Comment from curious novice

Good

You've captured the feeling of posting exactly. For emerging writers, feedback is all we hunger for. The measured lines are well done, only the meaning of line 7 stumped me somewhat. Perhaps it is all in the interpretation.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Greed is something that leaves no lasting footprint. It may leave a mess or a mark, but the truth will slowly fade and the future will make up their own mind. I liked the flow of this. The way you peppered the lines with synonyms was great. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

Comment from beccabootie123

Exceptional

you are such an interesting writer and I love to browse your writings, they are always eclectic yet cohesive if that makes sense. well done and makes me think.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

This poem I like the greed of mankind you have described it perfectly if we was just content with what we got think of all those wars we could prevent thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

You explained it well. Nicely done in a rictameter format. Creative and expressive. What a thought to have walking along the ocean. Nicely done. Good.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

Comment from juliedickson55

Excellent

Yes, greedy!
People do so little for others, take for themselves...

What happened to generosity and selflessness, sharing what we have, saving the world, feeding the poor?

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

Comment from Rondeno

Good

Is a string of verbs poetry? What does "Haste to see, pass" mean? Equally, "Mess, shade wise for some"? It's one thing to be difficult or obscure. It's another thing to assemble random words.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

you hav listed attributes of greed very nicely! i like the structure you seem to favor!
thank you for sharing!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

Comment from whizpurr ^-^

Excellent

Hi A.L.D.
Hmmm. Interesting thoughts, philosophy and interesting writing style too. Lots to think about in this one. Beginning and ending with the same word adds to the overall effect. I liked it. Warm regards, W ^-^

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

Comment from Galactia

Excellent

This is a great little poem reflecting hoe you feel i'm guessing it's relayed to fanstory.

Heads up and smile

regards
Tia

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013