Oh Life!
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Comment from cheyennewy
This is an amazing tanka. I find it to be powerful and even though it is terse it still packs a literary punch. So much with so little...well done...you have mastered the art of the short poem! cheyenne
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This is an amazing tanka. I find it to be powerful and even though it is terse it still packs a literary punch. So much with so little...well done...you have mastered the art of the short poem! cheyenne
Comment Written 01-Jun-2006
Comment from jwsteele
This poem is quite powerful. I read it over several times and I only understood parts of it. That is not meant as a derogatory comment. I read a lot of poetry I don't understand right away. Sometimes it dawns on me later what the poet was inferring. Sometimes never. Of course I know usually the meaning gets lost in translation. I have writtwen many poems that are interperated far different than I wrote them. But that is part of the mystery of poetry for me. So I like the poem.
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This poem is quite powerful. I read it over several times and I only understood parts of it. That is not meant as a derogatory comment. I read a lot of poetry I don't understand right away. Sometimes it dawns on me later what the poet was inferring. Sometimes never. Of course I know usually the meaning gets lost in translation. I have writtwen many poems that are interperated far different than I wrote them. But that is part of the mystery of poetry for me. So I like the poem.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2006
Comment from lovebear641
at first i thought you meant giving blood ..but reread it ..then i thought you meant giving birth ..rearead it again ..now i dont know what you meant ..sorry ..but i give you a 5 for your very creative and that is what i think a person should do...read and take their own view on it
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at first i thought you meant giving blood ..but reread it ..then i thought you meant giving birth ..rearead it again ..now i dont know what you meant ..sorry ..but i give you a 5 for your very creative and that is what i think a person should do...read and take their own view on it
Comment Written 01-Jun-2006
Comment from Mzhurst
When it comes to reviewing this style I am tottally out of my element. LOl
But, from what I have gleaned it is structurly correct. so a 5 it is.
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When it comes to reviewing this style I am tottally out of my element. LOl
But, from what I have gleaned it is structurly correct. so a 5 it is.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2006
Comment from Elizabeth Anne
Excellent, well written. Poetic, short and sweet. You give the reader something to
reread and discuss.
Well done.
Liz :o)
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Excellent, well written. Poetic, short and sweet. You give the reader something to
reread and discuss.
Well done.
Liz :o)
Comment Written 01-Jun-2006
Comment from Barbara-Anne
I am always amazed at how rich an image can be portrayed in such a small amount of words! You have chosen some great words and built them into a very structured form exceedingly well. Thank you for sharing this piece with us.
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I am always amazed at how rich an image can be portrayed in such a small amount of words! You have chosen some great words and built them into a very structured form exceedingly well. Thank you for sharing this piece with us.
Comment Written 31-May-2006
Comment from Swtdreamz
I gifted life, blood,- blood- the essence- but I gifted?
Light, sleepless-restless day-nights,- those are the worst
As caressed, taught words.- by societal means
My word may hurt, you fear to
Disown me. Shame, how banter! - dramatic i say
good job
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I gifted life, blood,- blood- the essence- but I gifted?
Light, sleepless-restless day-nights,- those are the worst
As caressed, taught words.- by societal means
My word may hurt, you fear to
Disown me. Shame, how banter! - dramatic i say
good job
Comment Written 31-May-2006
Comment from Georgina Lenty
I like this - the way you manage to (very short and simply) describe a parent's fear of how their children will handle their words as they're being raise. At least, this is what I got out of it (am I wrong?). Well done!
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I like this - the way you manage to (very short and simply) describe a parent's fear of how their children will handle their words as they're being raise. At least, this is what I got out of it (am I wrong?). Well done!
Comment Written 31-May-2006
Comment from PineBoxPoet
A very strong and well thoughtout piece. I think many will remember this one long after they've read it. Great job on the flow, meter, imagery and format. Nice work!
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A very strong and well thoughtout piece. I think many will remember this one long after they've read it. Great job on the flow, meter, imagery and format. Nice work!
Comment Written 31-May-2006
Comment from MikeSamford
More compressed thought and again your poem speaks to me, this time it says,Disown me. Shame, how banter! And that is all it said and yet that is more than plenty, good poem.
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More compressed thought and again your poem speaks to me, this time it says,Disown me. Shame, how banter! And that is all it said and yet that is more than plenty, good poem.
Comment Written 30-May-2006
