Haiku (wind blow)
a poem6 total reviews
Comment from Susan X Smith
Your word choice is interesting. The syllable count fits the pattern mandated by the contest guidelines. The image that highlights this short piece is wonderful.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Your word choice is interesting. The syllable count fits the pattern mandated by the contest guidelines. The image that highlights this short piece is wonderful.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed this spring-like haiku that brings the blossoming trees rather than the snow storms, few words that spoke volumes here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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I enjoyed this spring-like haiku that brings the blossoming trees rather than the snow storms, few words that spoke volumes here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Haiku (wind blow)
Hello, Mia Twysted,
You have a good haiku for the contest. I can imagine the wind making music through the trees. Good luck in the contest.
gypsy
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Haiku (wind blow)
Hello, Mia Twysted,
You have a good haiku for the contest. I can imagine the wind making music through the trees. Good luck in the contest.
gypsy
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Mistydawn
What a well-written poem. You were able to paint a vivid picture in the reader's mind using very few words. Your artwork is beautiful, colorful perfect for the poem. Good luck with your contest.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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What a well-written poem. You were able to paint a vivid picture in the reader's mind using very few words. Your artwork is beautiful, colorful perfect for the poem. Good luck with your contest.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem and words create a great image for readers. Good job with the syllable count per line. The image is a great pairing, too. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Your poem and words create a great image for readers. Good job with the syllable count per line. The image is a great pairing, too. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Thank you
Comment from susand3022
Hi Mia, I really like your Haiku poem... there are only two things you need to fix.
First, Haiku's don't ever use capital letters unless they're absolutely necessary... like in a proper noun. (it's the same with punctuation. Only with things like Mr. Mrs. it's... stuff like that)
The second thing is the title. All Haiku titles are: Haiku(the first line or first words in the poem) So yours would be: Haiku(wind blows) or Haiku(wind blows through the trees) or Haiku(wind blows through) You get the idea. That's how all Haiku titles are written. Something I learned early from one of the Pro-poets here. They gave me a whole list of Haiku rules after my first disastrous one. I figured... all it is is a 5-7-5... lol little did I realize! LOL
I loved your Haiku Mia! Good luck in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Hi Mia, I really like your Haiku poem... there are only two things you need to fix.
First, Haiku's don't ever use capital letters unless they're absolutely necessary... like in a proper noun. (it's the same with punctuation. Only with things like Mr. Mrs. it's... stuff like that)
The second thing is the title. All Haiku titles are: Haiku(the first line or first words in the poem) So yours would be: Haiku(wind blows) or Haiku(wind blows through the trees) or Haiku(wind blows through) You get the idea. That's how all Haiku titles are written. Something I learned early from one of the Pro-poets here. They gave me a whole list of Haiku rules after my first disastrous one. I figured... all it is is a 5-7-5... lol little did I realize! LOL
I loved your Haiku Mia! Good luck in the contest! :)
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Thank you for the information. I will try to keep that in mind next time I write a Haiku. I will sure to make the corrections needed and am happy to have learned more about this form of writing.