Oh Life!
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Banter!"Experiences of living
155 total reviews
Comment from Senyai
I think that you are saying, children can take a parents words and turn away from them instead of coming to them with thanks. We are to be aware how words can hurt, even when unintended. This was a compact, well thought out bit of a riddle.
Well done, ALLCREATOR. :-)
Foxey
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I think that you are saying, children can take a parents words and turn away from them instead of coming to them with thanks. We are to be aware how words can hurt, even when unintended. This was a compact, well thought out bit of a riddle.
Well done, ALLCREATOR. :-)
Foxey
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from Snitz
As a mother, I truly could understand what this write was about. You are ever so correct in your authors instructions above and hit it on the nail about children. Great read! Snitz
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As a mother, I truly could understand what this write was about. You are ever so correct in your authors instructions above and hit it on the nail about children. Great read! Snitz
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Another well written and well expressed tanka. This is one I know every parent can relate to and will be able to appreciate. Great job on meter and flow. Nice work!
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Another well written and well expressed tanka. This is one I know every parent can relate to and will be able to appreciate. Great job on meter and flow. Nice work!
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from drivenbackward
I enjoyed this poem. It took me a few takes to really get it, but it was especially clear and obvious what the message exactly was after reading you author's note.
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I enjoyed this poem. It took me a few takes to really get it, but it was especially clear and obvious what the message exactly was after reading you author's note.
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from mblundell68
Banter!;
A very natural poem!
In it I see; Birth, life and death through slander.
Very interesting!
Makes the reader think!
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Banter!;
A very natural poem!
In it I see; Birth, life and death through slander.
Very interesting!
Makes the reader think!
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from Beatlegirl61
Thanks for the helpful author's notes, but mainly for sharing such a brilliant piece! You have truly inspired me and I have written a new pice due to your wonderful insight and forms you continue to share!! it's vcalled :"New day dawning"...Really excellent tanka and so meaningful...I like the off-metering too! Different!! Creative!!
Take care, be well and peace!! Carol ::))
'Beatle' quote today: "Waves of joy are drifting through my open mind..."
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Thanks for the helpful author's notes, but mainly for sharing such a brilliant piece! You have truly inspired me and I have written a new pice due to your wonderful insight and forms you continue to share!! it's vcalled :"New day dawning"...Really excellent tanka and so meaningful...I like the off-metering too! Different!! Creative!!
Take care, be well and peace!! Carol ::))
'Beatle' quote today: "Waves of joy are drifting through my open mind..."
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from WorstPoetic Reviewer
This Tanka has perfect syllable counting; this has truth how parents sacrifice for children's living and some day children disown parents and that becomes a cause of banter when it happens; truly truthful feeling; nicely covered in few words.
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This Tanka has perfect syllable counting; this has truth how parents sacrifice for children's living and some day children disown parents and that becomes a cause of banter when it happens; truly truthful feeling; nicely covered in few words.
Comment Written 15-May-2006
Comment from National Scholar
A gifted poet indeed. What a banter in ironic punch! This is perhaps the price to the parents by the misconception grown and fearful children's drastic action reward. Superb in Tanka. How clear and the flow is doubtlessly balanced. Kudos. No banter a poet genius could only make it! THIS MUST GO FOR ALL TIME BEST AT FS, I WISH.
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A gifted poet indeed. What a banter in ironic punch! This is perhaps the price to the parents by the misconception grown and fearful children's drastic action reward. Superb in Tanka. How clear and the flow is doubtlessly balanced. Kudos. No banter a poet genius could only make it! THIS MUST GO FOR ALL TIME BEST AT FS, I WISH.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2006
Comment from AmokMuse
Wow. What hurt we give our children unintentionally when we tease and go too far. Often they take things very literally and are hurt in the process, even when the "banter" is truly meant in fun. Thanks for this. Cyndee
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Wow. What hurt we give our children unintentionally when we tease and go too far. Often they take things very literally and are hurt in the process, even when the "banter" is truly meant in fun. Thanks for this. Cyndee
Comment Written 04-Apr-2006
Comment from rivki1111
Hi, its rivki and I enjoyed this very unique work....careful choice of words here really works and maxizes the effect for the reader...Great flow through with imagery and nicely desk top published...nothing to fix and I have no suggestions for improvement.
Thanks for getting this out there to be read, it was my pleasure and I would definitely recommend it to other readers to review, cheers rivki
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Hi, its rivki and I enjoyed this very unique work....careful choice of words here really works and maxizes the effect for the reader...Great flow through with imagery and nicely desk top published...nothing to fix and I have no suggestions for improvement.
Thanks for getting this out there to be read, it was my pleasure and I would definitely recommend it to other readers to review, cheers rivki
Comment Written 04-Apr-2006
