Battle Between the Elements
1-6-1 poem6 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
1-6-1 poem
Battle Between the Elements
Good syllable count and nice presentation. The flow is good too. The rhyme works well. Good job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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1-6-1 poem
Battle Between the Elements
Good syllable count and nice presentation. The flow is good too. The rhyme works well. Good job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Gypsy, thank you very much.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
This is fresh: sun hides, funs ends, may as well run. Well said in 1-6-1. A welcome bit of cheer--and I'm getting paid to boot (a pump too if I'm lucky--odds 3:1 against). Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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This is fresh: sun hides, funs ends, may as well run. Well said in 1-6-1. A welcome bit of cheer--and I'm getting paid to boot (a pump too if I'm lucky--odds 3:1 against). Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 24-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Liz! Did you get your pump? I hope so. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Cindy Decker
Very good work. It's very difficult to get a point across in 8 syllables, but you've done this so well. I like the gentle, ominous tone of your poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Very good work. It's very difficult to get a point across in 8 syllables, but you've done this so well. I like the gentle, ominous tone of your poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Cindy, Thank you very much for the review!
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You?re welcome. Good luck!
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smile.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL! That sneaky sun.... playing hide and seek again! ;) A fun offering for this limited format competition -- thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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LOL! That sneaky sun.... playing hide and seek again! ;) A fun offering for this limited format competition -- thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Yvette, thank you for the review. 1-6-1 is difficult to get it across.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great contest prompt, Mystery Author. Your syllables are correct per line with great rhymes, too. The image is a great pairing with your well-chosen words. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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This is a great contest prompt, Mystery Author. Your syllables are correct per line with great rhymes, too. The image is a great pairing with your well-chosen words. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Jan, thank you very much for your comment.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 1-6-1 poem, Battle Between the Elements, has the right number of words in it and notes that when the clouds cover the sun and look dark and foreboding, one should adjust accordingly.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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This 1-6-1 poem, Battle Between the Elements, has the right number of words in it and notes that when the clouds cover the sun and look dark and foreboding, one should adjust accordingly.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Bill, thank you.