Oh Life!
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Banter!"Experiences of living
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Comment from steevie
Usually I have some idea about the essence of your poetry, but this one baffles me, so I will not attempt to dissect a poem with butchery of words.
smiles
steve
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Usually I have some idea about the essence of your poetry, but this one baffles me, so I will not attempt to dissect a poem with butchery of words.
smiles
steve
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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thanks
Comment from Titanx9
It seems you have provided in a rather terse poem the trials and joys of parenthood. You give life and want to see, like the farmer, a great harvest, but in reality, things don't always go the way you want. But if the job was well done, even if there are no cheers, there's a reason to be satisfied.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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It seems you have provided in a rather terse poem the trials and joys of parenthood. You give life and want to see, like the farmer, a great harvest, but in reality, things don't always go the way you want. But if the job was well done, even if there are no cheers, there's a reason to be satisfied.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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thanks for review with good viewpoint
Comment from justatuna
Again, you use very powerful words in a style that captures the reader. Unfortunately, it also confuses. I think there is real potential in your style. I will continue to read as I appreciate the intensity of your thoughts.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Again, you use very powerful words in a style that captures the reader. Unfortunately, it also confuses. I think there is real potential in your style. I will continue to read as I appreciate the intensity of your thoughts.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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thanks
Comment from MM lives on :)
indeed Mr. Alcreator perhaps insomnia and manic surrounding your cerebral entitly and aura. a metaphorical delight of might, well done!
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indeed Mr. Alcreator perhaps insomnia and manic surrounding your cerebral entitly and aura. a metaphorical delight of might, well done!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
Comment from October21
Your style is cool, but where are all these poems getting at? They are hard to understand and I feel as though they don't really make any VALID points. Sorry.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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Your style is cool, but where are all these poems getting at? They are hard to understand and I feel as though they don't really make any VALID points. Sorry.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from Nebukadneser
I love your style and your cryptic poetry, which keeps the reader on his toes to see the wisdom and knowledge braided into the poem. It is different and might read a bit disjointed in the English first language, but is this not perhaps how al new and interesting things start. I think you are on the fore front of something new!
Well done
Nebukadneser
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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I love your style and your cryptic poetry, which keeps the reader on his toes to see the wisdom and knowledge braided into the poem. It is different and might read a bit disjointed in the English first language, but is this not perhaps how al new and interesting things start. I think you are on the fore front of something new!
Well done
Nebukadneser
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR YOUR EXCELLENT REVIEW AND ADVICE.
Comment from despiser
Kinda choppy, needs some flow to connect independent thoughts. Not sure of 'how wonder' I can't put it into context with the line it's on. The title banter seems loosely connected with content. Perhaps as abstract it works better but I see no reference of the sort
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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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Kinda choppy, needs some flow to connect independent thoughts. Not sure of 'how wonder' I can't put it into context with the line it's on. The title banter seems loosely connected with content. Perhaps as abstract it works better but I see no reference of the sort
-D
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from allborn66
The poem is very expressive. The word choice leads the reader through emotions. This poem is not for me -I do not like the bitter note at the end.
Barbara
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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The poem is very expressive. The word choice leads the reader through emotions. This poem is not for me -I do not like the bitter note at the end.
Barbara
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR YOUR HONEST REVIEW.
Comment from honeytree
Excellent art work and words.
I felt the words quite scary.
A person would become frightened
Not knowing what to do.
This can happen and it is very scary.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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Excellent art work and words.
I felt the words quite scary.
A person would become frightened
Not knowing what to do.
This can happen and it is very scary.
Honey tree
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR YOUR EXCELLENT REVIEW.
Comment from c_lucas
A parent finds out what sacrifice is all about when raising their children. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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A parent finds out what sacrifice is all about when raising their children. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR YOUR HONEST REVIEW.
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You're welcome.
