Comment from cvcopac

Excellent

Intriguing but not totally understandble. My inkling is: though the parent may nurture, in good faith, it may be in vain and the child is left powerless to change. Kenny

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, alcreator, you did an excellent jbo writing this free verse poem about the loss of companionship with a parent, i enjoyed reading this one

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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Comment from Caressa_08

Excellent

This is an easy read with much depth, that can carry one into a parental situation that children don't always comprehend though taught & caressed, in a loving way, they, the children might rebel & parents might feel shame toward them at times, though it happens,which is not in your poem, around puberty & beyond...the most prevalent time..At least it was for me after raising 3 adults, they are now..

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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Comment from visionary1234

Excellent

I gifted life, blood,
Light, sleepless-restless day-nights,
As caressed, taught words.
My word may hurt, you fear to
Disown me. Shame, how wonder -

ok Al - I've got the first 3 lines, and even the 4th, though you don't explain why the fear of disowning. But the last "Shame, now wonder!" is a mystery to me, sorry!

:)S

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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Comment from vkmack

Excellent

We are all filled with fear of hurt and pain from others and in need of life blood. Love the phrasing for "sleepless-restless day-nights" when it all flows into one with no discernment. This is so creative and imaginative! Great work. Thanks for the explanatory notes.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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Comment from bkbehera

Excellent

"I gifted life, blood,
Light, sleepless-restless day-nights,
As caressed, taught words".
Certainly, you are right. How to interpret life depends on person basis and the than situation. Lovely piece of work

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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Comment from Ekim777

Excellent

Your background words remind me of the great poet Eliot, when he says:" Where is the life, we have lost in living?
I find it difficult to connect up your platitudes but I suppose a deeply felt love needs to be a little disjointed and sporadic. I think the basic question is how does love survive our inner fears, guilt and shame. On the other hand, only love can help us survive these things.-Ekim777

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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Comment from OLA THOMAS

Excellent

Good persoanl form of presnetation. I wonder at the strong words sounding like a form of admonition from a bitter mother to an unappreciate child. Good work.

ola thomas

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013

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Comment from Treischel

Excellent

This Poe,m has the structure of a Naani. The message is about family. Genetics are carried in the blood. Sometime the grown child sees things more clearly and comes into conflict with parents. Might be disowned. You bring this forward with phrasing and imagery. Abbreviated, yet organized.

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Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

The message is clear and to the point. The passion of the writer is felt. This piece is short, sweet and to the point.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013