Comment from flippant

Good

I'm struggling with the phrases "wink it now somehow" and "daily shows lose most." I think I get what you're saying overall, but those lines are unclear to me. I get the impression that you're already content with this work, though?

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

You have given us clues this time, I think when I want to relate to something, and sometimes, not always, I trust my heart, then I am often losing things, just when I need them most. Your hidden word, is it, LOSS? I enjoyed this one! xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2013

Comment from fairy77

Excellent

I liked trust my heart.I have to say I didn't really understand it:)Lovely display and I usually love your stuff.Perhaps I'm the moron LOL!beth fairy77.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2013

Comment from rosehill (Wendy)

Good

Good Morning, my time. But I have to say that there isn't enough coffee in the pot to give me a clear picture from your writing. Even with the explanations - which by their very nature let me know that the poem is almost to obscure for consumption. I read it several times and it may just be my brain not interacting with your wavelength, but it just doesn't make enough sense to me. I found the word LOSS in an acrostic form down the left hand side.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from Rondeno

Average

I'm sorry, but even with your notes (which go some way towards explaining your idiosyncratic use of English), I am at a loss to comprehend your meaning.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from Robert Loy Gonzalez

Excellent

I don't know is wink the hidden word? or revow? anyways that challenge made the poem interesting. either it was reverse physcology or whether it wasn't still a good poem.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2013

Comment from vkmack

Excellent

Great commentary on the state if human affairs. We do toss aside the important and meaningful to keep the unimportant and meaningless. We take pride in mindless consumption. Shameful! Is LOSS the word? Great idea!

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

Comment from Galactia

Excellent

I think to relate
Later! Wink it now somehow,
'Oh here,' trust my heart.
'Summon day' comes, where is it?
Shame! Re-vow! Daily shows lose most!

great little tanka poem, perfect 5'7'5'7'7' poem.
I feel this poem could of been a bit clearer.

Regards
Tia

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

Comment from whizpurr ^-^

Excellent

Hello
This is a good addition to your collection of poems featuring your true life experiences. I admire your unique style of writing, though your expressions are a bit deep for me in places, though your author notes do help.
Thanks for sharing. Warm regards, W ^-^

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

Comment from juliedickson55

Excellent

An eerie image of the face...

I like your use of Summon Day
Summon day = symbolic, nothing religious, refers to the day when we may be required to produce or use our things again in courses of our living
Very interesting...accountability...

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013