Oh Life!
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Greedy!"Experiences of living
191 total reviews
Comment from Deborah Marie
Nice rictameter with photo choice and color scheme. Nice use of syllable count with use of clever wording. Rhythm, progression and flow give it an excellent read, Deb
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Nice rictameter with photo choice and color scheme. Nice use of syllable count with use of clever wording. Rhythm, progression and flow give it an excellent read, Deb
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANK YOU FOR REVIEW.
Comment from c_lucas
Some times in Life we tend to be gluttonous with our words. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Some times in Life we tend to be gluttonous with our words. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANK YOU FOR GOOD REVIEW.
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You're welcome.
Comment from chasennov
'Greedy!' I have a problem with your poem! It does not make any sense at all. Can you please explain it to me, because I would very much like to understand the meaning.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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'Greedy!' I have a problem with your poem! It does not make any sense at all. Can you please explain it to me, because I would very much like to understand the meaning.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS
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THANKS
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NO PROBLEM!
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NO PROBLEM.
Comment from bayoupoet
This poem has very profound logic. It has very deep imagery. Many people may not agree with you, but I for one find it quite intelligent and free thinking. I may not say it the way it needs to be said,but I really enjoyed your poem.
sandra
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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This poem has very profound logic. It has very deep imagery. Many people may not agree with you, but I for one find it quite intelligent and free thinking. I may not say it the way it needs to be said,but I really enjoyed your poem.
sandra
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANK YOU FOR NICE REVIEW.
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You are so very welcome!
Comment from joann r romei
This was okay. I enjoyed the quick words yet they did not really give me the feeling of greed, a few should be eliminated, the picture does not fit either.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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This was okay. I enjoyed the quick words yet they did not really give me the feeling of greed, a few should be eliminated, the picture does not fit either.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS
Comment from Kevin C
Excellent write that reads well. I like your words and the flow of them. Your poem fills the reader with thought and makes one ponder. This is an excellent read.
Kevin
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Excellent write that reads well. I like your words and the flow of them. Your poem fills the reader with thought and makes one ponder. This is an excellent read.
Kevin
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
Comment from robina1978
I overlooked this one before. Excellent photo to complement this poem. And it is indeed a well written Rictameter that sounds great as well.
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I overlooked this one before. Excellent photo to complement this poem. And it is indeed a well written Rictameter that sounds great as well.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
I have given you a second try, thinking that perhaps it is your style that I am not in sync with and trying to match your words with understanding. Failed again, although this was more comprehensible than the first I read. I think, in an attempt to create within the form - I am assuming Rictameter, even though line four has only seven syllables- that you are writing like it is a Rorschach Test rather than a need to relate to the reader. You feel that you have a lot to share, and you probably do, but I prefer less work on my part to figure out what that is. - Wendy
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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I have given you a second try, thinking that perhaps it is your style that I am not in sync with and trying to match your words with understanding. Failed again, although this was more comprehensible than the first I read. I think, in an attempt to create within the form - I am assuming Rictameter, even though line four has only seven syllables- that you are writing like it is a Rorschach Test rather than a need to relate to the reader. You feel that you have a lot to share, and you probably do, but I prefer less work on my part to figure out what that is. - Wendy
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from cvcopac
You must be referring to the reviewing rating system but it would fit any such social, economic or political situation as well. Nice little/large comment tersely written. Kenny
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You must be referring to the reviewing rating system but it would fit any such social, economic or political situation as well. Nice little/large comment tersely written. Kenny
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
Comment from twinklepoems
Hi, This seems to have more of a thread than the last poem I read. I get that your poem is about the greedy which is a good theme. Many of your lines just seem like groups of words strung together. Maybe if I keep reading I will "get it".
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Hi, This seems to have more of a thread than the last poem I read. I get that your poem is about the greedy which is a good theme. Many of your lines just seem like groups of words strung together. Maybe if I keep reading I will "get it".
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
