Lights Out
(bill paid: no fair!) Deathbed revelations33 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
This is very cleverly written, and I am not offended. It's creative. My own attitude is. I'll have one go at being treated, after that I'll let nature take its course. I'm not afraid of death, but hope the process of dying won't be too painful ... I'm not very brave. Your piece challenges us all to think about our mortality and faith and beliefs and values. Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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This is very cleverly written, and I am not offended. It's creative. My own attitude is. I'll have one go at being treated, after that I'll let nature take its course. I'm not afraid of death, but hope the process of dying won't be too painful ... I'm not very brave. Your piece challenges us all to think about our mortality and faith and beliefs and values. Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Wendy. I must say, the Christians on this site have been overwhelmingly gracious to me, despite my controversial pieces (per the footnotes). I have long suffered religious torment--it's inspired a lot of stories, that's for sure. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement.
Comment from Teri7
Elizabeth, please tell me you are not really sick. This is just as script you wrote for Fanstory. You had me so upset for a moment. I was so happy to see your name again! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Elizabeth, please tell me you are not really sick. This is just as script you wrote for Fanstory. You had me so upset for a moment. I was so happy to see your name again! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Hello Teri. I'm not sick! This is a sort of thought experiment. I must say, the Christians on this site have been overwhelmingly gracious to me, despite my controversial pieces (per the footnotes). I have long suffered religious torment--it's inspired a lot of stories, that's for sure. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
I have to say this is brilliant. Here a woman makes the decision on not to receive treatment. She sought assurance that she would see her love ones by talking to a psychic, she has doubts about God and in the end nothing -no God - no John or Charlie.
It is powerful. Truthfully if she had entered pearly gates to see God, John or Charlie, it would fall flat and have no punch.
Mary
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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I have to say this is brilliant. Here a woman makes the decision on not to receive treatment. She sought assurance that she would see her love ones by talking to a psychic, she has doubts about God and in the end nothing -no God - no John or Charlie.
It is powerful. Truthfully if she had entered pearly gates to see God, John or Charlie, it would fall flat and have no punch.
Mary
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thankssssss, Mary! I must say, the Christians on this site have been overwhelmingly gracious to me, despite my controversial pieces (per the footnotes). I have long suffered religious torment--it's inspired a lot of stories, that's for sure. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement.
Comment from Midi O'Rourke
Oh, I love this piece. It is so to the point. A lot of us decide to have treatment, when sometimes it makes us feel sicker. Good job! Very well crafted.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Oh, I love this piece. It is so to the point. A lot of us decide to have treatment, when sometimes it makes us feel sicker. Good job! Very well crafted.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thankssssss, Midi. I must say, the Christians on this site have been overwhelmingly gracious to me, despite my controversial pieces (per the footnotes). I have long suffered religious torment--it's inspired a lot of stories, that's for sure. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement.
Comment from damommy
Not offended, but if I believed that, I wouldn't bother getting out of bed each morning. I can say with all truthfulness, I have had encounters that leave me with no doubt of an afterlife. Very good writing, Elizabeth.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Not offended, but if I believed that, I wouldn't bother getting out of bed each morning. I can say with all truthfulness, I have had encounters that leave me with no doubt of an afterlife. Very good writing, Elizabeth.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Yvonne. I must say, the Christians on this site have been overwhelmingly gracious to me, despite my controversial pieces (per the footnotes). I have long suffered religious torment--it's inspired a lot of stories, that's for sure. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement.
Comment from LisaMay
Damn - the street lights went out on the way to Heaven - Jesus should've paid the power bill... maybe he was leaving it up to his dad.
This will probably get up a few Christians noses, but I've always enjoyed irreverent humour.
I'm with Anne on the no chemo 'treatment' - that's no treat; just pump me full of morphine and let me be gone.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Damn - the street lights went out on the way to Heaven - Jesus should've paid the power bill... maybe he was leaving it up to his dad.
