Oh Life!
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Comment from Irina
"Daily show loses most!" I agree!!
It happens with each of us I think. You could say it about me, at least! Hehe..
daily drama goes on!
Wonderful tanka, ALCREATOR WRITER!
Thank you!
Irina.
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"Daily show loses most!" I agree!!
It happens with each of us I think. You could say it about me, at least! Hehe..
daily drama goes on!
Wonderful tanka, ALCREATOR WRITER!
Thank you!
Irina.
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from AlvinTEthington
Interesting tanka--although it does not follow the strict rules--the first three lines about nature, it serves as an integrated whole. But you do have that nice turn you are so good about--from exterior to interior between lines 3 and 4. Nice job.
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Interesting tanka--although it does not follow the strict rules--the first three lines about nature, it serves as an integrated whole. But you do have that nice turn you are so good about--from exterior to interior between lines 3 and 4. Nice job.
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from choice
I thought that this was a lovely little poem. Youexpress yourself really well in a short amount of words and you express the human thought process well.
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I thought that this was a lovely little poem. Youexpress yourself really well in a short amount of words and you express the human thought process well.
Comment Written 16-May-2006
Comment from tuskantail
This is a bit hard to work out meanings of the message. I know you have explained it in your authors notes, but I wonder if they weren't there how many of us would really know what you were talking about. I feel the piece should be a stand alone piece that is self explanatory. That is purely my opinion, nothing technical about it. I do like the message that you are relaying in the notes though. Cheers
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This is a bit hard to work out meanings of the message. I know you have explained it in your authors notes, but I wonder if they weren't there how many of us would really know what you were talking about. I feel the piece should be a stand alone piece that is self explanatory. That is purely my opinion, nothing technical about it. I do like the message that you are relaying in the notes though. Cheers
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from Dear Essay Reviewer
This is a traditional Tanka.
This has perfect syllable counting.
This is really a Tanka poem with the true feeling portrayed.
It is man to forget, assuming that to remember and when required he only feels awkward.
The use of summon day is very authentic and melodramatic.
As if it is a warning day to everyone's life.
This is the most authentic truth with true happening common to all.
This is a great work.
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This is a traditional Tanka.
This has perfect syllable counting.
This is really a Tanka poem with the true feeling portrayed.
It is man to forget, assuming that to remember and when required he only feels awkward.
The use of summon day is very authentic and melodramatic.
As if it is a warning day to everyone's life.
This is the most authentic truth with true happening common to all.
This is a great work.
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from Dilli Bikram Edingo
The poem"Really!" by AALCREATOT WRITER talks about the fleeting nature of things. Every thing is changing every second. We choose something today with our determination to deal with it sometime later, but by the time we are about to grasp it, it has already disappeaered. We can not do every thing the moment we perceive it or imagine it or see it. By the time we take decisions, the external world has gone a lot changes. That is why the poet expresses a unique disatisfaction. Poeple are lost in feeling of thing without immdeatie actoin. As a result, we rarely achieve the things determined to have.
Hence, this peom is short but sweet and universal.
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The poem"Really!" by AALCREATOT WRITER talks about the fleeting nature of things. Every thing is changing every second. We choose something today with our determination to deal with it sometime later, but by the time we are about to grasp it, it has already disappeaered. We can not do every thing the moment we perceive it or imagine it or see it. By the time we take decisions, the external world has gone a lot changes. That is why the poet expresses a unique disatisfaction. Poeple are lost in feeling of thing without immdeatie actoin. As a result, we rarely achieve the things determined to have.
Hence, this peom is short but sweet and universal.
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from phaedra
Not quite sure what to make of this.
Think you are saying Don't put off to tomorrow what you could do today.
Any way the poem was short and sweet.
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Not quite sure what to make of this.
Think you are saying Don't put off to tomorrow what you could do today.
Any way the poem was short and sweet.
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from RaymondJohn
Funky, but fun. The brevity overwhelm. I like the images you create in a very few words, and the green background helps, too. Thanks for a very unusual offering. All the best. Ray.
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Funky, but fun. The brevity overwhelm. I like the images you create in a very few words, and the green background helps, too. Thanks for a very unusual offering. All the best. Ray.
Comment Written 13-May-2006
Comment from shelley kaye
uhhh HUH?
what's "summons day" ?????
read the notes
but didnt get it :-P
the poems interesting
thought provoking
but
confusing :-P
other than that
its okay
Thanx for sharing :-)
Remember: "A first impression is a lasting impression"
(i SEE the poem BEFORE i read it)
Sea~ Shell*s Thought For Today.... All Men Are Animals; Some Just Make Better Pets.
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uhhh HUH?
what's "summons day" ?????
read the notes
but didnt get it :-P
the poems interesting
thought provoking
but
confusing :-P
other than that
its okay
Thanx for sharing :-)
Remember: "A first impression is a lasting impression"
(i SEE the poem BEFORE i read it)
Sea~ Shell*s Thought For Today.... All Men Are Animals; Some Just Make Better Pets.
Comment Written 13-May-2006
Comment from Frank Furter
no changes for me . love the layout the flow and the wording .. thank you for sharing your lovelly work with us all here at fan story : well done always a plesure reviewing high quality work
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no changes for me . love the layout the flow and the wording .. thank you for sharing your lovelly work with us all here at fan story : well done always a plesure reviewing high quality work
Comment Written 13-May-2006
