Comment from Allison78

Excellent

This is a wonderful poem with so much meaning! Most children don't seem to learn this until their older. Well written, well done!

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2013

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Comment from Crystal Carey

Good

Hi Alcreator, I think that you do good with the abstract poetry, but I think you should step out side of those boundries. I have read a few of yours that I have enjoyed very much, however you can only do abstract for so long.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2013

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THANKS.

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

The message I got through your poem is one of sacrifice and tussle between right and wrong, fear and happiness. I had a little trouble with the last line. Nevertheless I see a strong message. Giddy

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2013

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Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

I gifted life, blood,
Light, sleepless-restless day-nights,
As caressed, taught words.
My word may hurt, you fear to
Disown me. Shame; how wonder!

I think you had better check this one out for the use of words in the last line Al. How wonder means naught in this language.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013

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reply by Gungalo on 06-Apr-2013

Thank you for the four star review.

Comment from Kevin C

Excellent

I like the form you used here. Your thoughts are clear and excellent. As the reader I found my self thinking about family. This was well done.
Kevin

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2013

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THANKS FOR YOUR EXCELLENT REVIEW.

Comment from Malerie

Excellent

"I gifted life, blood,
Light, sleepless-restless day-nights,
As caressed, taught words.
My word may hurt, you fear to
Disown me. Shame; how wonder!"

These words are so emotional...I can feel the emotion in them as I read; they leapt up off the page. Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed reading this.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2013

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THANKS FOR YOUR FINE COMMENDABLE REVIEW.

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

You have a creative use of words and I like it when poets create their own form. Light-sleepless-restless day nights
paints a vivid image of a struggling individual.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2013

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Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

I continue to enjoy your poetry. In your own fashion it allows me to ponder, not what I would think, but what you are thinking. I see a strong parental love which from gene (blood begotten) to adult is ruled by concern and love. So very good. Carolyn

PS the picture is perfect

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2013

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Comment from S.Yocom

Excellent

This is a thoughtful little poem with a moral, Alcreator Litt Dear. I know that it is difficult to write in a new language, and I appreciate the fact that you are doing it so well. I enjoyed your poem.
Sally

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2013

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Comment from mauial

Average

The first three lines I can make sense of and the first part of the third line, but then you lose me with the rest of the write.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013

THANKS.