Time for my Life
An Acrostic- Loop Poem8 total reviews
Comment from Aaron Milavec
Poets have their own settled instincts, and I hesitate to say anything to you. Yet, for what it is worth, I risk sharing my perception (which may not be yours):
Pic is attractive and fits with the theme.
The loop is clever but it doesn't build up or add clarity as it goes. The capital "Q" is a distraction.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Poets have their own settled instincts, and I hesitate to say anything to you. Yet, for what it is worth, I risk sharing my perception (which may not be yours):
Pic is attractive and fits with the theme.
The loop is clever but it doesn't build up or add clarity as it goes. The capital "Q" is a distraction.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Which capital Q there are two of them, obviously you set yourself no challenges-good for you!
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"Q" in the final line.
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Q is the connection that makes the loop, your perception is fine your knowledge is lacking
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I am a fallible human being like yourself. I'm trying to enter sensitively into your experience. The language sets we inhabit due to our upbringing and education are decidedly different. So the words misfire, they sputter, they offend. Words are such frail vessels for our endeavors to communicate. I beg your forgiveness. I brought too much of my experience to your poem. I should have preferred to remain QUIET.
Aaron
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One can never offer or have to much experience
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
You followed the rules of the contest well. I like what you did with the beginning of each line. The lines spell ... quiet. The presentation is very pretty. Good job
Gypsy
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Hello, my friend,
You followed the rules of the contest well. I like what you did with the beginning of each line. The lines spell ... quiet. The presentation is very pretty. Good job
Gypsy
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Quiet writing prompt.
This verse is an Acrostic and Loop. Very tricky.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the Quiet writing prompt.
This verse is an Acrostic and Loop. Very tricky.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved the sentiments and your poem is well thought out as it is not easy to create a loop and an acrostic together, but you scored here with this one, magical words, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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I loved the sentiments and your poem is well thought out as it is not easy to create a loop and an acrostic together, but you scored here with this one, magical words, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Joan E.
I relished your combining an acrostic with a loop poem. I admired your sharing your personal reflections and wish you "peace and quiet". The title and artwork helped to establish the mood as well. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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I relished your combining an acrostic with a loop poem. I admired your sharing your personal reflections and wish you "peace and quiet". The title and artwork helped to establish the mood as well. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much, it was fun trying a combination poem
Comment from moongirlwriter
Very nice piece. . .and I do like the artwork you've chosen as well. There are times when all we need to do is be quiet and listen to our soul speak. Best of luck to you with this piece.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Very nice piece. . .and I do like the artwork you've chosen as well. There are times when all we need to do is be quiet and listen to our soul speak. Best of luck to you with this piece.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Natalie Goodwin
I love that you were able to make this a loop poem and include the acrostic QUIET. I also like the message of having a special time every day to indulge in quiet and just dream. We all need to learn to relax more. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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I love that you were able to make this a loop poem and include the acrostic QUIET. I also like the message of having a special time every day to indulge in quiet and just dream. We all need to learn to relax more. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much, it was fun trying a combination poem with a theme
Comment from Dancemom
This is a well-written Poem for the quiet poetry contest. You are very clever by making an acrostic from the word quiet while also making a loop poem.
Great job! Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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This is a well-written Poem for the quiet poetry contest. You are very clever by making an acrostic from the word quiet while also making a loop poem.
Great job! Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much, it was fun trying a combination poem for this prompt