Comment from RedGryffyn

Excellent

Great piece. Well expressed and vivid. It flows nicely and you state some great points here. Good word choice for a strict syllable count. Is the missing word the? Great job and thank you for sharing.

Red Gryffyn

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Well, once again, I feel left out a bit, Alcreator. I am not understanding the jist of your poem here. I am not blaming you...or your writing. I am just thick I guess. Bob

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Hi Al,

I'm giving you a five, again, not for the poetry, but for the heart in you. You must feel very passionate about what you write and for that I applaud you, my friend.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

this is a briliant piece of poetry! it brings out the best of us and the worst of us.
thank you for sharing!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

Comment from Charlene0513

Excellent

A poem that deals with the aftermath thoughts of hurt, despair and humiliation when one's life has been disregarded due to a shameful act and now retribution is in order.
Charlene

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Hello my friend I must say I don't really understand this poem I know it spells I loss if it is read acrostically down but that all it seems to have sorry regards Jill

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

Comment from Bobbi22

Excellent

i took your challenge and I am guessing the hidden word is Loss - which seems to be the prevalent theme of this piece. Interesting poem.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

Comment from mauial

Poor

Really is an apporpriate title as I really don't get what you are saying with this piece. Here's a challenge for you, write something that's comprehensible.

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 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from Doc Holiday

Excellent

We need to reevaluate our priorities in life before it is too late and we lose what is really important. I think your hidden word is loss. It does read down the side, I loss, as an Acrostic poem.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

Comment from Laurie Clayton

Good

Hello there,

I'm sorry, I have tried, several times, but I still fail to see the massage of this poem, it just doesn't speak to me on any level, although I'm sure it makes perfect sense to you and some others.

Best wishes,

Laurie

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.