Oh Life!
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Comment from Elizabeth Anne
This poem flows well. I do not understand what exactly it is saying though.
This line I do not understand.
"Fools' heaven dark water words "
I don't know but like I said it did flow well and the beginning of the poem was going well for me you just lost me in the end.
EA
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This poem flows well. I do not understand what exactly it is saying though.
This line I do not understand.
"Fools' heaven dark water words "
I don't know but like I said it did flow well and the beginning of the poem was going well for me you just lost me in the end.
EA
Comment Written 25-Apr-2006
Comment from edinerie
A nice form used to good effect. The brevity make the author use quick, flickering images to string together a complex idea. Very successful outing.
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A nice form used to good effect. The brevity make the author use quick, flickering images to string together a complex idea. Very successful outing.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2006
Comment from Montyjuke
Very clever poem with the minimum amount of words with the maximum amount of message.
The key for me is the wink, which in my opinion Alcreator is trying to say
'to show a microcosm of appreciation'
and not fully understand what an artist is communicating, and that only the wise fully appreciate an artists message and not just the 'colour, flavour, life, times'.
I could be completely wrong but I do not care because this is the interpretation that suits me.
Fantastic poem.
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Very clever poem with the minimum amount of words with the maximum amount of message.
The key for me is the wink, which in my opinion Alcreator is trying to say
'to show a microcosm of appreciation'
and not fully understand what an artist is communicating, and that only the wise fully appreciate an artists message and not just the 'colour, flavour, life, times'.
I could be completely wrong but I do not care because this is the interpretation that suits me.
Fantastic poem.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2006
Comment from Authoroni
ALCREATOR WRITER: Just read your "Artist!" (Tanka 5,7,5,7,7 Wise re-views, others view timely!) and I too, "come, view, leave with Fools' heaven dark water words" - Well Done!
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ALCREATOR WRITER: Just read your "Artist!" (Tanka 5,7,5,7,7 Wise re-views, others view timely!) and I too, "come, view, leave with Fools' heaven dark water words" - Well Done!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2006
Comment from Phoenix Rysing
Good job...very strong piece in a few words...very well written...I know it suppose to be short, but I would have enjoyed reading more...my only dislike...the colors...lol!
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Good job...very strong piece in a few words...very well written...I know it suppose to be short, but I would have enjoyed reading more...my only dislike...the colors...lol!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2006
Comment from Charmane
We view and interpret all that is displayed. Artwork reveals a myriad of descriptions
for all to analyze. Will your expression tell it all, or just lament all beauty and great depth and meaning. The author tells us to view as it is presented.( In the raw) I like the boldness and direct verbalization. The background evokes a quick response and serious tone. I encourage other Fanstory readers to view this wonderful write.
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We view and interpret all that is displayed. Artwork reveals a myriad of descriptions
for all to analyze. Will your expression tell it all, or just lament all beauty and great depth and meaning. The author tells us to view as it is presented.( In the raw) I like the boldness and direct verbalization. The background evokes a quick response and serious tone. I encourage other Fanstory readers to view this wonderful write.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2006
Comment from Snitz
Ok.. what the hell is a Tanka? lol.. I haven't a clue.. However, I do know that this was a cleverly written piece. I thought your words painted a vivid picture and analogy of the viewer of art.
So many people miss the beauty in art because they are used to or in tune to "The easy look, or the status quo" I liked the second line and last the most.
Enjoyed your writ. Great job! snitz :0)
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Ok.. what the hell is a Tanka? lol.. I haven't a clue.. However, I do know that this was a cleverly written piece. I thought your words painted a vivid picture and analogy of the viewer of art.
So many people miss the beauty in art because they are used to or in tune to "The easy look, or the status quo" I liked the second line and last the most.
Enjoyed your writ. Great job! snitz :0)
Comment Written 23-Apr-2006
Comment from thechair
Fast paced, kicked me in the face. I don't even know what the hell a tanka is, man; but I enjoyed this piece nontheless. The last two lines are my favorite.
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Fast paced, kicked me in the face. I don't even know what the hell a tanka is, man; but I enjoyed this piece nontheless. The last two lines are my favorite.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2006
Comment from sharon fallis
Fools heaven dark watery words .....is 8 syllables
[Fools] [hea] [ven] [dark] [wa] [ter] [y] [words] ==8syllables
Otherwise this is a very nice little poem. Good word form and usage. Change one of the syllables in the fourth line and it will be perfect. Thanks for sharing. Sharon
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Fools heaven dark watery words .....is 8 syllables
[Fools] [hea] [ven] [dark] [wa] [ter] [y] [words] ==8syllables
Otherwise this is a very nice little poem. Good word form and usage. Change one of the syllables in the fourth line and it will be perfect. Thanks for sharing. Sharon
Comment Written 23-Apr-2006
Comment from BlackDove
I liked the first line in particular. It makes me see a rush forward. The imagery was great! I could half see what you were trying to convey. Nice message too. Good feel overall. Nice one!
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I liked the first line in particular. It makes me see a rush forward. The imagery was great! I could half see what you were trying to convey. Nice message too. Good feel overall. Nice one!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2006
