Oh Life!
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Comment from Gloria ....
Interesting meter. I learned something new here. It seems a very harsh judgement on humanity. Your anger comes through clearly although not much compassion or empathy. Leave no deep mark is a good cautionary note. It is tough to properly guide the reptilian brain. It ain't easy.
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Interesting meter. I learned something new here. It seems a very harsh judgement on humanity. Your anger comes through clearly although not much compassion or empathy. Leave no deep mark is a good cautionary note. It is tough to properly guide the reptilian brain. It ain't easy.
Gloria
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for professional review
Comment from Bill Schott
In my efforts to transpose these thoughts into my thinking I see that there is a lot of both negative and positive things going on in the world right now. Fortunately, the leaders are so transparent and replaceable that nothing they do will survive into any meaningful history.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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In my efforts to transpose these thoughts into my thinking I see that there is a lot of both negative and positive things going on in the world right now. Fortunately, the leaders are so transparent and replaceable that nothing they do will survive into any meaningful history.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice professional review
Comment from kintesiegel
I guess I am learning how to read your poems becuase I do like this one a lot. It tells a story in an unconventional way that makes me feel rather than understand.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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I guess I am learning how to read your poems becuase I do like this one a lot. It tells a story in an unconventional way that makes me feel rather than understand.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS A LOT FOR THE HONEST WORDS.
Comment from Authoroni
ALCREATOR WRITER, Just read your "Greedy!" and as you, see more of a different way of looking, of seeing, of feeling and of reviewing. Thank you - well done!
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ALCREATOR WRITER, Just read your "Greedy!" and as you, see more of a different way of looking, of seeing, of feeling and of reviewing. Thank you - well done!
Comment Written 21-May-2006
Comment from sengwriter
A poem of abstractism and Greed and Foolishness mixed in a fine proportion and a rictameter of good standard.
If it appears a foolish comments then forgive me but a wise world I believed never get vexed or confused with the fools' intervention with their foolish comments.
Gautam
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A poem of abstractism and Greed and Foolishness mixed in a fine proportion and a rictameter of good standard.
If it appears a foolish comments then forgive me but a wise world I believed never get vexed or confused with the fools' intervention with their foolish comments.
Gautam
Comment Written 20-May-2006
Comment from GrandmaSharon
Thank you for the short but thought provoking poem. I don't know all the forms of poetry but I am getting quite fond of the ones like this that form a nice design on the page.
Keep writing,
Sharon
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Thank you for the short but thought provoking poem. I don't know all the forms of poetry but I am getting quite fond of the ones like this that form a nice design on the page.
Keep writing,
Sharon
Comment Written 20-May-2006
Comment from Mrs Jones
I find all your work confusing. I think you should keep it a bit simpler.
"Fools comment, review everything instantly and thereby make a mess of the wise world momentarily; they go silently but put wise in dilemma! " I think this is grossly unfair. If your work is just for yourself, that is fine but you do need others to understand some of it, if up for review. I am not new to poetry or reviewing, but I am lost here.
Cheers
Rose
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I find all your work confusing. I think you should keep it a bit simpler.
"Fools comment, review everything instantly and thereby make a mess of the wise world momentarily; they go silently but put wise in dilemma! " I think this is grossly unfair. If your work is just for yourself, that is fine but you do need others to understand some of it, if up for review. I am not new to poetry or reviewing, but I am lost here.
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 20-May-2006
Comment from tgeoff
I am going to defer to you on this one as I have read it more than a few times.
I like the play on words.
And the message is there.
I don't think we should have
to work so hard to derive the message.
You can write what pleases you
or write what pleases you but others can enjoy.
But I don't think it is fair putting up difficult wordsmithing and
if the reviewers are confused, say it is because their
wisdom level is not up to the task.
A bit pretentious, in my
humble opinion.
But I did find your work interesting and I would like to see more
and see if I am up to the challenge.
Ciao
Geoff
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I am going to defer to you on this one as I have read it more than a few times.
I like the play on words.
And the message is there.
I don't think we should have
to work so hard to derive the message.
You can write what pleases you
or write what pleases you but others can enjoy.
But I don't think it is fair putting up difficult wordsmithing and
if the reviewers are confused, say it is because their
wisdom level is not up to the task.
A bit pretentious, in my
humble opinion.
But I did find your work interesting and I would like to see more
and see if I am up to the challenge.
Ciao
Geoff
Comment Written 20-May-2006
Comment from H. Rebecca
Like fools wise or wise fools dance and
The only comment I have is that I find this one line a bit confusing. Perhaps add some punctuation here?
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Like fools wise or wise fools dance and
The only comment I have is that I find this one line a bit confusing. Perhaps add some punctuation here?
Comment Written 20-May-2006
Comment from Sancha
This is a well written poem; it really made me think. I think that the rictameter format really suits and enhances your work and it doesn't sound forced. I had a bit of a hard time reading it because of the choice of colours though. Again, excellent writing.
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This is a well written poem; it really made me think. I think that the rictameter format really suits and enhances your work and it doesn't sound forced. I had a bit of a hard time reading it because of the choice of colours though. Again, excellent writing.
Comment Written 20-May-2006
