Comment from Cornetist

Average

Vague, vacant eye droop!
Without, a sun does not shy?
Yet, there. Hollow men.
Open-high ways, let love rinse.
In amber! Insects wander.
There is a weigh. He thinks not.

The above review is written in the manner of your "style"
of poetry. I wanted to give you the same opportunity that you give your readers to figure it out.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013

THANKS FOR TEACHING.

Comment from isurp

Excellent

I love how you start with "I gifted life, blood, light." An excellent grouping of powerful words that our children sometimes can take for granted. The "sleepless, restless nights" is poignant for me since my 20 year old didn't get home till after midnight and as parents, we still worry no matter their age.
-Steve

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013

THANKS FOR YOUR EMOTIONAL FEEDBACK.

Comment from seewhatimwritingnow

Excellent

HUH?
I gifted life, blood, (does this mean that you are gifted by your genes?)
Light, sleepless-restless day-nights, (does this mean that you have been suffering with sleepless nights? This is called a 'conscience'.

As caressed, taught words. (does this mean you love the words you have been taught?)

My word may hurt, you fear to (Not your word- but your many words. The words do not hurt- the slap stings though.)

Disown me. Shame, how wonder! (Are you asking your readers to 'mute' you? We don't know HOW to 'disown' you- since we do not own you. I'm sorry that you feel such 'Shame' and lay awake nights as you 'Wonder' why?

I'm sure this is very well-written, and there is a DARK message here. Keep writing- I'll keep reviewing. Betty

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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THANKS FOR YOUR COMMENTARY REVIEW.

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Good

I gifted life, blood, - do you mean - A gifted life, blood,
Light, sleepless-restless day-nights,
As caressed, taught words.
My word may hurt, you fear to
Disown me. Shame, how wonder! - disown me and shame, I understand -- but how wonder - perhaps how wonderful or
such wonder!

I'm sorry, ALD.

Margaret

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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THANKS.

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Hello my friend this is well written parents sometimes can feel isolated and alone not knowing which way to turn I enjoyed regards Jill

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013

THANKS FOR YOUR HONEST REVIEW.

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

I gifted life, blood,
Light, sleepless-restless day-nights,
As caressed, taught words.
My word may hurt, you fear to
Disown me. Shame, how wonder!

I loved the picture and I could identify with the words. However, my experience is in reverse or what I think your message is.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013

THANKS FOR YOUR LOVELY REVIEW.

Comment from Selina Stambi

Average

Not sure what you mean by 'shame. How wonder'

Did you mean 'how wonderful'?

I wonder, is English your second language or are you deliberately creating a controversial conflict with your reviewers?

I'm very puzzled.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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THANKS.

Comment from Galactia

Good

I gifted life, blood,
Light, sleepless-restless day-nights,
As caressed, taught words.
My word may hurt, you fear to
Disown me. Shame, how wonder!

You started talking about the endless day and nights which forever continues, well until our sun dies. Then you go and do a 360

My word may hurt, you fear to
Disown me. Shame, how wonder! ?

I figure your refereeing God and how we disown him in fear.

Shame, how wonder, doesn't make sense. you need to revise that line to inform us.

Shame on us, hmm maybe so for not obeying and listening to him.

How wonder ?????

Do I wonder on God? or life? or how do i do it. well with a brain cell, few i have :)

good job
Regards
Tia

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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Comment from ravenblack

Average

I understand this one. just, well, I know you have your own style, it just pretty much negates the message. "shame, how wonder!"- an exclamation point really does not give an ill-executed line more clout.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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THANKS.

Comment from Robin Gilmor

Excellent

I take away my own interpretation that the parents sacrifice since birth, with gifts of life, blood, sleepless nights with a baby and soft caressing words. Why, because each baby is special. then you grow up and don't appreciate the words you hear, thus disowned. Sad but true in many cases. Well constructed and
with this interpretation, easy to follow. An enjoyable read. Robin :)

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013

THANKS FOR YOUR EMOTIONAL PROFESSIONAL REVIEW.