Syllable Counts ...
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Seasons tale"Anything to do with syllables
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Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Bicpen I liked your 3-5-3 so much I bookcased and fanned you lol. I read quite a few of yours, but seems I'm always on my way somewhere when I see them ... smiles
I wonder in this current one about that word "main". Should it be mane or main. Each word would throw around the meaning a bit but would work. I love this format and what you've created with it. Well done you.
xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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Hello Bicpen I liked your 3-5-3 so much I bookcased and fanned you lol. I read quite a few of yours, but seems I'm always on my way somewhere when I see them ... smiles
I wonder in this current one about that word "main". Should it be mane or main. Each word would throw around the meaning a bit but would work. I love this format and what you've created with it. Well done you.
xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 08-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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... MUCH APPRECIATE THE THANKS VERY COOL ...
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Ooooo, love the ethereal feel to this one, George!! ;) Thanx so much for joining the ETO contest fun this time around - great fun!! ;) Take care and have a great remainder of the week! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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Ooooo, love the ethereal feel to this one, George!! ;) Thanx so much for joining the ETO contest fun this time around - great fun!! ;) Take care and have a great remainder of the week! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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excellent much appreciate old friend ...
Comment from Gloria ....
This sounds like a perfect entry into the even the odds contest, author. Your subject perfect to the seasons changing hands. I love the line Winter's tail brushes spring's first born. So visual and vivid.
A fine entry into this contest and best of luck to you in the booth. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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This sounds like a perfect entry into the even the odds contest, author. Your subject perfect to the seasons changing hands. I love the line Winter's tail brushes spring's first born. So visual and vivid.
A fine entry into this contest and best of luck to you in the booth. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 01-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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excellent then it worked ...
Comment from Darlene Franklin
I love what you've done with this even-the-odds poem, making the shorn lion's main the stuff that paves the way for spring, and saying the lamb's tail is strong. Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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I love what you've done with this even-the-odds poem, making the shorn lion's main the stuff that paves the way for spring, and saying the lamb's tail is strong. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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excellent much appreciate ...
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
Brilliant idea on your part to fit the changing of seasons into the requirements for this contest! Cleverly done and well written all round!
One query...is it supposed to be 'main' or 'mane'?
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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Brilliant idea on your part to fit the changing of seasons into the requirements for this contest! Cleverly done and well written all round!
One query...is it supposed to be 'main' or 'mane'?
Comment Written 29-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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got that one already Im claiming insanity ...
Comment from Bill Schott
This Even-Odd poem, Seasons Tale, follows the syllabic format and brings the blustery season from the harsh gales to the gentle breezes of the glowing spring. Nice.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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This Even-Odd poem, Seasons Tale, follows the syllabic format and brings the blustery season from the harsh gales to the gentle breezes of the glowing spring. Nice.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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Excellent much appreciated friend ...
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written even the odds poem about the struggle between the lion's roar/winter's grip and the lamb's soft and determined ways to take control of the season when it's their time to reign.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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A very well-written even the odds poem about the struggle between the lion's roar/winter's grip and the lamb's soft and determined ways to take control of the season when it's their time to reign.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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much appreciated thank you ...
Comment from Natalie Goodwin
I like how you described the changing of the seasons as power swapping hands. I never thought of it that way. I also liked the line " Winter's tail brushes spring's first born,
its main now shorn casts equinox alight." It suggests winter embraces the change. It's a beautiful poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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I like how you described the changing of the seasons as power swapping hands. I never thought of it that way. I also liked the line " Winter's tail brushes spring's first born,
its main now shorn casts equinox alight." It suggests winter embraces the change. It's a beautiful poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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Thank you much appreciated ...
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and
presentation.
-A well written poem
with the correct syllable
count, and very good synonyms.
-I like the personification of
power in the beginning.
-I like the theme of new
birth at spring, represented
by the lamb.
-A couple of small things:
Winters tail [Winter's]
springs first born [spring's]
it's main [its]
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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-Nice artwork and
presentation.
-A well written poem
with the correct syllable
count, and very good synonyms.
-I like the personification of
power in the beginning.
-I like the theme of new
birth at spring, represented
by the lamb.
-A couple of small things:
Winters tail [Winter's]
springs first born [spring's]
it's main [its]
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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excellent much appreciated Pam ... as always
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You are very welcome.
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Thanks Pam hope your are safe and well with death still stalking the land ...
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You are welcome. We are doing very well here. Got our second vaccine shot on Mon. We are blessed. Hope you are doing well, too.
Comment from Jeffrey Ford
I think that you wrote an awesome poem! I enjoy how the power changes as the seasons changes. Especially from winter to spring. It makes me feel as seasons change, life can change. The first born represents for me a new start in life. Amazing poem!
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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I think that you wrote an awesome poem! I enjoy how the power changes as the seasons changes. Especially from winter to spring. It makes me feel as seasons change, life can change. The first born represents for me a new start in life. Amazing poem!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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excellent glad you enjoyed ...
