and envy can really destroy people if taken to the extreme. I think we can be a little envious of others, but if it turns to bitterness we're in trouble. You did a good job with this acrostic. You selected your words carefully and it shows. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Louise,
Thank you kindly for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated. Stay well...
Blessings...
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi You have created a great acrostic on jealousy and it reads well my only comment would be to make the last line the same as the others without indented Y as this take away from an othewise excellnt presentation Good luck in the contest Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Hi You have created a great acrostic on jealousy and it reads well my only comment would be to make the last line the same as the others without indented Y as this take away from an othewise excellnt presentation Good luck in the contest Cheers Christine
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank you kindly for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated. Stay well...
Blessings...
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Envy is deep and destructive and your acrostic has described some of those feelings and the hurt that can be caused by it, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Envy is deep and destructive and your acrostic has described some of those feelings and the hurt that can be caused by it, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank you kindly for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated. Stay well...
Blessings...
Comment from Susan Larson
You did an excellent job of working appropriate and descriptive words into your acrostic format. I especially like the line "spying and obsessiveness keep it on track. good luck with this.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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You did an excellent job of working appropriate and descriptive words into your acrostic format. I especially like the line "spying and obsessiveness keep it on track. good luck with this.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank you kindly for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated. Stay well...
Blessings...
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Jealousy (an Acrostic)
Hello, my friend,
I like your acrostic poem entry for the one-word jealousy contest. You use the perfect format for the acrostic poem. Good job.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Jealousy (an Acrostic)
Hello, my friend,
I like your acrostic poem entry for the one-word jealousy contest. You use the perfect format for the acrostic poem. Good job.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank you kindly for your review.
Blessings...
Comment from Michael McCottry Bell Jr
Good acrostic poem with GREAT sentence structure and word choice. This was a pleasure to read. I love the picture chosen. This is a nice entry for the contest best wishes
Michael
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Good acrostic poem with GREAT sentence structure and word choice. This was a pleasure to read. I love the picture chosen. This is a nice entry for the contest best wishes
Michael
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank you kindly for your review, very kind comments, and best wishes. Stay well
Blessings...
Comment from Rmocruz
I am in total agreement with the valid message presented in your well written acrostic poem. I especially dislike gossip.
Your artwork selection well compliments the theme.
Great job, overall!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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I am in total agreement with the valid message presented in your well written acrostic poem. I especially dislike gossip.
Your artwork selection well compliments the theme.
Great job, overall!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank you kindly for your review and comments.
Blessings..
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You're welcome.
Blessings as well!
