Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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26 total reviews
Comment from Minglement
I really enjoyed this lovely little romp through nature filled with forest creatures and all your fun alliteration. It reads very smoothly, and lyrically. Like you, I quit sharing my writing for many, many years. I am so thrilled to have found this place of learning and sharing. Nice job.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
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I really enjoyed this lovely little romp through nature filled with forest creatures and all your fun alliteration. It reads very smoothly, and lyrically. Like you, I quit sharing my writing for many, many years. I am so thrilled to have found this place of learning and sharing. Nice job.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
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Minglement, I am in full agreement this is a wonderful and healing space especially during these tumultuous times.
Comment from Shirley McLain
You painted a beautiful picture with your poem and its presentation is great. I didn't find a single error to tell you about. Great job. Keep writing and stay healthy. Shirley
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
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You painted a beautiful picture with your poem and its presentation is great. I didn't find a single error to tell you about. Great job. Keep writing and stay healthy. Shirley
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
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Shirley, thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Walking in Solitude, presented in rhyming couplets, seem to capture a glimpse of the great outdoors and all the splendor one might notice in a single sitting.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
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This poem, Walking in Solitude, presented in rhyming couplets, seem to capture a glimpse of the great outdoors and all the splendor one might notice in a single sitting.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
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Bill, thanks fro taking the walk with your eyes through the landscape!
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, "'tis so in the wisp of a gentle breeze
when the blossoms bloom, I sneeze.", and, "Bold stream gushes rushes over boulders
while waterfall's mist tickles my shoulders.", because the human reaction to it all just seemed so innocent to me!
The Lord led me to these verses after I read this,
Psalm 96:11-13 New International Version (NIV)
11 Let the heavens rejoice, let the earth be glad;
let the sea resound, and all that is in it.
12 Let the fields be jubilant, and everything in them;
let all the trees of the forest sing for joy.
13 Let all creation rejoice before the Lord, for he comes,
he comes to judge the earth.
He will judge the world in righteousness
and the peoples in his faithfulness.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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My favorite part was, "'tis so in the wisp of a gentle breeze
when the blossoms bloom, I sneeze.", and, "Bold stream gushes rushes over boulders
while waterfall's mist tickles my shoulders.", because the human reaction to it all just seemed so innocent to me!
The Lord led me to these verses after I read this,
Psalm 96:11-13 New International Version (NIV)
11 Let the heavens rejoice, let the earth be glad;
let the sea resound, and all that is in it.
12 Let the fields be jubilant, and everything in them;
let all the trees of the forest sing for joy.
13 Let all creation rejoice before the Lord, for he comes,
he comes to judge the earth.
He will judge the world in righteousness
and the peoples in his faithfulness.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Thanks Fonda!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Nice start JLR with the B alliteration and wonderful descriptions as you allow the beauty of nature to take you away from the day's stresses.
However, I think you need to put Modified Monometric as your mono couplets aren't true to form. Doesn't take away from a great read though,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Nice start JLR with the B alliteration and wonderful descriptions as you allow the beauty of nature to take you away from the day's stresses.
However, I think you need to put Modified Monometric as your mono couplets aren't true to form. Doesn't take away from a great read though,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Thanks Valda.
Comment from Gloria ....
Such a nice picture, J. The trees are what I find the most interesting. Ahem ... And now on to your modified monometric.
Superb imagery descriptions here, the nimble fawn, the mist tickling your shoulder and the shady mountain path are my favourites among them.
Excellent poem and many thanks for sharing.
Gloria
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Such a nice picture, J. The trees are what I find the most interesting. Ahem ... And now on to your modified monometric.
Superb imagery descriptions here, the nimble fawn, the mist tickling your shoulder and the shady mountain path are my favourites among them.
Excellent poem and many thanks for sharing.
Gloria
Comment Written 24-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Thanks Gloria!
Comment from joycetreasures
JLR,
I like your 1st two-lines representing a couplet. I love the image and the title of this poem. I just finished a poem called, "Welcome Spring." I can tell through this writing, you like nature and the outdoors. I was trying tom figure which meter you wrote this in. It's a touching poem that I felt I was walking with you. You have so many things of nature in it. It's a lovely structured poem. Nice job and great rhythmic words used. Good job.
Keep writing:) You do it well.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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JLR,
I like your 1st two-lines representing a couplet. I love the image and the title of this poem. I just finished a poem called, "Welcome Spring." I can tell through this writing, you like nature and the outdoors. I was trying tom figure which meter you wrote this in. It's a touching poem that I felt I was walking with you. You have so many things of nature in it. It's a lovely structured poem. Nice job and great rhythmic words used. Good job.
Keep writing:) You do it well.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Joyce, I delight in your wonderful offering of the six-star review and validating comments.
Comment from Therese Caron
What a beautiful poem about solitude and nature, which can often go hand-in-hand. I love the very first two lines of the poem as they set the feeling and the pace of the rest of the poem. Your words flow beautifully. Your rhyme scheme is wonderful. The image you chose is quite stunning, adding a lot to your words. Lovely poem.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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What a beautiful poem about solitude and nature, which can often go hand-in-hand. I love the very first two lines of the poem as they set the feeling and the pace of the rest of the poem. Your words flow beautifully. Your rhyme scheme is wonderful. The image you chose is quite stunning, adding a lot to your words. Lovely poem.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Therese, thank you so very much, while it is not perfect in every requirement, this is what flowed from my heart. So, I will leave it as it is intended as a pastoral walk with God's natural beauty.
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I always say I write from the heart, knowing the form is often not perfect. If it too much work trying to write a poem in perfect form, it takes the joy out of it for me..
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written couplet poem about walking alone gives us a chance to hear nature around us before we see the beauty. We need to be in solitary confinement for a while to get in touch with our inner self.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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A very well-written couplet poem about walking alone gives us a chance to hear nature around us before we see the beauty. We need to be in solitary confinement for a while to get in touch with our inner self.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Sandra, thank you for dropping by.
Comment from Aussie
Could it be acceptable to say, "Across the blue sky flies a host of sparrow?' It would rhyme. Nature brings us closer to god in all His glory. I loved your descriptive verses of nature at its best. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Could it be acceptable to say, "Across the blue sky flies a host of sparrow?' It would rhyme. Nature brings us closer to god in all His glory. I loved your descriptive verses of nature at its best. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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My dear friend, absolutely yes! I love your edit and I value you six-star review very much! Thank you!
