Sunset
a 15-syllable contest entry21 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a lovely 15-syllable short piece touting the wonderful sunsets we enjoy at the end of the day. Best of luck in the contest with this fine entry. Marilyn
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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This is a lovely 15-syllable short piece touting the wonderful sunsets we enjoy at the end of the day. Best of luck in the contest with this fine entry. Marilyn
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Thank you, Marilyn, for sharing my short poem and your kind praise. Though we are mandated to stay home, we can truly enjoy God?s sunsets.
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Nowadays we focus on the simple things we may have missed before. :)
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet. I gave you your 6th vote!
I agree with your statement ..
watching sunset is a mixed somewhat bittersweet experience ..
...those warm colours are so beautiful but then slowly they fade as the sun retreats far beyond the horizon and one's heart fills often with melancholy..
I like the theme and the fact you made the poem rhyme .
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Ciao mystery poet. I gave you your 6th vote!
I agree with your statement ..
watching sunset is a mixed somewhat bittersweet experience ..
...those warm colours are so beautiful but then slowly they fade as the sun retreats far beyond the horizon and one's heart fills often with melancholy..
I like the theme and the fact you made the poem rhyme .
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much, temperate, for the very kind praise and your vote.
Comment from Tanvi Pauddar
WOW! I don't know how you do it, but your poem's syllable count is perfect, and I just simply loved your word choice. I also loved how you rhymed in your poem, and you said a lot in only some words. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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WOW! I don't know how you do it, but your poem's syllable count is perfect, and I just simply loved your word choice. I also loved how you rhymed in your poem, and you said a lot in only some words. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much, Tanvi, for your wonderful praise of SUNSET and those six bright stars. You may be surprised to know some reviewers did not like the rhymes. I am delighted you do.
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I don't know about them, but I loved it. I'm only a fifth grader, and I started writing last year, and for me it's hard to write a poem with 15 syllables. And then put rhyming words in it, too. Good luck in the contest!
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Thank you again and keep writing poems.
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Oh, I will. It's the only thing that keeps me from getting bored these days.
Comment from Bill Schott
This fifteen-syllable poem, Sunset, has the right syllable count and acknowledges that the day, when it's over, goes out with class.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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This fifteen-syllable poem, Sunset, has the right syllable count and acknowledges that the day, when it's over, goes out with class.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Thank you very much, Bill, for sharing my tribute to sunsets.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow amazing picture and description of the sunset. So sorry I'm out of six, this poem deserves it. I love this expression mourn the death of the day. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Wow amazing picture and description of the sunset. So sorry I'm out of six, this poem deserves it. I love this expression mourn the death of the day. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much, Iza, for sharing my poem and the virtual six-stars.
Comment from kahpot
What a beautifully presented work, yes the end of the day does take the breath away but not the beauty, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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What a beautifully presented work, yes the end of the day does take the breath away but not the beauty, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much, kahpot, for your most uplifting review.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
In just fifteen syllables--all you were allowed--you have inspired me by conveying a powerful message about love of awesome nature scenes. In addition, you included meter and rhyme--Great!
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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In just fifteen syllables--all you were allowed--you have inspired me by conveying a powerful message about love of awesome nature scenes. In addition, you included meter and rhyme--Great!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much, Janice, for your high praise of SUNSET.
Comment from Kellie Scranton
Love the line "Mourn death of the day" very well put, beautiful words and description, I think the poem is beautiful I think it may have even more of an impact if it didn't rhyme but that's just my personal opinion xo kellie
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Love the line "Mourn death of the day" very well put, beautiful words and description, I think the poem is beautiful I think it may have even more of an impact if it didn't rhyme but that's just my personal opinion xo kellie
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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I appreciate your praise of SUNSET, Kellie, and your candor.
Comment from Pantygynt
A neat little rhyming couplet that serves as an ekphrastic poem for the artwork you have chosen. In addition it's syllabic count is compliant with the requirements of this contest.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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A neat little rhyming couplet that serves as an ekphrastic poem for the artwork you have chosen. In addition it's syllabic count is compliant with the requirements of this contest.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Indeed it is an ekphrastic poem, inspired by the artwork. Thank you so much for your kind praise.
Comment from QC Poet
An awesome usage of the 15 syllables in a Powerful, well composed writing about the sunseting day we view and often neglect. Each sun rise and sun seting are truely special. Blessings and Good Luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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An awesome usage of the 15 syllables in a Powerful, well composed writing about the sunseting day we view and often neglect. Each sun rise and sun seting are truely special. Blessings and Good Luck in the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much, gmartinez, for your kind praise of SUNSET.
