Mood Changes
Signs of life3 total reviews
Comment from RShipp
Your picture matched your poem nicely.
You did a good job at avoiding the banished words.
"Inside homes, people with the winter blues,
Materialize in happier, more joyful moods."
What a truth!!!
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
Your picture matched your poem nicely.
You did a good job at avoiding the banished words.
"Inside homes, people with the winter blues,
Materialize in happier, more joyful moods."
What a truth!!!
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Thanks for your review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Spring certainly brings a brighter look at everything!! ;) A joyful collection of rhyme that seems to follow a rhyming pattern, of sorts, but the last line is almost stilted with its 'non-rhyme'... perhaps something like 'Everything in spring improves our attitudes' or 'Everything in spring helps to amuse'.... suggestions only to bring rhyme to complete your pattern of: aaabbccdd(?) in to aaabbccddd.... Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls.... :)
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
Spring certainly brings a brighter look at everything!! ;) A joyful collection of rhyme that seems to follow a rhyming pattern, of sorts, but the last line is almost stilted with its 'non-rhyme'... perhaps something like 'Everything in spring improves our attitudes' or 'Everything in spring helps to amuse'.... suggestions only to bring rhyme to complete your pattern of: aaabbccdd(?) in to aaabbccddd.... Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls.... :)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Thanks for the review.
Comment from Lil' Mormon Boy
Good Spring Writing entry. I wish you well in the contest.
Your poem was written well following the entry guidelines.
Your thoughts were easily displayed and understood.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
Good Spring Writing entry. I wish you well in the contest.
Your poem was written well following the entry guidelines.
Your thoughts were easily displayed and understood.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Thanks for the review.