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Comment from tombard
I am sorry to say, this is incomprehensible to this reader. It is respectfully suggested that the meaning of "banter" is researched. Sorry, there is no "communication" here. Others may pretend to understand it. Best wishes. Tom..
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I am sorry to say, this is incomprehensible to this reader. It is respectfully suggested that the meaning of "banter" is researched. Sorry, there is no "communication" here. Others may pretend to understand it. Best wishes. Tom..
Comment Written 03-Apr-2006
Comment from Wendyanne
This is a very thought-provoking piece of poetry written in tanka format AC. I was a little baffled by your definition of what banter means. To me banter means to have a laugh and a joke with someone and we would not say, how banter. is this what you are trying to convey?
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This is a very thought-provoking piece of poetry written in tanka format AC. I was a little baffled by your definition of what banter means. To me banter means to have a laugh and a joke with someone and we would not say, how banter. is this what you are trying to convey?
Comment Written 02-Apr-2006
Comment from trailblazer101
My word may hurt, you fear to
Disown me.
It's a bit thick but your footnote helped.
YOu managed to pack a lot of message into very few words.
Well done.
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My word may hurt, you fear to
Disown me.
It's a bit thick but your footnote helped.
YOu managed to pack a lot of message into very few words.
Well done.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2006
Comment from celebrity_pets
Interesting tanka... you have given your reader much to think about and decipher from your cleverly chosen words, more than a touchof irony, we often forget to appreciate what others have done for us both as parent and child, at any age;) Good Poetry
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Interesting tanka... you have given your reader much to think about and decipher from your cleverly chosen words, more than a touchof irony, we often forget to appreciate what others have done for us both as parent and child, at any age;) Good Poetry
Comment Written 02-Apr-2006
Comment from Bryana
You sure told a lot in your little Tanka poem.
Gifted children and their ups and downs is always
a good topic for me. I haven't written a Tanka yet.
I'm not very comfortable writing these.
Thank you for sharing/
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You sure told a lot in your little Tanka poem.
Gifted children and their ups and downs is always
a good topic for me. I haven't written a Tanka yet.
I'm not very comfortable writing these.
Thank you for sharing/
Comment Written 02-Apr-2006
Comment from aBoxofBrokenCrayons
Banter! --- I loved it.
You conveyed a lot on the topic with just a handful of syllales, which isn't always an easy task, haha. Nice job, creator.
Paul-
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Banter! --- I loved it.
You conveyed a lot on the topic with just a handful of syllales, which isn't always an easy task, haha. Nice job, creator.
Paul-
Comment Written 02-Apr-2006
Comment from Mr. Nicholas Spears
This was an exceptional use of the form. I applaud you for undertaking a form so complex. I've tried to write one of these several times, but it got the best of my fragile little mind each time. You seemed to write this with ease.
Well done...
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This was an exceptional use of the form. I applaud you for undertaking a form so complex. I've tried to write one of these several times, but it got the best of my fragile little mind each time. You seemed to write this with ease.
Well done...
Comment Written 02-Apr-2006
Comment from 96744mom
I liked the style and I liked the words behind it. I've never tried Tanka Writing, I ought to try it cause it looks fun to work with. I don't have anything negative about this. Great write. No changes needed.
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I liked the style and I liked the words behind it. I've never tried Tanka Writing, I ought to try it cause it looks fun to work with. I don't have anything negative about this. Great write. No changes needed.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2006
Comment from ShadowKatmandu
The children we bear
Often like to stray
In poor directions
We didn't want it that way
You captured the essence
Of being a parent
Giving birth is just the start
Of the storm, the raging torrent! :)
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The children we bear
Often like to stray
In poor directions
We didn't want it that way
You captured the essence
Of being a parent
Giving birth is just the start
Of the storm, the raging torrent! :)
Comment Written 01-Apr-2006
Comment from ishta
I am dying to know what you mean by "shame, how banter". You have a powerful piece of expression here. I don't understand this, personally. Will you enlighten me? I can't mark down. I felt the banter.
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I am dying to know what you mean by "shame, how banter". You have a powerful piece of expression here. I don't understand this, personally. Will you enlighten me? I can't mark down. I felt the banter.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2006
