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Comment from susand3022
Hi Barbara, I'm so glad to be back to the reading again. I'll be doing it by author... sort of. When I get to your chapter, I'm going for all of them at once. I know I've been away for a bit. I do love this book. In a perfect world, you could post a whole chapter at once. ;)
On a separate thought... I didn't have the pleasure of reading the book you are trying to name, but your husband is right about that title. It sounds a bit like something you found in a massage parlor for Orthodox Jews. (Could there be such a thing?) Of course, if that's what your book revolves around, then it's perfect! ;)
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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Hi Barbara, I'm so glad to be back to the reading again. I'll be doing it by author... sort of. When I get to your chapter, I'm going for all of them at once. I know I've been away for a bit. I do love this book. In a perfect world, you could post a whole chapter at once. ;)
On a separate thought... I didn't have the pleasure of reading the book you are trying to name, but your husband is right about that title. It sounds a bit like something you found in a massage parlor for Orthodox Jews. (Could there be such a thing?) Of course, if that's what your book revolves around, then it's perfect! ;)
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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LOL I have nixed that title. Thank you for the kind review. I will posting the next one in a little bit.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Barbara
Always a good chapter when dogs are included LoL. I like the way McKenzie shows her human side by expressing a hint of insecurity regarding another woman and Logan. In my opinion, it rounds out the character a bit more.
Well done!
Bev
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Hi, Barbara
Always a good chapter when dogs are included LoL. I like the way McKenzie shows her human side by expressing a hint of insecurity regarding another woman and Logan. In my opinion, it rounds out the character a bit more.
Well done!
Bev
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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I agree. How can we relate to a character if there's not real emotions? Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome, barbara. :)
Comment from Bill Pinder
This is another well written chapter in your book about Logan and McKenzie. Do you have a good interaction between the main characters it is very believable.. Bill
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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This is another well written chapter in your book about Logan and McKenzie. Do you have a good interaction between the main characters it is very believable.. Bill
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cass Carlton
Now I don't know what this previous book is about, but it seems to me that a book's title should impart something of its content, Love's Kosher Quandary doesn't give any clue about the book,Unless there is a vague clue by using the word:"Kosher". I would suggest using a different title. Try using the location of the story like London Quest or Manchester Mayhem.
I need to read the story before I comment, but the suggested title would put me off reading anything with a title like that. TRuly ruly. cheers Cass
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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Now I don't know what this previous book is about, but it seems to me that a book's title should impart something of its content, Love's Kosher Quandary doesn't give any clue about the book,Unless there is a vague clue by using the word:"Kosher". I would suggest using a different title. Try using the location of the story like London Quest or Manchester Mayhem.
I need to read the story before I comment, but the suggested title would put me off reading anything with a title like that. TRuly ruly. cheers Cass
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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Okay, Did you read the actual post? I can't tell from the review. I have already ruled out that title. thank you. Oh yea, the heroine is Jewish.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Barbara, a wonderful Wednesday to you, I hope this finds you well. Another chapter in the books, you gotta stop playing with my emotions, every time they are about to have a moment, it's interrupted. I have never experienced so much "sexual tension" in a story before. lol Good job and have a great day!
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Hello Barbara, a wonderful Wednesday to you, I hope this finds you well. Another chapter in the books, you gotta stop playing with my emotions, every time they are about to have a moment, it's interrupted. I have never experienced so much "sexual tension" in a story before. lol Good job and have a great day!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from robyn corum
Barbara,
HUZZAH! Congrats on the new book! Did you pub it yourself or was it traditionally published? I'm excited either way, just curious - I'm trying to decide what to do with my Sunbonnet novella.
This was a great chapter - I really enjoyed the interaction. One note:
--> He offered his hand to help her up. "Can't sleep?"
--> up from where?
Thanks!
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2020
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Barbara,
HUZZAH! Congrats on the new book! Did you pub it yourself or was it traditionally published? I'm excited either way, just curious - I'm trying to decide what to do with my Sunbonnet novella.
