He Still Believed
Charlie story contest entry10 total reviews
Comment from MamaBebop
I always knew that meanie Lucy would get hers.
What a wonderfully creative take on this contest prompt and I see you have the ribbon to show for it. Congratulations!!
It's been sometime since I have seen a Peanuts comic strip. I used to read them with my grandmother on Sundays. Something I miss about not getting the newspaper. I can still get the news, be it real or fake, but can't get the real Sunday funnies.
Congrats again,
MB(Beth)
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020
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I always knew that meanie Lucy would get hers.
What a wonderfully creative take on this contest prompt and I see you have the ribbon to show for it. Congratulations!!
It's been sometime since I have seen a Peanuts comic strip. I used to read them with my grandmother on Sundays. Something I miss about not getting the newspaper. I can still get the news, be it real or fake, but can't get the real Sunday funnies.
Congrats again,
MB(Beth)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020
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Yeah, I miss the Sunday funnies too. Now I go on Ebay and buy books. Lol. Thank you for the fantastic review, Beth. I really appreciate the generous stars and congrats. Charlie Brown was the first Charlie that came to mind when I saw the contest so I just went with it. Lol. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Thank you again, Beth. Have a great night.
Ron
Comment from gingermo
An interesting story has the reader guessing?...Did Lucy have to do with his accident that he forgave her? A shocking ending though considering the description of Lucy's character one might go so far as to say she deserved it. A lesson here maybe not to allow someone to mistreat you to the extent you become so angry you do them harm and you go to prison.A tragedy cleverly portrayed in not many words.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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An interesting story has the reader guessing?...Did Lucy have to do with his accident that he forgave her? A shocking ending though considering the description of Lucy's character one might go so far as to say she deserved it. A lesson here maybe not to allow someone to mistreat you to the extent you become so angry you do them harm and you go to prison.A tragedy cleverly portrayed in not many words.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the great review, gingermo. There wasn't actually any lessen I was trying to get across. Just writing a silly story for the contest. Yes, Lucy had to something to do with the accident. She was the reason. He shattered vertebra because she yanked the ball away and he missed it again. Lol. Thank you for the stars, G. Have a great day.
Comment from pharp
Mystery Poet,
Excellent job in the penning of this story...
This was amazing and took me by surprise read.
I was caught off guard to find out Charlie was Charlie Brown and Lucy from Peanuts. This was quite the story my friend and a most enjoyable and fun read. The very best to you in the contest.
Blessings...Portia
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Mystery Poet,
Excellent job in the penning of this story...
This was amazing and took me by surprise read.
I was caught off guard to find out Charlie was Charlie Brown and Lucy from Peanuts. This was quite the story my friend and a most enjoyable and fun read. The very best to you in the contest.
Blessings...Portia
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review, Portia. I really appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked my silly little piece. Have a great day.
Comment from LisaMay
This is so very American. I hate it, but I love it. Getting revenge by shooting someone is the ultimate American response, it seems. I always thought that Lucy was such a bitch to keep pulling the ball away on poor Charlie Brown. She sure deserved some sort of punishment. This is wonderful storytelling.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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This is so very American. I hate it, but I love it. Getting revenge by shooting someone is the ultimate American response, it seems. I always thought that Lucy was such a bitch to keep pulling the ball away on poor Charlie Brown. She sure deserved some sort of punishment. This is wonderful storytelling.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Wow, thank you so much for the fantastic review and giant sixer, Lisa. Yeah, he had to go to the extreme after all those years of lies. Haha. I love messing with people's childhood memories. I really appreciate the gracious stars, Lisa. I'm glad you liked my twisted little tale. Have a great day.
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Comment from LyndaS
This is great! I had really no idea where you were going with this until I read, "Lucy pulled the football...". This is very well written and held my attention from the get-go. An excellent entry into this contest! Sooooo cute and funny. Well done. Lynda
PS. Your GIF of Charlie Brown and Lucy appears quite a bit lower than the text. I almost missed it.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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This is great! I had really no idea where you were going with this until I read, "Lucy pulled the football...". This is very well written and held my attention from the get-go. An excellent entry into this contest! Sooooo cute and funny. Well done. Lynda
PS. Your GIF of Charlie Brown and Lucy appears quite a bit lower than the text. I almost missed it.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Hahaha. I love knocking down our childhood icons. I dearly, see that "dearly," appreciate the big sixer, Lynda. I'm glad you liked my little tale of a murdering Charlie Brown. Have a great night, L.
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Comment from BethShelby
Ahh. . . You've taken poor Charlie and made a criminal out of him. After all those years we he and Lucy were playmates. What a sad end to Lucy. Schultz would be so upset knowing his character came to such a sad end.
Seriously this was very creative. We all like a surprise ending.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Ahh. . . You've taken poor Charlie and made a criminal out of him. After all those years we he and Lucy were playmates. What a sad end to Lucy. Schultz would be so upset knowing his character came to such a sad end.
Seriously this was very creative. We all like a surprise ending.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Beth. I really appreciate the generous stars. Yes, Mr. Schultz wouldn't be a happy camper, that's for sure. Haha. Thank you again, Beth. Have a wonderful night.
Comment from Gideon300
LOL! Lucy and the football. I never would have guessed he had it in him.
Nice surprise ending. The family might not have been shocked but I was. I enjoyed reading it. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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LOL! Lucy and the football. I never would have guessed he had it in him.
Nice surprise ending. The family might not have been shocked but I was. I enjoyed reading it. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Giddeon. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you ha da chuckle at this silly piece. Have a great rest of your weekend.
Comment from Marilyn Lou Berry
Sure grabbed my attention and held it till the last line that made me nearly scream. Well-crafted dark story. I like dark stories. Your paragraphs were clear and transitioned to each next one well. A really good read!!!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Sure grabbed my attention and held it till the last line that made me nearly scream. Well-crafted dark story. I like dark stories. Your paragraphs were clear and transitioned to each next one well. A really good read!!!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review, Marilyn. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. Yeah, I tend to go to the darker side a bit. Lol. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
Comment from GE Parson
Well, you had me going on this story. I think it really cool that you used a cartoon to writ about ol' Charley. You really captured the Ha Ha in your story. That Lucy was one mean girl. Great story!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Well, you had me going on this story. I think it really cool that you used a cartoon to writ about ol' Charley. You really captured the Ha Ha in your story. That Lucy was one mean girl. Great story!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the fantastic review, GE Parson. I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. Yeah, she wasn't very nice to him, that's for sure. Haha. Have a great rest of your weekend.
Comment from w.j.debi
What a creative take on the contest prompt. It was worth reading a a second time to see how well you set up the storyline. Great job.
Best of luck in the contest.
It's been awhile since I've seen a Peanuts comic strip. I guess that is the thing I miss most about not getting the newspaper. I did like the comics.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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What a creative take on the contest prompt. It was worth reading a a second time to see how well you set up the storyline. Great job.
Best of luck in the contest.
It's been awhile since I've seen a Peanuts comic strip. I guess that is the thing I miss most about not getting the newspaper. I did like the comics.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Lol. Yeah, now I have to go on Ebay and buy books for my comic strip humor. Lol. Thank you for the fantastic review and gracious stars, Debi. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Have a great rest of your weekend.
