Oh Life!
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Comment from mizzkris20
Perfect title. I think your poem gives a very clear message. We need to cherish what have because it could be GONE in a wink. This is very good
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Perfect title. I think your poem gives a very clear message. We need to cherish what have because it could be GONE in a wink. This is very good
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
Comment from God's Writer
What a wonderful treat again my friend. I am getting to the point that I look forward to your writing. I am learning so very much.
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What a wonderful treat again my friend. I am getting to the point that I look forward to your writing. I am learning so very much.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
Comment from Cedar
I must say that I truly do not understand this one. I'm not saying that it's bad, only that I don't understand. Is the hidden word, "loss" spelled downwards as in an acrostic poem?
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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I must say that I truly do not understand this one. I'm not saying that it's bad, only that I don't understand. Is the hidden word, "loss" spelled downwards as in an acrostic poem?
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from Caressa_08
Like the title & poem is very Interesting, & I came up with the word, gone...Another day & in my eyes, Wink, it's Gone...Shame, that, we lost, I interpret that to mean that we can't retain that thought for too long, ...It would be nice if we could hold on to all the good happenings in our life, before we have to wink, experience something that isn't so pleasant. ...Think, I somewhat understand your poem..Thanks for the writing the notes & keeping us informed....
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Like the title & poem is very Interesting, & I came up with the word, gone...Another day & in my eyes, Wink, it's Gone...Shame, that, we lost, I interpret that to mean that we can't retain that thought for too long, ...It would be nice if we could hold on to all the good happenings in our life, before we have to wink, experience something that isn't so pleasant. ...Think, I somewhat understand your poem..Thanks for the writing the notes & keeping us informed....
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
Comment from GarthL
Firstly in an acrostic form this says 'I LOSS', maybe you meant I LOSE or even I LOST. I believe to be successful a poem needs to be accessible to the ordinary folk and I can't imagine too many people being able to understand what you're actually trying to say. To get so many reviews and be rated an all time best poem when people are reviewing merely to get member dollars is not a real indication of the value of a poem.
I also think those reviewers that said syllable perfect need to go back to school as the last line has 8 syllables - I wonder if they actually bothered even reading.
I think less is better with poetry, cryptic is for intellectuals, simple and understandable is for the rest of us in the masses.
Keep fine-tuning, your work is interesting to say the least. StriveOn, Garth
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Firstly in an acrostic form this says 'I LOSS', maybe you meant I LOSE or even I LOST. I believe to be successful a poem needs to be accessible to the ordinary folk and I can't imagine too many people being able to understand what you're actually trying to say. To get so many reviews and be rated an all time best poem when people are reviewing merely to get member dollars is not a real indication of the value of a poem.
I also think those reviewers that said syllable perfect need to go back to school as the last line has 8 syllables - I wonder if they actually bothered even reading.
I think less is better with poetry, cryptic is for intellectuals, simple and understandable is for the rest of us in the masses.
Keep fine-tuning, your work is interesting to say the least. StriveOn, Garth
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
Comment from Sanku
i think the word is LOSS or I loss.summon day will come to all of us ,then we have to answer and give explanation for all procrastinations and forget incriminations.
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i think the word is LOSS or I loss.summon day will come to all of us ,then we have to answer and give explanation for all procrastinations and forget incriminations.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
Comment from Perp Ihebom
I think you might be talking about procrastination in this work even though the language is not very clear. I appreciate the message i get from this poem. well done
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I think you might be talking about procrastination in this work even though the language is not very clear. I appreciate the message i get from this poem. well done
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
It sounds to me like we sometimes tell a story that isn't the complete truth - but we will give a hint and maybe fill the rest in if we have to. Giddy
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It sounds to me like we sometimes tell a story that isn't the complete truth - but we will give a hint and maybe fill the rest in if we have to. Giddy
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
Comment from c_lucas
It is a good thing to welcome change because our lessons may be on a higher plain. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
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It is a good thing to welcome change because our lessons may be on a higher plain. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, alcreator, you did a great job writing this poem about the way we put things off until one day we're required to produce reasoning for the things we do or do not do.
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this is very well written, alcreator, you did a great job writing this poem about the way we put things off until one day we're required to produce reasoning for the things we do or do not do.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