This was a great chapter - I really enjoyed the interaction. One note:
--> He offered his hand to help her up. "Can't sleep?"
--> up from where?
Thanks!
Comment Written 09-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2020
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She was sitting on the stairs. I will make it clearer. Thank you for the kind review. I went through Amazon. I've gotten tired of attempted a traditional publishing company. I had one for the Savanna book and they kept wanting to me change things and I did, then after about a year they decided it was controversial. I don't write controversial work. I just gave up.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I haven't had a chance to follow
your stories, Barbara, but since this
was a new part, I wanted to read it.
-I love the picture.
-The story flows very well with the dialogue
between the couple, and we see
a bit of their routine, interests, and feelings.
-You get across the idea that they
seem to still be learning about one another.
-Logan is very caring and concerned about
her not sleeping, and gets her to relax.
-He also seems to like her dogs!
-The last section about Delilah was very good, too.
-I was looking at the list of characters
and references, and noticed for Yadi, you
have his name begin with a T.
-I enjoyed reading this and learning
a little about your writing, too.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2020
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-I haven't had a chance to follow
your stories, Barbara, but since this
was a new part, I wanted to read it.
-I love the picture.
-The story flows very well with the dialogue
between the couple, and we see
a bit of their routine, interests, and feelings.
-You get across the idea that they
seem to still be learning about one another.
-Logan is very caring and concerned about
her not sleeping, and gets her to relax.
-He also seems to like her dogs!
-The last section about Delilah was very good, too.
-I was looking at the list of characters
and references, and noticed for Yadi, you
have his name begin with a T.
-I enjoyed reading this and learning
a little about your writing, too.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2020
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I will correct Yadi. I hadn't noticed that. Thank you for the kind review.
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You are quite welcome.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a really nice part, Barbara. There is romance building between them, which is obvious when Mac is questioning Logan about whether he finds Delilah attractive. She wouldn't let it drop either, when he told her he thought Mac was prettier. Lol. Well done, my friend, I enjoyed this part, and I loooooove the picture! :)) Sandra xxx
Your title. No, I'm with your husband on that one, but I don't think you should mention religion at all. How about just having, 'Shana's Quandary' (I'm not sure if Quandry is a spelling mistake, or the way it's spelt in the US)
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2020
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That was a really nice part, Barbara. There is romance building between them, which is obvious when Mac is questioning Logan about whether he finds Delilah attractive. She wouldn't let it drop either, when he told her he thought Mac was prettier. Lol. Well done, my friend, I enjoyed this part, and I loooooove the picture! :)) Sandra xxx
Your title. No, I'm with your husband on that one, but I don't think you should mention religion at all. How about just having, 'Shana's Quandary' (I'm not sure if Quandry is a spelling mistake, or the way it's spelt in the US)
Comment Written 09-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2020
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Thank you for the kind review. Shana's Quandary is growing on me.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Again another great chapter. The characters and their conversations alway soundsso real I am surprised when get to the end. I'm waiting on the next chapter!
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2020
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Again another great chapter. The characters and their conversations alway soundsso real I am surprised when get to the end. I'm waiting on the next chapter!
Comment Written 09-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tfawcus
Congratulations on the publication of 'Under Siege on the Rockin' A'. A fine achievement!
As for the title of your new book, I'd probably go for a one or two-word title, rather than three words.
Snappy dialogue in this chapter but not much plot progression, except on the romantic front! She sure put the poor guy on the spot, didn't she? LOL
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2020
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Congratulations on the publication of 'Under Siege on the Rockin' A'. A fine achievement!
As for the title of your new book, I'd probably go for a one or two-word title, rather than three words.
Snappy dialogue in this chapter but not much plot progression, except on the romantic front! She sure put the poor guy on the spot, didn't she? LOL
Comment Written 09-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2020
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Soni has a way of doing that. LOL I appreciate the advice.
