My Horse and I
Racing the storm48 total reviews
Comment from smileycloud
not sure about missing any part of a form, but I see read and feel fine form, great flow and cadence, beautiful true and near rhymes,
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the poem and the word imagery and the characterization and the picture perfect journey is spell binding
I found myself reading faster and faster on the ride home and almost gott rained on at the door
thank you for sharing
p.s.
I like your profile "Einstein" quote very much as well
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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not sure about missing any part of a form, but I see read and feel fine form, great flow and cadence, beautiful true and near rhymes,
but
the poem and the word imagery and the characterization and the picture perfect journey is spell binding
I found myself reading faster and faster on the ride home and almost gott rained on at the door
thank you for sharing
p.s.
I like your profile "Einstein" quote very much as well
have a smiley day
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Hi smileycloud,
How delightful to open up FS and see an unexpected review, and a six on top of that. Your words are so kind. I wasn't following any prescribed form so it is just what happened as a wrote.
I am so happy to hear you got into the story and enjoyed riding along.
Thanks again. You really brightened my day.
Debi
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U R very welcome and your work very deserving
:):):)
Comment from pome lover
Sounds to me like you are in Colorado? Mention of the Aspens? and
your ride sounds exciting, though I know you were glad to get home.
Now, to your poem - I loved the easy flow of rhyme and meter, telling your story and building suspense. Muy bueno!! Mucho gusto! :)
pome lover
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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Sounds to me like you are in Colorado? Mention of the Aspens? and
your ride sounds exciting, though I know you were glad to get home.
Now, to your poem - I loved the easy flow of rhyme and meter, telling your story and building suspense. Muy bueno!! Mucho gusto! :)
pome lover
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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Hi poem lover,
Thank you for the encouraging review and kind comments about the writing. I am in Utah, which is next to Colorado, which is also in the Rocky Mountains so we have some of the same plants. I did enjoy the ride, but, yes, I was happy to make it to the stable before the rain.
Debi
Comment from robyn corum
Debi,
Oooohhh... I really like this style of poem, Debi. I don't know what it is, but that repeating bit at the end of each stanza appeals to me very much. *smile* I may have to try that sometime!
But I'm glad you and your horse had your fun AND stayed happy and dry. A lovely story in a poem. Thank you!
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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Debi,
Oooohhh... I really like this style of poem, Debi. I don't know what it is, but that repeating bit at the end of each stanza appeals to me very much. *smile* I may have to try that sometime!
But I'm glad you and your horse had your fun AND stayed happy and dry. A lovely story in a poem. Thank you!
Comment Written 17-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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Hi Robyn,
I wasn't going for any particular style, it just sort of happened as I was writing, but I am glad you liked it.
Yes, it ended up being an amazing day. I was so grateful to be dry at the end of it.
Thank you so much for the encouraging comments.
Debi
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a remarkable poem, debi. I enjoyed your wonderful composition with the repeat phrase in each stanza. Well described, filled with anticipation, great pace. I'm happy to reached the stables safely and not drenched. Marilyn
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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This is a remarkable poem, debi. I enjoyed your wonderful composition with the repeat phrase in each stanza. Well described, filled with anticipation, great pace. I'm happy to reached the stables safely and not drenched. Marilyn
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Hi Marilyn,
Thank you for the wonderful comments. I am happy you enjoyed the ride. I was very grateful to reach the stable in time.
Thank you for the super six star rating. It means a lot coming from you.
Debi
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You are very welcome. An amazing poem.
Comment from Ulla
Oh, I loved this poem with a story told within and a true one as a bonus. I've had several horses in my time and I know exactly what you're saying. It's no place to be in the saddle when a thunderstorm arrives. I'm glad you both made it home in time. Your lovely poem was a joy to read. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Oh, I loved this poem with a story told within and a true one as a bonus. I've had several horses in my time and I know exactly what you're saying. It's no place to be in the saddle when a thunderstorm arrives. I'm glad you both made it home in time. Your lovely poem was a joy to read. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Hi Ulla,
Thank you for the wonderful review. It is good to hear from someone who knows the danger of being on horseback in a storm. So glad you enjoyed it.
