Oh Life!
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Comment from WorstPoetic Reviewer
Yes, this Tanka gives us the right word order in a right perspective; really we almost do the same; we think we can remember and we wink today and when the thing is required we only face problems and lose time and resources and we do it repeatedly and every time we swear to remember but we forget. Truth is so nicely conveyed in short space. It is an excellent work with reality in real term to express and the title is nice really.
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Yes, this Tanka gives us the right word order in a right perspective; really we almost do the same; we think we can remember and we wink today and when the thing is required we only face problems and lose time and resources and we do it repeatedly and every time we swear to remember but we forget. Truth is so nicely conveyed in short space. It is an excellent work with reality in real term to express and the title is nice really.
Comment Written 13-May-2006
Comment from sellgirls
Hi Alcreator! I have been reading a lot of your works, but not reviewing many as I am trying to get a grip on your form before commenting on your work. I think I may be getting over the hump of understanding your style (should I be afraid?)! Your comments--though running on as they do--were quite helpful as well. I see a desire to "relate", but not quite strong enough to really take it to heart: taken with a "wink", so to speak. But one day you will be asked the questions you disregarded the answers to--and you'd better hope you can come up with them! An interesting tanka with a lot to make the reader think about!
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Hi Alcreator! I have been reading a lot of your works, but not reviewing many as I am trying to get a grip on your form before commenting on your work. I think I may be getting over the hump of understanding your style (should I be afraid?)! Your comments--though running on as they do--were quite helpful as well. I see a desire to "relate", but not quite strong enough to really take it to heart: taken with a "wink", so to speak. But one day you will be asked the questions you disregarded the answers to--and you'd better hope you can come up with them! An interesting tanka with a lot to make the reader think about!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2006
Comment from National Scholar
Such a huge thought, common feeling the poet has put very nicely in such a short format, so correctly and clearly I can relate very easily. We forget things simply believing to remember but when the summon day (the required day) comes we lose and we vow not to do it again but we forget again and we continue losing. What a Tanka! Excellent work by a gifted poet.
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Such a huge thought, common feeling the poet has put very nicely in such a short format, so correctly and clearly I can relate very easily. We forget things simply believing to remember but when the summon day (the required day) comes we lose and we vow not to do it again but we forget again and we continue losing. What a Tanka! Excellent work by a gifted poet.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2006
Comment from AmokMuse
I don't think I would have gotten it without your explanation, but given that you did take the time to explain and your form was good and, yes, once I had a clue (I've got to find my brain), the poem made sense. Hence the fiver. Thanks for posting. Cyndee
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I don't think I would have gotten it without your explanation, but given that you did take the time to explain and your form was good and, yes, once I had a clue (I've got to find my brain
Comment Written 04-Apr-2006
Comment from jlgtiger
I liked this one, Alcreator. Too often we are our own worse enemy when it comes to doing what we know we ought to. The saying "never do today what you can put off until tomorrow" certainly seems to apply to this one.
Too often we wink, as you state, at the things we need to do ... but if they are important, they will always come around again.
Good use of the Tanka and a good job on this one.
Best regards, Jerry
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I liked this one, Alcreator. Too often we are our own worse enemy when it comes to doing what we know we ought to. The saying "never do today what you can put off until tomorrow" certainly seems to apply to this one.
Too often we wink, as you state, at the things we need to do ... but if they are important, they will always come around again.
Good use of the Tanka and a good job on this one.
Best regards, Jerry
Comment Written 01-Apr-2006
Comment from mswritealot
Morning Ac, loved this little gem of interpretation. I was laughing at myself, the first thing that came to mind when I saw summons, was appearing before a court. Something you dont want to do and realizing what you've done to be there. Excellent
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Morning Ac, loved this little gem of interpretation. I was laughing at myself, the first thing that came to mind when I saw summons, was appearing before a court. Something you dont want to do and realizing what you've done to be there. Excellent
Comment Written 01-Apr-2006
Comment from EmileJP
Your words enter my mind resonate there and force me to feel their weight. Life's an illusion created with the smoke and mirror that emotions conjure and promote. If what you perceive is relevant to your angle of view then maybe we need to change our point of view to find love again.
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Your words enter my mind resonate there and force me to feel their weight. Life's an illusion created with the smoke and mirror that emotions conjure and promote. If what you perceive is relevant to your angle of view then maybe we need to change our point of view to find love again.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2006
Comment from MStephany
Alcreator,
I wasn't sure what you were aiming at specifically, however, here are my own thoughts on what you said.
I think to relate Later! ( I often put off things that I know I need to do until later - procrastination is the key)
I wink it somehow (I see what I am supposed to do out of the corner of my eye, but sometimes I lose focus)
'Oh here', I trust heart. (I know deep inside me what I must do and trust myself that I can keep it in sight in my heart if not in my view)
On 'summon day,' I wonder. (The crunch is upon me - how did I forget?)
I re-vow, lose most daily! (I'll do better next time ... really!)
How did you get inside my head?
Write on!
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Alcreator,
I wasn't sure what you were aiming at specifically, however, here are my own thoughts on what you said.
I think to relate Later! ( I often put off things that I know I need to do until later - procrastination is the key)
I wink it somehow (I see what I am supposed to do out of the corner of my eye, but sometimes I lose focus)
'Oh here', I trust heart. (I know deep inside me what I must do and trust myself that I can keep it in sight in my heart if not in my view)
On 'summon day,' I wonder. (The crunch is upon me - how did I forget?)
I re-vow, lose most daily! (I'll do better next time ... really!)
How did you get inside my head?
Write on!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2006
Comment from trailblazer101
Well not enough to dock you for anything.
I think your footnote told more than the poem!
'Oh here', I trust heart.
On 'summon day,' I wonder.
I re-vow, lose most daily!
God wording. Interesting theme.
Quite a message in so few words.
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Well not enough to dock you for anything.
I think your footnote told more than the poem!
'Oh here', I trust heart.
On 'summon day,' I wonder.
I re-vow, lose most daily!
God wording. Interesting theme.
Quite a message in so few words.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2006
Comment from Adora Bayles
Dear Alcreator: It came up again and I read your notes at the bottom. The poem smacks of procrastination. Like promising myself I will make corrections later after a particularly tough critique instead of going in and making corrections right away. If you don't use it, you'll lose it.
Adora
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Dear Alcreator: It came up again and I read your notes at the bottom. The poem smacks of procrastination. Like promising myself I will make corrections later after a particularly tough critique instead of going in and making corrections right away. If you don't use it, you'll lose it.
Adora
Comment Written 31-Mar-2006