This will probably get up a few Christians noses, but I've always enjoyed irreverent humour.
I'm with Anne on the no chemo 'treatment' - that's no treat; just pump me full of morphine and let me be gone.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thanks for stopping by. I must say, the Christians on this site have been overwhelmingly gracious to me, despite my controversial pieces (per the footnotes). I have long suffered religious torment--it's inspired a lot of stories, that's for sure. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement.
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Are you back on-site again?
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No--just continuing to repromote--a few members allow posts to be reviewed by non-members, so when I accrue $ I rerelease a piece.
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How do we allow non-members to review?
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You have under advanced option you have to override NO to allow reviews by non-writers. The downside is you open yourself to trolls.
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Where's advanced options? Is that on each posted item or a general instructions somewhere?
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There is an icon, view advanced options (next to spellcheck), via which you can change the (default=NO) Non-writer reviews option to YES.
If you change to YES before posting, the flag (as do other settings) will stay set for subsequent posts unless you log out in the interim. I stay logged in.
I've been burned when the system crashes and I forget to change the preview option back to YES. I've asked TOM to change the default from NO to YES--after all, who amongst us would rather have work released immediately upon saving a draft?
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Thanks for the heads-up.
Comment from Spitfire
Oh would I love to be an actress and do this monologue on stage. I connected with it from the beginning since my sister elected pallitive care over chemo and upchucking. I would too. Skillfully placed background information about then the narrator's personal life. I loved the ending since there's a possibility that is the truth!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Oh would I love to be an actress and do this monologue on stage. I connected with it from the beginning since my sister elected pallitive care over chemo and upchucking. I would too. Skillfully placed background information about then the narrator's personal life. I loved the ending since there's a possibility that is the truth!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thankssssss, Shari! I'd love to perform this too! I must say, the Christians on this site have been overwhelmingly gracious to me, despite my controversial pieces (per the footnotes). I have long suffered religious torment--it's inspired a lot of stories, that's for sure. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement.
Comment from kmoss
I enjoyed this as much as one can enjoy a story about cancer. I could picture Anne through your writing. My favorite paragraph is: 'Well, guess what? It did "come down to it" - I got cancer - and I said a big, fat NFW (NO..F-in'...WAY) to chemo. Of course, they all tried to talk me into it - the doctors, my family, my friends - but I said no dice. Ain't gonna roll 'em when it's a sure bet I'd be tossing double cookies with every throw.'
I like how she uses NFW again later in the story. Well done!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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I enjoyed this as much as one can enjoy a story about cancer. I could picture Anne through your writing. My favorite paragraph is: 'Well, guess what? It did "come down to it" - I got cancer - and I said a big, fat NFW (NO..F-in'...WAY) to chemo. Of course, they all tried to talk me into it - the doctors, my family, my friends - but I said no dice. Ain't gonna roll 'em when it's a sure bet I'd be tossing double cookies with every throw.'
I like how she uses NFW again later in the story. Well done!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Thanks for stopping by. I'm delighted you engaged with the piece! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from roof35
You are brave to post this as I suspect you may get some complaints about the content. It is well written with no errors and a bit scary for anyone who is not "sure."
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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You are brave to post this as I suspect you may get some complaints about the content. It is well written with no errors and a bit scary for anyone who is not "sure."
Comment Written 30-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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I feared the same. Surprisingly, the Christian contingent has been charitable. Thanks for stopping by. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Susan Larson
This is a a most interesting read. As dismal as your ending might seem, I think it still leaves rom for the imagination to wander into the "other side." Even Jesus lay dead in the Tom before he was resurrected. You've enticed me to read your other scripts.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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This is a a most interesting read. As dismal as your ending might seem, I think it still leaves rom for the imagination to wander into the "other side." Even Jesus lay dead in the Tom before he was resurrected. You've enticed me to read your other scripts.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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Thank you Susan--have at it! I appreciate your thoughtful comments. Stop by anytime! Cheers. LIZ