Debi
Comment from Janice Canerdy
I REALLY like this poem. It appeals to me in all respects. It tells a charming, appealing story, and the rhyming and metrical patterns are sustained throughout. Nothing sounds forced; the flow is natural.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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I REALLY like this poem. It appeals to me in all respects. It tells a charming, appealing story, and the rhyming and metrical patterns are sustained throughout. Nothing sounds forced; the flow is natural.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Hi Janice Canerdy,
I am honored by your words and by the generous six star rating. Thank you so much for the encouraging comments about the writing and the story.
Debi
Comment from Patty Palmer
What a beautiful poem! The story of you and your horse is so elegantly told. I really admire the rhyne and rhythm. Your descriptive words made me feel like I was out there watching the storm along with you! Absolutely beautiful!
Patty
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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What a beautiful poem! The story of you and your horse is so elegantly told. I really admire the rhyne and rhythm. Your descriptive words made me feel like I was out there watching the storm along with you! Absolutely beautiful!
Patty
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Hi Patty,
Thank you for the beautiful review. I loved the word elegant, and was happy to hear you were along for the ride. Thank you for the super six star rating. It means a lot.
Debi
Comment from rspoet
Hello Debi,
You've written a marvelous poem that gallops along
imitating the the pace of the horse and rider as the
storm clouds gather and soon burst open.
One can feel the initial joy of the ride followed by increasing
anxiety. The rhyme and smooth meter both work to enhance
the situation and the repeat refrain "my horse and I" is very effective.
Whew! Glad to be safe inside the stable.
Great photograph and presentation.
Well done
Robert
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Hello Debi,
You've written a marvelous poem that gallops along
imitating the the pace of the horse and rider as the
storm clouds gather and soon burst open.
One can feel the initial joy of the ride followed by increasing
anxiety. The rhyme and smooth meter both work to enhance
the situation and the repeat refrain "my horse and I" is very effective.
Whew! Glad to be safe inside the stable.
Great photograph and presentation.
Well done
Robert
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Hi Robert,
What a creative review. I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you so much for the six star rating on this. That means a lot coming from such a talented poet.
Debi
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Debi, this is so well written, and reading your author notes I see it is biographical. How lovely to go out riding on your horse. I've only ever been on a donkey as a child at the seaside. LOL! Your rhyme and rhythm are perfect and you tell the story in perfect detail. The repeated line at the end of each stanza is very effective. A rather nice choice of picture with the lowering sky. Although, as you say, it was meant to be a Cascade, nevertheless your display is lovely. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Hello Debi, this is so well written, and reading your author notes I see it is biographical. How lovely to go out riding on your horse. I've only ever been on a donkey as a child at the seaside. LOL! Your rhyme and rhythm are perfect and you tell the story in perfect detail. The repeated line at the end of each stanza is very effective. A rather nice choice of picture with the lowering sky. Although, as you say, it was meant to be a Cascade, nevertheless your display is lovely. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Hi Dorothy,
Thank you for the lovely review. I bet your ride on the donkey was fun. Nothing beats galloping across the ground on a horse though. I can understand why artists paint horses with wings because it feels like flying. I appreciate the encouraging comments about the writing.
Debi
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, an exceptional poem, beautifully written in its illustrative and flawless rhyming rhythm. I was with you as you both hurried home to shelter and as relieved as you and your horse to miss the deluge. I could relate, because I too have been out and about and arrived home only seconds before a downpour. I wasn't riding a horse, however, but partnered with esteemed horsepower in my vehicle...
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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In my opinion, an exceptional poem, beautifully written in its illustrative and flawless rhyming rhythm. I was with you as you both hurried home to shelter and as relieved as you and your horse to miss the deluge. I could relate, because I too have been out and about and arrived home only seconds before a downpour. I wasn't riding a horse, however, but partnered with esteemed horsepower in my vehicle...
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Hi evesayshi,
So you do understand. I enjoyed your review and am encouraged by your comments about the writing. I am so glad you enjoyed the story.
Thank you for the super six star rating. I am honored.
Debi
