Comment from rhymelord

Needs Improvement

Once again you have displayed an amazing inability to communicate your thoughts, profound though they may be. If your desire is to communicate through poetry, then you must find better English expression, grammar and syntax.
Regards
Reg

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from Tina McKala

Average

I got the hidden word- it's an acrostic, isn't it? But again, I didn't really catch the hidden message. I don't think the exclamations and questions do justice to this piece. Less is more sometimes.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from Deniz22

Excellent

Monday might be the missing word,funny,
I really don't care just give me money.
Monday might be the missing word,funny,
I really don't care just give me money.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

Comment from mshugh

Good

I am not sure what this about - I have read and re read three times - still haven't gotten it, but I cannot fault the poetry style since I am not a poet - so I gave a four

All the best

Michael

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from twinklepoems

Average

Hi, I don't get it. Sorry, but this poem makes no sense to me. Just seems like words strung together. I think, to relate, we must be able to communicate!

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from guinea

Excellent

Okay with this poem. I'm sorry. I'm just not into this one. You seem to know what you are talking about, but I don't. I'm sorry. So I did give you a five.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

Comment from Crystal Carey

Good

The hidden word is loss right? Anyways I think this is just a bit confusing never going in any one direction. I think as I do with a lot of your writing that it could be better if you went just a little deeper. I think you just scrape the surface, there is so much more to say.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from visionary1234

Average

honestly? Al, you're driving me crazy here my friend! This isn't tanka, and the last line has 8 syllables! PLEASE! Poetry needs to be accessible. This is not. I don't want to keep giving you fluffy fives and pretending to see meaning in this work! "Wink it now somehow???" "Daily shows lose most?" I'm not trying to be unkind, Al. I'm just trying to be honest, ok?
:)S

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from emjaihammond

Excellent

This is quite intriguing. I'm not sure if I fully understand the message, but I'm trying. I think the hidden word is loss, can you let me know if I'm correct. This was fun to read and think about.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

Comment from arsinBW

Excellent

Man, your work is just so original and challenging to the reader. I always have to read a few times. Another good one here.
Is the hidden word "loss"?

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013