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haiku (electric fingers)

5-7-5 haiku poem

16 total reviews 
Comment from Sally Law
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I see you've come bolting out of the starting gate like a Preakness winner. This has a perfect theme, and visual for the Haiku poetry contest. Very real and foreboding.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest, DD!
Sally xoxo

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2020

reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
    Thank you so much Sally. Your kind review is always welcome. I am trying to slip back into things. My kids and life stuff are dominating my at the moment but I shall persevere. ~DD
Comment from Bill Pinder
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Excellent haiku with personification of lightning as fingers of electricity reaching in the sky with power. Sounds like today's weather where I live.
Bill

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2020

reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
    Hello Bill, thank you so much for taking the time to review my short haiku. I appreciate your comments and enjoy the weekend that is about to be. ~DD
Comment from Susan X Smith
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This is an excellent entry into the Haiku contest. The image works unusually well with the well chosen words. I particularly like the phrase "electric fingers."

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2020

reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
    Susan, thank you for your encouraging review of my haiku. It is very much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Pantygynt
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This has all the ingredients of haiku, nature, kigo (seasonal reference) and most importantly a satori line. I did think that the satori might have been stronger if it had looked ahead. What comes after the 'electric' fingers of the lightning? 'Thunderclaps ahead.'

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 Comment Written 03-Mar-2020

reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
    Thank you, Jim, for your thoughtful and constructive review. It is always appreciated. Your comment on the 'thunderclaps ahead' is considered. However, I witnessed a lightning storm here last week - hence the poem - and the thunderclaps were hardly audible... too far away - but the visual of this thunderstorm was amazing. So inspiring I wrote a haiku. First one in a long while. ~DD
Comment from the13thpoet
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Hello PoemsofDD, a terrific Tuesday to you. I hope this finds you well. That was a nice poem, the words fit the picture perfectly. Good job and good luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 03-Mar-2020

reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
    Thank you very much, the13thpoem, for your thoughtful review on my haiku. It is much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Mark D. R.
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

DD,

Yep, this is my style of poetry!

Your selected artwork expands on your concise description. Do like your lightning, surge, and electricity combo.

Mark

P.S.I am not a fan of italic script font for any poem. Although it 'seems' cute, IMHO, it adds nothing to the overall presentation.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2020

reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
    Mark, thank you so much for the wonderful six stars. I appreciate your candid review, especially on the italic font. To be honest, I was trying to mimic the 'fingers' in the photo. I may play around with it just to see what my options are but thank you again. ~DD