RESIDUE OF WAR
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28 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker
Fantastic poem. Very sweet. It tugs at the reader's heart strings. So many of us experience regret at not treating our loved ones better. I have regrets about my mom. There are so many things I want to say and do with her--now she's gone. In the narrators' case, it's her father. A very touching and beautiful work. Good luck and Happy Easter.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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Fantastic poem. Very sweet. It tugs at the reader's heart strings. So many of us experience regret at not treating our loved ones better. I have regrets about my mom. There are so many things I want to say and do with her--now she's gone. In the narrators' case, it's her father. A very touching and beautiful work. Good luck and Happy Easter.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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Thank you Cindy. Regrets are no fun, but part of life. I hope you find peace yourself xoxo
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You captured the feelings well of the daughter not knowing and believing things would have been different. Your lines flow smoothly with good rhymes and great imagery. Your words are poignant and expresses the thoughts of the one who found the letters well. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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You captured the feelings well of the daughter not knowing and believing things would have been different. Your lines flow smoothly with good rhymes and great imagery. Your words are poignant and expresses the thoughts of the one who found the letters well. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 09-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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Thank you Jan, I'm glad you enjoyed it xoxoxo
Comment from June Sargent
This is a poignant and touching piece that captures the bittersweet memories of a relationship that was always strong. But she never knew how strong until she read his letters from the heart. Now the bond is even deeper -even though her dad is gone.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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This is a poignant and touching piece that captures the bittersweet memories of a relationship that was always strong. But she never knew how strong until she read his letters from the heart. Now the bond is even deeper -even though her dad is gone.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much June. I'm glad you enjoyed it xoxoxo
Comment from RShipp
What a heart-felt flowing of love and compassion you have completed in these verses.
Too many times, the life of a soldier is misunderstood by those who love them- through no actual fault of thier own- nor of teh soldiers.
So many feelings and experiences that needed to be released, yet the words just don't flow.
Well done!
Best of luck in the Rhyming Poem contest.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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What a heart-felt flowing of love and compassion you have completed in these verses.
Too many times, the life of a soldier is misunderstood by those who love them- through no actual fault of thier own- nor of teh soldiers.
So many feelings and experiences that needed to be released, yet the words just don't flow.
Well done!
Best of luck in the Rhyming Poem contest.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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Thank you RShipp, for your thoughtful comments and good luck wishes xoxo
Comment from RShipp
What a heart-felt flowing of love and compassion you have completed in these verses.
Too many times, the life of a soldier is misunderstood by those who love them- through no actual fault of thier own- nor of teh soldiers.
So many feelings and experiences that needed to be released, yet the words just don't flow.
Well done!
Best of luck in the Rhyming Poem contest.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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What a heart-felt flowing of love and compassion you have completed in these verses.
Too many times, the life of a soldier is misunderstood by those who love them- through no actual fault of thier own- nor of teh soldiers.
So many feelings and experiences that needed to be released, yet the words just don't flow.
Well done!
Best of luck in the Rhyming Poem contest.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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Thanks again for a second review lol
Comment from Frank Jauregui
Beautifully written poem of precious memories although with regrets. But hindsight is twenty-twenty as your title implies, If Only. I've found the best thing to do with good memories is to remember them forever, but all the others - forgive and forget. That's what truly sets us free. God bless you.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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Beautifully written poem of precious memories although with regrets. But hindsight is twenty-twenty as your title implies, If Only. I've found the best thing to do with good memories is to remember them forever, but all the others - forgive and forget. That's what truly sets us free. God bless you.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much Frank. Bless you right back xoxo and you're right!
Comment from samandlancelot
GypsyMoonCat,
I love the way the daughter realizes truths about her dad she never knew. It was too late to change anything, but she missed him, his Princess Boo. I loved your rhymes and rhythm throughout.
Beautiful!
Just one minor catch:
of misconceptions keeping us apart -
the time we lost! (this part doesn't have the great rhythm the rest of your poem has.
Patricia
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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GypsyMoonCat,
I love the way the daughter realizes truths about her dad she never knew. It was too late to change anything, but she missed him, his Princess Boo. I loved your rhymes and rhythm throughout.
Beautiful!
Just one minor catch:
of misconceptions keeping us apart -
the time we lost! (this part doesn't have the great rhythm the rest of your poem has.
Patricia
Comment Written 08-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and comments. I went over that part you pointed out, and agreed, so have fixed it. Thanks for that also!
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That works well.
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Thanks Patricia! I appreciated you mentioning it, and am glad it reads better
Comment from Bill Pinder
I enjoyed reading this well written poem that expresses the heartfelt sorrow of a daughter dealing with very painful memories involving her father. Thanks for sharing your creativity in this story within a poem. Bill
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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I enjoyed reading this well written poem that expresses the heartfelt sorrow of a daughter dealing with very painful memories involving her father. Thanks for sharing your creativity in this story within a poem. Bill
Comment Written 08-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much Bill xoxoxo
Comment from Michelle LM Gale
This is a powerful poem, well written and from the heart. Regret is such a difficult emotion to come to terms with, once grief has subsided it is still there to be dealt with. This poem shows that struggle. Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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This is a powerful poem, well written and from the heart. Regret is such a difficult emotion to come to terms with, once grief has subsided it is still there to be dealt with. This poem shows that struggle. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much Michelle, or your comments and for the six stars!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was an amazing, poem, and if it's not a winner, I'll be very surprised. I could feel that little girls pain in all the lines. You covered everything in this poem, the happiness and sadness, the laughter and tears, the anger, the depression, the breakup of her parents, the coming around to talk it all out. Brilliant, only sorry I can't give you a six. But I can wish you the very best of luck in the contest! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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That was an amazing, poem, and if it's not a winner, I'll be very surprised. I could feel that little girls pain in all the lines. You covered everything in this poem, the happiness and sadness, the laughter and tears, the anger, the depression, the breakup of her parents, the coming around to talk it all out. Brilliant, only sorry I can't give you a six. But I can wish you the very best of luck in the contest! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Thank you Sandra, I am honoured by your comments, your good luck wishes and your virtual six! xoxoxoxo
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You are very welcome. I just read it to my husband, he was just as touched as I was. xx
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That's an even bigger honour to have it read to your hubby. Thank you again xoxo
