Oh Life!
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Comment from closetpoetjester
Greedy!
Haste to buy, rank
Valued. Ignore comments,
Constructive. Views.
Write like fools. Promote
jibberish. Point of views.
Shallow Mmmmm. Zero.
Sense taken. None made.
Hollow victors. Lasting.
Impression, not No.
Forget your syllable count. Your write made as much sense as my response...No hang on, I reckon MINE made more.
Perhaps you should read it...
Your writing still disappoints the heck out of me in its blatant high promotion but overt lack of acceptance of ANY KIND OF DECENT CRITIQUE.
Here's .001 towards your ranking...thanks for the 1.25. When you write something of substance and clarity, I'll award you appropriately...for the mean time...I'll have to drag your rating down EVER so slightly but honestly your posts speak for themselves in tending to discredit the good writers around here. I'm just reflecting what I deem your writing to be worth with as much honesty and integrity as I can muster and I don't care HOW much you promote for.
Hopefully you and God can live with that.
This is an independent review.
THANKS
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Greedy!
Haste to buy, rank
Valued. Ignore comments,
Constructive. Views.
Write like fools. Promote
jibberish. Point of views.
Shallow Mmmmm. Zero.
Sense taken. None made.
Hollow victors. Lasting.
Impression, not No.
Forget your syllable count. Your write made as much sense as my response...No hang on, I reckon MINE made more.
Perhaps you should read it...
Your writing still disappoints the heck out of me in its blatant high promotion but overt lack of acceptance of ANY KIND OF DECENT CRITIQUE.
Here's .001 towards your ranking...thanks for the 1.25. When you write something of substance and clarity, I'll award you appropriately...for the mean time...I'll have to drag your rating down EVER so slightly but honestly your posts speak for themselves in tending to discredit the good writers around here. I'm just reflecting what I deem your writing to be worth with as much honesty and integrity as I can muster and I don't care HOW much you promote for.
Hopefully you and God can live with that.
This is an independent review.
THANKS
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from yonashalom
This reminds me of viewing a poem and not getting it or liking it, but in haste writing a review for greed. And stuck in there is a call to pause and absorb the words, like sit in the shade and meditate for a moment. Wisdom being the opposite of foolish. Interesting write. Vague enough to interpret in many ways. ~Yona
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This reminds me of viewing a poem and not getting it or liking it, but in haste writing a review for greed. And stuck in there is a call to pause and absorb the words, like sit in the shade and meditate for a moment. Wisdom being the opposite of foolish. Interesting write. Vague enough to interpret in many ways. ~Yona
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
Comment from Carole Rosa
Alceator Litt Dear. Your poem of "Oh Life" leaves one to thought. Your book will be a success when published with the poems you write. Carole
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Alceator Litt Dear. Your poem of "Oh Life" leaves one to thought. Your book will be a success when published with the poems you write. Carole
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there Alcreator
This has such a wonderful premise, but it is confusing as heck. I can see greedy but OH life? I know your words are there but they feel jumbled up. It feels unclear as to what you want the reader to feel from it
Bear
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Hey there Alcreator
This has such a wonderful premise, but it is confusing as heck. I can see greedy but OH life? I know your words are there but they feel jumbled up. It feels unclear as to what you want the reader to feel from it
Bear
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from GracieAnn
You've met the requirements of this assignment in a staccato fashion with deadly aim. "Waste, lose resources at both ends!" well put. Sad that the "waste-rs" are so blinded by greed that pays no dividends in the end.
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You've met the requirements of this assignment in a staccato fashion with deadly aim. "Waste, lose resources at both ends!" well put. Sad that the "waste-rs" are so blinded by greed that pays no dividends in the end.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from Titanx9
The most egregious thing about greed is that it leaves no indelible footprints to carry those who are left behind or shepherd future generations to new heights. Yes, greed does make a mess of things; we see it happening all over the world today.
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The most egregious thing about greed is that it leaves no indelible footprints to carry those who are left behind or shepherd future generations to new heights. Yes, greed does make a mess of things; we see it happening all over the world today.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from JM daSilva
I guess you are talking about walking instead of driving when you go to a place. You drive, things go too fast and you don't see details.,
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I guess you are talking about walking instead of driving when you go to a place. You drive, things go too fast and you don't see details.,
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from MM lives on :)
Daer Dear poet: it seems you are frustrated with some reviews as I have read prior, just keep writing as these seem to signify your faith. Keep writing in yor own way, maybe publish these and move forward.
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Daer Dear poet: it seems you are frustrated with some reviews as I have read prior, just keep writing as these seem to signify your faith. Keep writing in yor own way, maybe publish these and move forward.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from Treischel
A fine dissertation on the issues of Greed. They are impatient poor fools. Your structured free verse format carries the truth as it ebbs and flows on the page. The following is a very profound statement.
Wink, escape or ignore keys, what-why-how?
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A fine dissertation on the issues of Greed. They are impatient poor fools. Your structured free verse format carries the truth as it ebbs and flows on the page. The following is a very profound statement.
Wink, escape or ignore keys, what-why-how?
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from dragonpoet
Good use of the form to get the many definitions of greed. Greed is not only with money, but with emotions and keeping it to yourself. The people don't see the harm they are doing to others and themselves.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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Good use of the form to get the many definitions of greed. Greed is not only with money, but with emotions and keeping it to yourself. The people don't see the harm they are doing to others and themselves.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
