Oh Life!
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Comment from 96744mom
Super job on a small simple write. I love that apple-green shade, it makes the piece more attractive to read...lol. I can't find anything wrong with it. So there's no need for changes. I enjoyed this piece.
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Super job on a small simple write. I love that apple-green shade, it makes the piece more attractive to read...lol. I can't find anything wrong with it. So there's no need for changes. I enjoyed this piece.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2006
Comment from Medicine Man
I too lose my resolve throughout the day...perhaps it is tougher than I acknowledge.
Nicely done, I truly enjoyed the work, and am speechless as to your ability to get so much into so few words.
Thank you for sharing.
MM
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I too lose my resolve throughout the day...perhaps it is tougher than I acknowledge.
Nicely done, I truly enjoyed the work, and am speechless as to your ability to get so much into so few words.
Thank you for sharing.
MM
Comment Written 31-Mar-2006
Comment from nancybear
I did not understand this poem. The subject matter is confusing. How can you lose when summoned on summoning day? I read the poem several times and still don't get it.
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I did not understand this poem. The subject matter is confusing. How can you lose when summoned on summoning day? I read the poem several times and still don't get it.
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Comment Written 31-Mar-2006
Comment from kurfess
I think to relate
Later! Wink it now somehow
'Oh here,' trust my heart.
'Summon day' comes, where is that?
Re-vow, shame! Daily show loses most!
I like this better than the haiku(?) rain poem. I like the overall feel of putting off doing what is right. When you write "Where is that?" do you mean where is the thing I need? You might want to consider writing "when is that?" & making it a person wanting to know when Summon day is, so they can re-vow.
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I think to relate
Later! Wink it now somehow
'Oh here,' trust my heart.
'Summon day' comes, where is that?
Re-vow, shame! Daily show loses most!
I like this better than the haiku(?) rain poem. I like the overall feel of putting off doing what is right. When you write "Where is that?" do you mean where is the thing I need? You might want to consider writing "when is that?" & making it a person wanting to know when Summon day is, so they can re-vow.
Comment Written 29-May-2006
